Pete the Pigeon
A baby bird who refused to fly his cardboard condo...26 total reviews
Comment from F. Wehr3
Love your humor! Great story! I am an animal lover as well, but I don't take to this level, lol.
Hi Pete's--I thought about this for a bit. Does this need a possessive? Or is it Hi Petes?
A no frills condo inclusive of an open feeding schedule beat a tree nest and the occasional worm, hands up, any day. -- I've never heard of hands up, but rather hands down?
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Love your humor! Great story! I am an animal lover as well, but I don't take to this level, lol.
Hi Pete's--I thought about this for a bit. Does this need a possessive? Or is it Hi Petes?
A no frills condo inclusive of an open feeding schedule beat a tree nest and the occasional worm, hands up, any day. -- I've never heard of hands up, but rather hands down?
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Hi Russell, thank you for the RR&R and you bring up a great question regarding the Pete's. It was meant to represent multiples of the greeting "Hi Pete" , so now I'm in a quandary about that. I don't know the correct answer, honestly. I may have to go back in there and reword the sentence to avoid the misuse....Hmmmm. You raised a great question. As to the hands up reference, it goes to the earlier part of the story and was meant to be tongue in cheek, my husband walked under a tree as the baby pidge fell right into his open hands...I was making a play on the "hands down" phrase. I love your reviews and am going to make a note to nominate you as a review at my next refill! Have a great day and thanks again for the awesome review and questions.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I think animals can the 'sucker' from miles away.
That 'ugly' incident was terrible! She never should have done that.
You always write wonderfully and full of humor as well.
teresa
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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I think animals can the 'sucker' from miles away.
That 'ugly' incident was terrible! She never should have done that.
You always write wonderfully and full of humor as well.
teresa
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Teresa, for another great review and rating. I appreciate your continued interest. I agree on the ugly incident, and as my mom opined on it later, the woman grew up on a farm in Iowa, and farm people sometimes do what they have to do to end suffering, not that either of us agreed it was okay to do, just offered perspective from my wise mom. A heads up at the very least would have been nice...
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mary,
I admire the fact that you don't split your pieces up to make them more digestible for the FS masses. I'm going back to this myself as I did the same thing initially but it isn't conducive to off-site writing! LOL
As always a great turn of phrase, expertly interjected at the most appropriate places. great pacing and an excellent touch of humour throughout.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Hi Mary,
I admire the fact that you don't split your pieces up to make them more digestible for the FS masses. I'm going back to this myself as I did the same thing initially but it isn't conducive to off-site writing! LOL
As always a great turn of phrase, expertly interjected at the most appropriate places. great pacing and an excellent touch of humour throughout.
All the best
G
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016
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Thank you so very much, GiraffmanG, for the RR&R and support of a longer read, both in reading it and in supporting my decision not to break them into parts. I might sometime try it to see if it garners more reviews, my guess is it won't. It might be an interesting test though on a piece I'm not totally 'invested of heart' in... Thank you for your kind remarks too. Much appreciated coming from the #3 short works writer on FanStory. Humbled and honored, am I!
By the way, my maternal grandparents hailed from Ireland, grandmother from Eyeries on the Beara peninsula, and my maternal grandfather from County Cork. Very cool to me to have you reviewing my work the Northern part of their native country. The miracle of technology! Have a great evening!
Comment from Judy Couch
This is written well and is funny. One thing I especially liked is: "Asthma sufferers avoid us like politicians avoid the truth."
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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This is written well and is funny. One thing I especially liked is: "Asthma sufferers avoid us like politicians avoid the truth."
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Judy, for the RR&R. I appreciate your visit and comments very much. Have a great evening!
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Mary. This is a very interesting and well-written story. Excellent layout of the story and great images throughout, like:
"Dressed in office attire while running and flapping across the acreage looked a little weird by anyone's standards. Mine included. Rather than lift off, Pete rode me like John Wayne rode horses. Wings flapping as he rode my hunched over back into the sunset. The only lift Pete was up for was the ride back home inside his cardboard condo."
Suggestions. I dotink you have "drawn this out much too far with all the videos etc" The writing....good writing on here is key. One video would have been sufficient I think.
Good writing from start to finish. The clossing line is great humor, too. Blessings. Bob
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Hi, Mary. This is a very interesting and well-written story. Excellent layout of the story and great images throughout, like:
"Dressed in office attire while running and flapping across the acreage looked a little weird by anyone's standards. Mine included. Rather than lift off, Pete rode me like John Wayne rode horses. Wings flapping as he rode my hunched over back into the sunset. The only lift Pete was up for was the ride back home inside his cardboard condo."
Suggestions. I dotink you have "drawn this out much too far with all the videos etc" The writing....good writing on here is key. One video would have been sufficient I think.
Good writing from start to finish. The clossing line is great humor, too. Blessings. Bob
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Good morning, Bob. Thank you for the RR&R. Much appreciated. I enjoyed learning the parts that struck your funny bone, and can appreciate your suggestion on the videos. I have removed the generic Google one that I originally posted as the stand alone as I was having a time uploading my own, then forgot to remove it before posting. Thanks again, and have a great day.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This is hilarious fun, and interesting too. Sounds like you lead a most unusual life, and have a great time doing it. :)
the case of my parent's marriage <-- parents', plural so apostrophe after the S
Asthma sufferers avoid us like politicians avoid the truth. <-- LOL! Love it!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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This is hilarious fun, and interesting too. Sounds like you lead a most unusual life, and have a great time doing it. :)
the case of my parent's marriage <-- parents', plural so apostrophe after the S
Asthma sufferers avoid us like politicians avoid the truth. <-- LOL! Love it!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Thank you, Phyllis, for your RR&R and the fabulous SIXER! And for the catch on parents', which I have corrected. I appreciate that. Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Spitfire
All of this is delightful, but again, you'd get more reviews by posting it as two episodes-- first the cat (I was horrified by what that woman did--signs of a sociopath)
Then the pigeon. (Great videos)
You, me dear, have a wonderful gift for fresh similes and metaphors as well a sense of humor.
Bet the humane shelter and wildlife charities are milking you. LOL
Remember: Shorter pieces get more reviews.
Affectionately,
Shari
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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All of this is delightful, but again, you'd get more reviews by posting it as two episodes-- first the cat (I was horrified by what that woman did--signs of a sociopath)
Then the pigeon. (Great videos)
You, me dear, have a wonderful gift for fresh similes and metaphors as well a sense of humor.
Bet the humane shelter and wildlife charities are milking you. LOL
Remember: Shorter pieces get more reviews.
Affectionately,
Shari
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2016
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Hi Shari, thank you so much for this RR&R, and I do understand reviews are seemingly based favorably toward poetry vs. prose here, but it seems so wrong to me to split them up. It seems to me to interrupt the flow and feel of the story. But I do appreciate your suggestion.
Thank you for the compliments, and continued follow. I truly appreciate you! XO
Comment from MTF1955
Just keep em coming. I loved the part about him rdiing your back like John Wayne rode horses. There are so many funny parts, I could go on forever. Another hilarious story. Mary
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Just keep em coming. I loved the part about him rdiing your back like John Wayne rode horses. There are so many funny parts, I could go on forever. Another hilarious story. Mary
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Haha, thank you so much! I appreciate your continued follow and loved reading your review. No one would have believed it if not for the video, right?! Your SIX is very much appreciated, as well as you for committing to my longer reads! Have a great evening and thank you!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
great story. They should call you the bird whisperer or what ever voice birds use when they talk. Your use of "foooooking" was funny in your last story, a bit much in this one.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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great story. They should call you the bird whisperer or what ever voice birds use when they talk. Your use of "foooooking" was funny in your last story, a bit much in this one.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Thank you, Thomas, for your RR&R, I appreciate your review and your comment of the fooooooking. I look at that as my personal catch-phrase trademark, if you will, and that is why it is present in much of my work. Having said that, I do understand where you are coming from. Thank you and have a great evening.
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Thank you, Thomas, for your RR&R, I appreciate your review and your comment of the fooooooking. I look at that as my personal catch-phrase trademark, if you will, and that is why it is present in much of my work. Having said that, I do understand where you are coming from. Thank you and have a great evening.
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Do you really want to be known as the girl who loves fooooooking?
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mary
= LOL! The videos are too cute.
= Fun, fun SFAFIN story.
= Animals can be far more fun than people-watching.
= After all, animals have character, unlike some ... well, you know.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings ... Jax
<> Publishing VIA ... Jacqueline M Franklin
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Hi, Mary
= LOL! The videos are too cute.
= Fun, fun SFAFIN story.
= Animals can be far more fun than people-watching.
= After all, animals have character, unlike some ... well, you know.
<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers & Blessings ... Jax
<> Publishing VIA ... Jacqueline M Franklin
Comment Written 09-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2016
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Jax, thank you so much for the fantastic review and your remarks as well. I appreciate your continued interest. Have a great evening.
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Jax, thank you so much for the fantastic review and your remarks as well. I appreciate your continued interest. Have a great evening.
