Home and Family Treasures
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Seaside Reflections"Poems about my family members and memories of home
36 total reviews
Comment from gramalot8
Cynthia1.... I really liked this poem. It is beautifully written and your words definitely bring the beauty of the beach and surrounding area to life. And, the young girl comes to life as well. I have 7 granddaughters, so I can relate to that. Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us. Gramalot
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Cynthia1.... I really liked this poem. It is beautifully written and your words definitely bring the beauty of the beach and surrounding area to life. And, the young girl comes to life as well. I have 7 granddaughters, so I can relate to that. Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us. Gramalot
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016
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Why, thank you! I appreciate your comments so much. It must be wonderful having 7 granddaughters! I only have 2 but they mean the world to me.
Cynthia1
Comment from patcelaw
Youth playing in the surf and reflecting on what lies ahead in their growing up years, getting high school out of the way, maybe college and then family. There is a lot for young people to wonder about. I love the free verse and the photo you chose for the work. Pleasing all the way around. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Youth playing in the surf and reflecting on what lies ahead in their growing up years, getting high school out of the way, maybe college and then family. There is a lot for young people to wonder about. I love the free verse and the photo you chose for the work. Pleasing all the way around. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for the positive review.
Cynthia1
Comment from DonandVicki
The alteration in your poem is fun and smooth, easy to read. I love the way that you bring out the feelings and senses of the salty seaside.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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The alteration in your poem is fun and smooth, easy to read. I love the way that you bring out the feelings and senses of the salty seaside.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you for reviewing my poem and I do appreciate the positive comments.
Cynthia1
Comment from RGstar
This is my day of a poem that creates exceptional imagery. Even without the image, this stands alone. Beautiful movement and one of the better ones I have read. Good poetic aura, and a beautifully soft delivery.
Well done.
My best wishes, hope this is battling for a win.
Have a good day,
RGstar
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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This is my day of a poem that creates exceptional imagery. Even without the image, this stands alone. Beautiful movement and one of the better ones I have read. Good poetic aura, and a beautifully soft delivery.
Well done.
My best wishes, hope this is battling for a win.
Have a good day,
RGstar
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Why, thank you! What a positive and detailed review! I do appreciate your comments and your best wishes.
Cynthia1
Comment from Bollie
Beautiful picture, beautiful poem with great imagery that really brings this poem alive. You made me feel like I was standing on the shore with you. Really good job, keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Beautiful picture, beautiful poem with great imagery that really brings this poem alive. You made me feel like I was standing on the shore with you. Really good job, keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Why, thank you, Bollie. What a nice and encouraging review.
Cynthia1
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You're very welcome, Cynthia. It's my pleasure to read and review your poetry. You have a wonderful gift. Have a glorious day.
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You're very welcome, Cynthia. It's my pleasure to read and review your poetry. You have a wonderful gift. Have a glorious day.
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You're very welcome, Cynthia. It's my pleasure to read and review your poetry. You have a wonderful gift. Have a glorious day.
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Thank you.
Comment from Domino 2
Nice touches of alliteration in this well presented free verse, Cynthia.
Maybe all the 5-line stanzas is a coincidence, but if not, I respectfully suggest not being restricted, and use random-length stanzas, broken at dramatic points. Maybe also dispense with ALL punctuation and capital letters, as good line breaks can substitute for this and present a 'cleaner', smoother read.
Top imagery and thoughts of your granddaughter's transformation from a child and on into the future.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Nice touches of alliteration in this well presented free verse, Cynthia.
Maybe all the 5-line stanzas is a coincidence, but if not, I respectfully suggest not being restricted, and use random-length stanzas, broken at dramatic points. Maybe also dispense with ALL punctuation and capital letters, as good line breaks can substitute for this and present a 'cleaner', smoother read.
Top imagery and thoughts of your granddaughter's transformation from a child and on into the future.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you, Domino, for the good suggestions. I am new to this, so I do appreciate the feedback. Have a blessed day.
Cynthia1
Comment from joannakruk
What a great piece that expresseses the innate potential of a young soul. I love the use of the sea as a representation of open vastness, Connecting perfectly with the theme
Top lines
Though rains may fall and winter winds blow,
courage will lift her ever onward toward
life's sweet mysteries
that are yet
Well done
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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What a great piece that expresseses the innate potential of a young soul. I love the use of the sea as a representation of open vastness, Connecting perfectly with the theme
Top lines
Though rains may fall and winter winds blow,
courage will lift her ever onward toward
life's sweet mysteries
that are yet
Well done
Comment Written 12-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you, Joanna, you have lifted my spirits with your encouragement. Bless you.
Cynthia1
Comment from Neonewman
What a wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered for this free verse poetry contest my friend. love the lazy days on the beach. Reveling in the ocean breeze and salty smell.
Best of luck in the contest.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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What a wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered for this free verse poetry contest my friend. love the lazy days on the beach. Reveling in the ocean breeze and salty smell.
Best of luck in the contest.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Steve. I am glad that you enjoyed the poem and I appreciate your good wishes.
Cynthia1
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My pleasure Cynthia!
Comment from Sis Cat
I love this poem. I love how you describe the waning days of summer as a child's
"bare toes wiggle in the sand as
she giggles a
last goodbye."
This is not only a poem about summer, but about maturing and the girl leaving childhood behind as she travels through her seasons of life:
"What future lies ahead? We can
only wonder..."
Thank you for sharing your granddaughter's final summer day at the beach before school begins.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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I love this poem. I love how you describe the waning days of summer as a child's
"bare toes wiggle in the sand as
she giggles a
last goodbye."
This is not only a poem about summer, but about maturing and the girl leaving childhood behind as she travels through her seasons of life:
"What future lies ahead? We can
only wonder..."
Thank you for sharing your granddaughter's final summer day at the beach before school begins.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for this very positive review. I am glad that you mentioned the specifics about what you liked. This is very helpful.
Cynthia1
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a beautifully penned free verse poem, my friend. The alliteration is especially well done. High school days were not my best ones. I hope they are wonderful for her. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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This is a beautifully penned free verse poem, my friend. The alliteration is especially well done. High school days were not my best ones. I hope they are wonderful for her. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 11-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016
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Thank you, Debbie, for the positive review. I hope my granddaughter's days are good ones, too!
Cynthia1
