History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Dryad's Dance"Poems that tell stories of long ago
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Comment from Pantygynt
I had a brief look at this last night and couldn't find the double echo despite calling out quite loudly. Then this morning had disappeared completely except for the subtitle box where it still persists - inaudibly. Now we have an oxymoron, an animated still.
The tree as "wooden maiden, torso spun". Now that is a lovely one. I'd better better go and give my willows a hug. Maybe one of them would reciprocate. Joking aside, this is a beautiful poem with ongoing balletic imagery that one doesn't need to understand literally to'see' the mental picture of the tree in her dance.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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I had a brief look at this last night and couldn't find the double echo despite calling out quite loudly. Then this morning had disappeared completely except for the subtitle box where it still persists - inaudibly. Now we have an oxymoron, an animated still.
The tree as "wooden maiden, torso spun". Now that is a lovely one. I'd better better go and give my willows a hug. Maybe one of them would reciprocate. Joking aside, this is a beautiful poem with ongoing balletic imagery that one doesn't need to understand literally to'see' the mental picture of the tree in her dance.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Never hurts to hug those trees, I realized that I didn't get the echo right, so I changed it in the notes, but missed it in the title, I guess. More like a Welsh poem than echo.
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It is a sweet thing. Without a doubt.
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo of a willow that complements your poem perfectly. And yet another form you introduce to us. I love willows and the way how you personalised them. Nice rhyme all the way.
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An excellent photo of a willow that complements your poem perfectly. And yet another form you introduce to us. I love willows and the way how you personalised them. Nice rhyme all the way.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2016
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Thank you Ine, for this lovely review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great poem about the Dryad in the tree stretching her arms above her head. She weeps and embrace the last warmth of the day. NS. A great photo and I do see the lady standing with het legs crossed.
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A great poem about the Dryad in the tree stretching her arms above her head. She weeps and embrace the last warmth of the day. NS. A great photo and I do see the lady standing with het legs crossed.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
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Thank you Sandra. I am pleased that you see it.
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Thank you Sandra. I am pleased that you see it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is presented in a beautiful form. Good job on the rhyme, the color scheme, & the awesome picture. Your words fit the picture precisely.
Thanks for the notes to help in understanding--they do.
The format, double echo, worked well for this poem. The notes explain it, but I don't see the words from lines 1 & 3 being repeated in the next line. Maybe I am reading it wrong. I read another of this style a few days ago, & the words were easy to see. Are the repeated words exactly as written in the previous lines? Anyway, good job & thanks for sharing. I understand the poem just not the format. Jan
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Your poem is presented in a beautiful form. Good job on the rhyme, the color scheme, & the awesome picture. Your words fit the picture precisely.
Thanks for the notes to help in understanding--they do.
The format, double echo, worked well for this poem. The notes explain it, but I don't see the words from lines 1 & 3 being repeated in the next line. Maybe I am reading it wrong. I read another of this style a few days ago, & the words were easy to see. Are the repeated words exactly as written in the previous lines? Anyway, good job & thanks for sharing. I understand the poem just not the format. Jan
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
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Thank you Jan, the words don't repeat, the rhymes do.
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Thank you Jan, the words don't repeat, the rhymes do.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing another of your creative Animated Stills and the photo that inspired the imagery. I enjoyed your "wooden maiden" and "ballet" metaphors plus your end and internal rhymes. I appreciated your detailed notes to help us understand the full context of your poem. Well done- Joan
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Thank you for sharing another of your creative Animated Stills and the photo that inspired the imagery. I enjoyed your "wooden maiden" and "ballet" metaphors plus your end and internal rhymes. I appreciated your detailed notes to help us understand the full context of your poem. Well done- Joan
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2016
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Thank you Joan, I am p,eased you got it and enjoyed it.
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Thank you Joan, I am p,eased you got it and enjoyed it.
