Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Master of the Lanes"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
18 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Poor Cody is bundle of PTSD and terrible self-esteem: "chastisement made me wonder if perhaps I was to blame for my mother abandoning me the way she did?" Death of some can be a blessing for others.
Brock should listen to her: ""It's important you validate his point of view, Brock. That way, Cody will be more open to discussion," she commented." This is good serious subjects to address. A+
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Poor Cody is bundle of PTSD and terrible self-esteem: "chastisement made me wonder if perhaps I was to blame for my mother abandoning me the way she did?" Death of some can be a blessing for others.
Brock should listen to her: ""It's important you validate his point of view, Brock. That way, Cody will be more open to discussion," she commented." This is good serious subjects to address. A+
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Appreciate the review.
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***smile***
Comment from Katya
Well written, You do dialogue well, and your transitions among different narrative points of view allow the reader to follow you without difficulty. It's an interesting story.
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Well written, You do dialogue well, and your transitions among different narrative points of view allow the reader to follow you without difficulty. It's an interesting story.
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story. Appreciate the comments and review. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as the rest of this story unfolds.
Comment from Artasylum
Hello Brett Matthew,
Your image does go well with your writing.
Earl Anthony Schroder met the death that he was handing out to the rest of the world. So horrible. Thanks so much for the read. yours, diana
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Hello Brett Matthew,
Your image does go well with your writing.
Earl Anthony Schroder met the death that he was handing out to the rest of the world. So horrible. Thanks so much for the read. yours, diana
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
As always your writing is great. It's very natural, flows really well, like there's no effort at all. I have to work so hard on the book I'm doing and then it kinda stinks. I'm starting to wonder what I have done. =} I don't do these kinds of book and maybe it's not my thing. Oh well, now I have to finish the stupid thing. I think my next chapter will end with, there was a big war, lots of fighting and death and dragons and the good guys won. The End. and put myself out of my misery. =]
Anyway sorry for rambling on, the story is great. I was reading about Bee Bo so have to go back and finish it to see what happens. Great writing. =}
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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As always your writing is great. It's very natural, flows really well, like there's no effort at all. I have to work so hard on the book I'm doing and then it kinda stinks. I'm starting to wonder what I have done. =} I don't do these kinds of book and maybe it's not my thing. Oh well, now I have to finish the stupid thing. I think my next chapter will end with, there was a big war, lots of fighting and death and dragons and the good guys won. The End. and put myself out of my misery. =]
Anyway sorry for rambling on, the story is great. I was reading about Bee Bo so have to go back and finish it to see what happens. Great writing. =}
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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That would be one way to end your book. Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story. Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
You are amazing. I suffered abuse of a sexual nature but you are my hero...I cannot believe your power of writing and courage I think you are amazing...I read this to my mother we both cried and cheered. you are amazing never forget xxxx love Meia xxx
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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You are amazing. I suffered abuse of a sexual nature but you are my hero...I cannot believe your power of writing and courage I think you are amazing...I read this to my mother we both cried and cheered. you are amazing never forget xxxx love Meia xxx
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story. Appreciate the review and your comments.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, I can think of some nasty names for that Earl. My goodness, what a predator and you have been through a lot as this is biographical. The ending is good and leaves us wondering. I also like your dialogue which I always find realistic in your stories.
I saw no errors, and thanks for sharing this personal account, Ana.
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Hello, I can think of some nasty names for that Earl. My goodness, what a predator and you have been through a lot as this is biographical. The ending is good and leaves us wondering. I also like your dialogue which I always find realistic in your stories.
I saw no errors, and thanks for sharing this personal account, Ana.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story. Appreciate the insightful review.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Brett. Maybe I read this out of order. Probably you are referring to the previous episodes because in this chapter, Cody is reflecting on Earl. But, we still do not know WHY Cody fights. Or, did I miss something? Good job. I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Hi, Brett. Maybe I read this out of order. Probably you are referring to the previous episodes because in this chapter, Cody is reflecting on Earl. But, we still do not know WHY Cody fights. Or, did I miss something? Good job. I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. The answer to the question of why Cody fights will come out in another chapter soon to follow.
Comment from apky
This is a definite six stars - which I unfortunately don't have anymore.
I devoured the narrative, the strength of the character coming across not as one moaning their hellish life and unfairness in the world but as a person, young person, whose attitude is that "it is what it is, take it or leave it."
A truly strong chapter here, Brett.
"Women and children. I don't (know) which is worse!"
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is a definite six stars - which I unfortunately don't have anymore.
I devoured the narrative, the strength of the character coming across not as one moaning their hellish life and unfairness in the world but as a person, young person, whose attitude is that "it is what it is, take it or leave it."
A truly strong chapter here, Brett.
"Women and children. I don't (know) which is worse!"
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Appreciate the catch. Always appreciate your comments and support. Your review most welcome.
Comment from c_lucas
An Abuser can destroy a child's affection and make the child have a negative life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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An Abuser can destroy a child's affection and make the child have a negative life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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So very true. Abuse can rear many ugly heads, none of which are any good. Appreciate you taking the time to read and review this portion of Cody's story. Your comments are always appreciated.
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You're welcome, Brett.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is sad reality for many children and your story highlights their plight. Children become adults and these rememberances never fade and form part of their personality. A shocking well written write which entertained me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is sad reality for many children and your story highlights their plight. Children become adults and these rememberances never fade and form part of their personality. A shocking well written write which entertained me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for your review. True, cases like this are indeed a sad state of affairs for children who grow up in these environments. Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody's story.
