Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very good poem for the challenge.
-Good meter, imagery, rhyme, and story.
-The progression of events is very good.
-They thought they had it all:
"the people who were living there, were royalty, uncrowned."
-But everything 'came tumbling down.'
-Good conclusion; thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Pam. That's such a nice review. I enjoy writing these challenges, it give my brain some well needed exercise. :) Sandra xxx

reply by Pam (respa) on 02-Aug-2016

You are very welcome. You are a good poet, so good to keep that part active, too😊

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Aww, thank you! Poetry is my first love, I hadn't ever thought to write a story! Thank you, Pam, for always being so nice. :) xx

reply by Pam (respa) on 02-Aug-2016

I knew you for your poetry, but look what you've done with your story! Both are really, really good.🌟🌟🌟

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

Excellent execution of the challenge and it would seem your words speak truth to the tradition of near royalties seeking a higher perch on the cake of mankind. Your rhymes and metering are sound as the story unfolds. Bravo to the kids who refuse to get up in the ridiculousness :)

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

~Thank you, Mary! I enjoyed writing this one, it was such a lovely picture and I could imagine so many things happening in that house. I'm glad you liked it, my friend. :) ~Sandra xx

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

Haha lol! This is an entertaining piece of poetry dear Sandra! I love your approach on money and riches. Life may be much better than having to be afraid that people will take advantage of you.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Virtual six..
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thank you, Rebekka. I often think those people live beyond their means! If they aren't where did they get all that money from?? LOL.

Comment from EricBrady

Excellent

And a beautiful house it is. Your words flowed so naturally as I read, no strain at all. They took me straight to the grounds of that beautiful estate. Unfortunately, so many people try "keeping up with the Jones", by living above their means, and ultimately end up losing everything. Hopes and dreams all come tumbling down. A wonderful story of some beautiful artwork. Blessings.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, Eric, for this lovely review on my take of that picture. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Sandra, this gave me a smile and I applaud you for your clever brain and loved this theme. you always do justice to these images and make your work so enjoyable to read. a great take on this image Rhyming and meter lovely . I think I will just visit Ha Ha. Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

What a lovely thing to day, thank you, Christine. I do enjoy these challenges, and love reading all the others. I'm glad you liked my take on this picture. :) Sandra xxxx

reply by Chrissy710 on 02-Aug-2016

you're welcome

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Nice, a good take on the picture challenge, in this world we never truly own, we only rent from banks or the county because either can take for non payment. great job with good rhyming , rhythm, great flow and meter. thanks for the share and have a great day

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, William. I enjoyed writing this one, it was easier than the last challenge. :) Sandra x

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Hahahaha! G'day Cousin. I'll buy it! Is ten bucks enough? A very witty and well written take on the picture. It interesting to see the different ways people see the same picture, isn't it?

Beautiful job.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thanks, dear Cousin, yep, I think ten bucks will be enough. LOL. That is one thing I like about these challenges, we get to see what other people see in these pictures. Quite a large variety too. Sending a big hug! xxx Sandra

reply by Walu Feral on 02-Aug-2016

Me too. I don't normally join groups. Well, I don't do anything "normally", but I generally don't join groups. But this one is a bit of fun without the bullshit competitiveness that exists on your planet, earthling..

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

I knew it!!! You truly are my cousin! Do you ever get the chance to 'phone home'? LOL!!!

reply by Walu Feral on 02-Aug-2016

Hahahaha! No, I don't use none of dat human junk!

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi Sandra, I love your take on this picture. You are the only one that has included the house in the poem or made it about the house on the hill (or at least that I have read so far). Very nice rhyme and flow. Great story about the house and its inhabitants.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thank you, Melissa, for your lovely review. I've read quite a few, and you're right, no one has mentioned the house. But, I've read some pretty amazing takes on the picture. Thank you for reading mine, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL. . . a modern day fable?
The natural extension of "eyes too big for their stomach?

We may not buy some portraits of nobility, pretending they are
relatives but we sure enough have our own modern day equivalent
in keeping up with Joneses!
Obsession with possessions
to precipitate impressions,
yet falling deeper in debt
for every financial mis-step ;-)

Loved your take on the "House High on the Hill" :-)

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

LOL, I love that review! Thank you so much, my friend. It seems to be a fact of life these days. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

What a neat poem with a clever plot line. This should do well in the contest.

Only one consideration:

this life was what they all wanted, but now could ill afford. [I was dancing along with the rhythm of your lines when I came across this. Just a suggestion: consider changing "wanted" to "desired." It doesn't change the syllable count, but does affect the stress. To me it sounds much better.]

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016

Thank you so much, my friend. I had changed 2wanted' to, 'required' but 'desired' fits in so much better with the story behind it. And, yes, it does flow so much better. I'm really pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks again, Jay. :) Sandra xxx