Comment from William Ross

Excellent

great job on this double nonet, I remember when my mother passed on, to walk in her house was like she was still there somewhere, every thing the way it always was. Great job on this, have a good day

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016

thank you William. , funny I thought the structure might take away from the message, instead it really helped me to focus on what I wanted to say. Once again, Thanks all of you for teaching.me.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written double Nonet. It is always an experience to go back home. Sometimes with happiness and other times in sadness. I think your second nonet should also start with one syllable.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016

Thank you for your critique I always appreciate you r words.

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

How beautifully understated this is. That makes the impact just devastating to me. I can feel it and recognize it so clearly. It triggers those memories immediately. Wow. This is so delicate and poignant. I'm comforted by it and I wasn't even aware that a little comfort would feel so good at the moment. A lovely piece. mikey

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016

Thank you so much Mike. It's been many years since Mom died but as soon as I got that prompt this is what happened. Such a mix of emotions when an older loved one dies. She was out of pain but I missed her so. There is a lot of work also with cleaning out the house and so many decisions have to be made. For my first nonnetI it showed me the beauty of that time of life.

Comment from Allison78

Excellent

I know how hard my own Mom said it was for her to go into her parents home after her father died so I really feel for you. This is such a beautiful and moving poem, Well done!

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016

thank you so much. This was my first attempt at a nonnet. I found it so interesting and the way it leads to descriptions. It is hard to go through their things , It is also healing.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I had the key to silence
AND
Empty chair wondering where she is

are superb lines in this touching poem.


I've been here, and it feels just like your description. Great job!

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 Comment Written 30-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016

thank you Phyllis. Yes cleaning out their house is always a hard, yet wonderful task.