Once I walked...
Overcoming90 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and confession of your wrong ways and how you found the light. I am pleased you are walking in the light and becomes the person God wanted you to be.
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A very well-written poem and confession of your wrong ways and how you found the light. I am pleased you are walking in the light and becomes the person God wanted you to be.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Sandra, so much from these meaningful words and great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Domino 2
Your usual non-preachy but personal experience write on your Faith, Ray, where you admit your past faults, how you wrongly blamed others, but once 'seeing the light', you were transformed for the better.
Very eloquent, top metaphors, excellent rhymes and meter.
Cheers, Ray.
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Your usual non-preachy but personal experience write on your Faith, Ray, where you admit your past faults, how you wrongly blamed others, but once 'seeing the light', you were transformed for the better.
Very eloquent, top metaphors, excellent rhymes and meter.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much Ray, from these meaningful words and great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Aussie
Good luck with your contest entry; so much damage drink has done - broken families, dangerous drugs do follow. I thought you picked a good subject for the contest. Look at our young people today, drinking has become fashionable.
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Good luck with your contest entry; so much damage drink has done - broken families, dangerous drugs do follow. I thought you picked a good subject for the contest. Look at our young people today, drinking has become fashionable.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Kay, your approval and wisdom mean much to me, thanks fit these outstanding stars, blessings, Roy
Comment from Jay Squires
A theme I've heard you embrace before, and I never tire of. I remember you told me once of the life you lived before you found Christ. You mentioned a dazzling light. Were you speaking metaphorically? Some, I've heard of who experienced a physical phenomenon accompanying their conversion. With others it was as simple, and as simply profound as being transformed by an unshakable knowing. A knowing that they know that they know.
The end result is the same, and you found it. Blessings to you, Roy.
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A theme I've heard you embrace before, and I never tire of. I remember you told me once of the life you lived before you found Christ. You mentioned a dazzling light. Were you speaking metaphorically? Some, I've heard of who experienced a physical phenomenon accompanying their conversion. With others it was as simple, and as simply profound as being transformed by an unshakable knowing. A knowing that they know that they know.
The end result is the same, and you found it. Blessings to you, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Jay, the light is metaphorical, it was more an ecstatatic joy and a feeling of being in Heaven, I would give up everything fo it to happen again, and thanks, for the great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Allison78
This is such a beautiful poem you have written! So moving and thought provoking, I especially loved the end. This is a great entry into this contest. Well written and a pleasure to read!
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This is such a beautiful poem you have written! So moving and thought provoking, I especially loved the end. This is a great entry into this contest. Well written and a pleasure to read!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Allison, , so much for these empathetic words and great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from I am Cat
Hi Roy,
I'm sitting outside under the stars and I read this absolutely stunning poem that I wish I had a six to give it.
Because I think it's so amazing and because even I can completely relate to this, though, for me, my spiritual strength grew stronger on my journey, but my organized religion and believe in that, went out the window.
Once I overcame it all, I felt, for myself, that the universe and all it entails had to be so much broader than I could even imagine, hold so much more than I gave it credit for, and have so much more meaning for so many more people than would ever touch my life, but t had to work for all of us...
Sitting here, reading this, I felt as one with you, the survivor of this poem.
THIS is what poetry is, Roy.
I hope, with all my heart, that this gets a lot of recognition. If it weren't in this contest, it would be what I would say could be a POM choice in that booth with others... Of course, I'm not in charge of anything, lol so what do I know?
Still, I loved it.
One note:
In the first line of the 3rd stanza, why not just use "myself" instead of "onesself"?
You're already talking about yourself...
Just a thought,
Love and laughter to you and a virtual six from me,
Cat
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Hi Roy,
I'm sitting outside under the stars and I read this absolutely stunning poem that I wish I had a six to give it.
Because I think it's so amazing and because even I can completely relate to this, though, for me, my spiritual strength grew stronger on my journey, but my organized religion and believe in that, went out the window.
Once I overcame it all, I felt, for myself, that the universe and all it entails had to be so much broader than I could even imagine, hold so much more than I gave it credit for, and have so much more meaning for so many more people than would ever touch my life, but t had to work for all of us...
Sitting here, reading this, I felt as one with you, the survivor of this poem.
THIS is what poetry is, Roy.
I hope, with all my heart, that this gets a lot of recognition. If it weren't in this contest, it would be what I would say could be a POM choice in that booth with others... Of course, I'm not in charge of anything, lol so what do I know?
Still, I loved it.
One note:
In the first line of the 3rd stanza, why not just use "myself" instead of "onesself"?
You're already talking about yourself...
Just a thought,
Love and laughter to you and a virtual six from me,
Cat
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Cat, it genuinely was a "Damascus Road" encounter nobody converted me, I was an agnostic, but like you, thought God "abstract" only my encounter, changed that. I would certainly be dead now, my escape from alcohol, drugs, and compulsive gambling was almost immediate.thank you for your gracious and delightful words and friendship, blessings, Roy
Comment from MelB
This poem is a wonderful testimony on how you left the liquor behind and found a new life with Christ. Very nice aabb rhyme and flow. I hope this touches others who have fallen to the bottle.
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This poem is a wonderful testimony on how you left the liquor behind and found a new life with Christ. Very nice aabb rhyme and flow. I hope this touches others who have fallen to the bottle.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Melissa, , so much for these empathetic words and great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Roy
= This is such a wonderful testimony of faith, my friend.
= It's interesting, how many times one has to walk in the darkness before the light shines through, be it for forgiveness ... overcoming adversity ... or just being lost in the world.
= But, the main thing is that we do. Really like this.
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
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Hi, Roy
= This is such a wonderful testimony of faith, my friend.
= It's interesting, how many times one has to walk in the darkness before the light shines through, be it for forgiveness ... overcoming adversity ... or just being lost in the world.
= But, the main thing is that we do. Really like this.
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Jackie, , so much for these empathetic words and great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Roy,
This is an awesome poem regardless of contest. It is a strong entry, too.
You did a great job with the rhymes. Your lines have a smooth flow. Your message, so personal, is awesome, too. What is pertinent here is that you lived that which you wrote about. I commend you for sharing a bit of your life's struggle. I am happy for you that you saw the Light and have been saved.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
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Roy,
This is an awesome poem regardless of contest. It is a strong entry, too.
You did a great job with the rhymes. Your lines have a smooth flow. Your message, so personal, is awesome, too. What is pertinent here is that you lived that which you wrote about. I commend you for sharing a bit of your life's struggle. I am happy for you that you saw the Light and have been saved.
Good job & best wishes in the contest. Jan
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Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks, Jan, so much for these empathetic words and great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This one gets a six.
For content.
For rhyme and flow.
For courage and witness.
For a message of faith and peace.
A wonderful testimony of the power of God
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This one gets a six.
For content.
For rhyme and flow.
For courage and witness.
For a message of faith and peace.
A wonderful testimony of the power of God
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016
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Thanks Barb, these verily generously empathetic comments and super review is delightful and the very generous stars are appreciated. Blessings, Roy
