Life's Timeless Winds
That is the way it is, for all-Sonnet59 total reviews
Comment from CD Richards
When I'm in a fairly cynical frame of mind, I recognise that when the time comes, it's not going to matter two hoots to me what anyone thinks. But contemplating the possibilities here and now, yes, you are right -- it's nice to think that we would be remembered for the good things we've done, rather than the bad.
I think this sonnet has an excellent feel to it. I love the title, and the way you've used the theme of the winds blowing our life along; great metaphor.
You might wish to include a period after "destiny".
Faultless rhyme and meter, in so far as I can tell. Excellent work, thoroughly deserving of the "exceptional" tag.
Cheers,
Craig
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When I'm in a fairly cynical frame of mind, I recognise that when the time comes, it's not going to matter two hoots to me what anyone thinks. But contemplating the possibilities here and now, yes, you are right -- it's nice to think that we would be remembered for the good things we've done, rather than the bad.
I think this sonnet has an excellent feel to it. I love the title, and the way you've used the theme of the winds blowing our life along; great metaphor.
You might wish to include a period after "destiny".
Faultless rhyme and meter, in so far as I can tell. Excellent work, thoroughly deserving of the "exceptional" tag.
Cheers,
Craig
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
Comment from Suzie Q
Very well written. I just read your bio. Seventy five years of writing poetry is amazing! God bless you! I guess my favorite verse would be " The blooms of youth, too soon are blown away, though oft they linger in our memory, Our timeless winds must ever have their say, as we move forward for our destiny." Well said and yes, I like rhyming poetry best. It's hard for me NOT to rhyme. Well done!
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Very well written. I just read your bio. Seventy five years of writing poetry is amazing! God bless you! I guess my favorite verse would be " The blooms of youth, too soon are blown away, though oft they linger in our memory, Our timeless winds must ever have their say, as we move forward for our destiny." Well said and yes, I like rhyming poetry best. It's hard for me NOT to rhyme. Well done!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, I love this poems sentiment. It is very important to remember and I try to do that with those I've lost. I am not at the age where I am contemplating what you are here in this poem, but that doesn't mean I can't appreciate its meaning. I think this is a beautiful work and one I would recommend to others for review, cheers, Anastasia.
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Hello, I love this poems sentiment. It is very important to remember and I try to do that with those I've lost. I am not at the age where I am contemplating what you are here in this poem, but that doesn't mean I can't appreciate its meaning. I think this is a beautiful work and one I would recommend to others for review, cheers, Anastasia.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Jaybird
It's so good to read an excellent sonnet poem of how one feels as they age
(like me) wasting for gentle wind to lead me on the path to God's peaceful home
( which I hope is soon)
Gert
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Hello Jaybird
It's so good to read an excellent sonnet poem of how one feels as they age
(like me) wasting for gentle wind to lead me on the path to God's peaceful home
( which I hope is soon)
Gert
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
Comment from GregoryCody
What a string piece. I really like the message, in that it sticks with you, makes you think. Your words choices are great, like Hark (adds voice) and yur Entire close. WELL DONE!
as we move forward for our destiny, good alliteration and assonance
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What a string piece. I really like the message, in that it sticks with you, makes you think. Your words choices are great, like Hark (adds voice) and yur Entire close. WELL DONE!
as we move forward for our destiny, good alliteration and assonance
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
Comment from susand3022
Hi Jaybird, Your poem is really relevent to a person in my life just now. He's very funny about it all. One minute he says nobody will even remember him, the next he says everyone loves him. I hate to say it but niether is really true. He will be remembered, but in a generally grouchy way.
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Hi Jaybird, Your poem is really relevent to a person in my life just now. He's very funny about it all. One minute he says nobody will even remember him, the next he says everyone loves him. I hate to say it but niether is really true. He will be remembered, but in a generally grouchy way.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, I heartily agree, Bill - your message is clear in this engaging write - it is the one of the reasons I write - to leave a legacy that I may be remembered by some, and this is becoming more and more abundantly clear, as I turned 80 on December 13. This rhyming poem shares my thoughts and wishes perfectly in smooth rhyming rhythm. Thank you for sharing...Eve
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In my opinion, I heartily agree, Bill - your message is clear in this engaging write - it is the one of the reasons I write - to leave a legacy that I may be remembered by some, and this is becoming more and more abundantly clear, as I turned 80 on December 13. This rhyming poem shares my thoughts and wishes perfectly in smooth rhyming rhythm. Thank you for sharing...Eve
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
Comment from c_lucas
The winds of time varied in its strength. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Wishing you and yours a very Merry Christmas.
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The winds of time varied in its strength. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Wishing you and yours a very Merry Christmas.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
Comment from rjuselius
this is a beautifully crafted piece of poetry dear jaybird! I have always disliked winds except in summer. the winter winds are the worst. but yours must be also a metaphor for life as well.
thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug as well as a merry Christmas!
Rebekka x
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this is a beautifully crafted piece of poetry dear jaybird! I have always disliked winds except in summer. the winter winds are the worst. but yours must be also a metaphor for life as well.
thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug as well as a merry Christmas!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
Comment from Writeling
I like your poem's formal language, which suits its subject. It flavours your narrative well. And of course don't we all wish for your concluding thoughts:
'May I, for all who follow after me,
by some kind thought or deed, remembered be.'
With best wishes at Christmas, Writeling
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I like your poem's formal language, which suits its subject. It flavours your narrative well. And of course don't we all wish for your concluding thoughts:
'May I, for all who follow after me,
by some kind thought or deed, remembered be.'
With best wishes at Christmas, Writeling
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
