Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 421 "The Gathering Clouds"Small and Specialty Poems
9 total reviews
Comment from I am Cat
Wow! What a form. Well done, Tom...
You know, it's feast or famine with this weather, isn't it?
In the spring it's floods floods floods here, and now, in summer, we can't buy a rain... although the other day, suddenly... a downpour... lasted about twenty minutes... then gone. lol
who knows why?
Loved this form, it was really well done with some excellent words choices, Great presentation... (love your new profile pic too) ;)
Great job
Cat
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Wow! What a form. Well done, Tom...
You know, it's feast or famine with this weather, isn't it?
In the spring it's floods floods floods here, and now, in summer, we can't buy a rain... although the other day, suddenly... a downpour... lasted about twenty minutes... then gone. lol
who knows why?
Loved this form, it was really well done with some excellent words choices, Great presentation... (love your new profile pic too) ;)
Great job
Cat
Comment Written 30-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Thank you Cat. I guess that's why they say that weather is fickle. Lol.
Comment from His Grayness
Here is a wonderful work that fully deserves the sixth star which is not at my command! I always appreciate the lovely Poetic Teaching as always delivered by such fine representations as this, from this very gifted and intelligent author. My sincere thanks for this fine experience! HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Here is a wonderful work that fully deserves the sixth star which is not at my command! I always appreciate the lovely Poetic Teaching as always delivered by such fine representations as this, from this very gifted and intelligent author. My sincere thanks for this fine experience! HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Stank you very much Vance.
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NEVER BEEN STANKED BEFORE BUT HOPE THATS GOOD!
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Woods, that should have read "thank you"
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NEVER BEEN STANKED BEFORE BUT HOPE THATS GOOD!
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
A six for trying it! I've never read one before but I appreciate your explaining what you did and you took your own picture--which is breath-taking--. Where in the world did you find out about this type of poem, and did you just decide one day, I think I'll try that!? Well, hats off to you to for bringing such magnificent artwork to the table. GoodHearted Woman Marcia
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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A six for trying it! I've never read one before but I appreciate your explaining what you did and you took your own picture--which is breath-taking--. Where in the world did you find out about this type of poem, and did you just decide one day, I think I'll try that!? Well, hats off to you to for bringing such magnificent artwork to the table. GoodHearted Woman Marcia
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thank you Narcia. Actually I found it on a site called shadow Poetry,
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem captures the reaction to storm, especially when it delivered eight inches and was followed by another deluge. I admired the mono-verse rhyme and the shape of the poem plus the accenting, individual words. Stay safe and as dry as possible- Joan
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Your poem captures the reaction to storm, especially when it delivered eight inches and was followed by another deluge. I admired the mono-verse rhyme and the shape of the poem plus the accenting, individual words. Stay safe and as dry as possible- Joan
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thank you Joan I'll try. I'll be camping this weekend. It supposed to be nice.
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Have a great time and enjoy the pleasant weather- Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
When the clouds gather here and they are dark we can be certain bad weather is on its way. It can be anything from a thunderstorm to very heavy rain. A tornado which is very rare here formed over Johannesburg region causing havoc.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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When the clouds gather here and they are dark we can be certain bad weather is on its way. It can be anything from a thunderstorm to very heavy rain. A tornado which is very rare here formed over Johannesburg region causing havoc.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Than you Sandra. Thunderstorms can be frightening. It rained here again yesterday. We got 2 inches of rain in about 15 minuted with high winds. Tornados are common here. Yesterday was more like a monsoon,
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It seems the strangest weather is happening all over the world. We experience another cold front moving in from the south.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
As per usual you have mastered a very complex form, the triquent. The poem's structure is the required 3 -- 5 line stanzas with appropriate rhyming, rhyme scheme and refrains. The rhymes are excellent and the figurative language very good. ("Enveloped, darkness that now entombs" is a first rate fresh alliterative
metaphor. I did enjoy this work, "Gathering Darkness", I feel for the flood victims. Floods happen in South Texas but right now we could use some of their rain.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Hi, Treischel,
As per usual you have mastered a very complex form, the triquent. The poem's structure is the required 3 -- 5 line stanzas with appropriate rhyming, rhyme scheme and refrains. The rhymes are excellent and the figurative language very good. ("Enveloped, darkness that now entombs" is a first rate fresh alliterative
metaphor. I did enjoy this work, "Gathering Darkness", I feel for the flood victims. Floods happen in South Texas but right now we could use some of their rain.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thank you Preston for another astute review, we certainly have had plenty of rain here lately. The lakes levels are high.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I hate when the days are gray and gloomy day after day. We need rain here so send a little out way:)
Great imagery and I like the lines you choose to be your refrain.
Teresa
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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I hate when the days are gray and gloomy day after day. We need rain here so send a little out way:)
Great imagery and I like the lines you choose to be your refrain.
Teresa
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thank you Teresa. I sure don't need to water my lawn.
Comment from RGstar
Good to see the master of forms putting in the good work on my return.
Night, fright, plight, sets the mood and you incorporate their meanings well with that which precedes them.
Good aura here. Nicely done.
Have a good day, Treischel,
Bets wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Good to see the master of forms putting in the good work on my return.
Night, fright, plight, sets the mood and you incorporate their meanings well with that which precedes them.
Good aura here. Nicely done.
Have a good day, Treischel,
Bets wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thank you RGstar. I appreciate the review. Good to hear from you again.
Comment from Pantygynt
What an intriguing form. Good for expressing ideas around a single theme as here. I can see that the right choice is important. Typically, sods law says you run out of rhyming words with one left to do. this one makes its point well.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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What an intriguing form. Good for expressing ideas around a single theme as here. I can see that the right choice is important. Typically, sods law says you run out of rhyming words with one left to do. this one makes its point well.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. It is a tricky beast.
