Comment from RShipp

Excellent

Another fantastic illustrated gif to accompany your haiku!!!

What a great and enjoyable read so far.

I am wondering how many chapters- it is a difficult page-turning experience on this Fanstory platform.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2020

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is a superb 'death poem'. The thought of being submerged in sin is excellent and I loved your notes saying that we often put ourselves through hell to find heaven when heaven can be found in our own backyard. Very nice work with this one.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016

Thanks again for catching up with the characters and story line, Smurph.
I am really glad that you're diggin' the book thus far (pun definitely intended, heh-heh...).
~Dean :)

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Dean,

Great alliteration in each line of this haiku. Is that normal for haiku - just asking as some tell me it shouldn't be there when I've done it?

Great imagery with the sea of tangled thistles.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2016

The "rules" for haiku are as diversified and variant as the intricate structure of a single snowflake, Gareth.
Basho, the greatest haiku poet who ever lived, he himself used alliterative devices in his haiku.
Having said that, it is really simply up to the poet.
Thanks very much for your review.

Comment from Muffins

Excellent

Word usage blooms in creating the perfect visual picture.
The metaphor comparison of death to swimming / fighting through tangle thistles is subtle yet powerful.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016

Thanks so much for deciding to check it out, Muffins.
I hope you will continue to follow along with each new haiku added to the story.
Take care, and thanks again for reading.

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good afternoon, again

So few words, so many images especially the line 'tangled with thistles (I've had my fair share of encounters with these green beasts.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

PS: When the rating is five stars it simply means no sixes remain for the week

PSPS: Feel a bit like a dolt...I inadvertently threw out the paper that I wrote down the name of the web page you use for your pictures. If you could provide it once more I would be grateful.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016

Thanks very much for reading my haiku, Ray.
I appreciate your feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~Dean

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This made me smile, although it is about sin. Your use of words are well chosen to convey a concrete picture and an emotion. You also employ alliteration expertly. Thank you for sharing your imaginative haiku.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016

Thank you, Andre.
Gypsy Blue Rose and I have teamed up together in a co-authored book to create a story with a natural progression written completely in haiku.
So far the response has been phenomenal, and yours is certainly no exception.
Much obliged.
~Dean :)

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

picture of you submerged in sin well there is a first for everybody but I just can't see that with you he he you are the kind loving type oh wait I should have said they type that scares the hell out of everyone. he he

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Either or, Country, is just fine with me, lol.
Thanks very much for reviewing this haiku from mine and Gypsy Blue Roses' co-authored book.
I (WE) very much appreciate it.

reply by country ranch writer on 29-Jul-2016

cool

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Interesting and well presented. Poetic and nicely worded. Tastefully done to describe our search for answers. It reminds me of the saying, "Can't see the forest for the trees." Sometimes the answer is right under our own nose. Marilyn

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

More often than not, Marilyn.
Thanks so much for reading.
~Dean

Comment from Treischel

Exceptional

Beautifully crafted art animation, composed to an outstanding Gaiku. A brilliant metaphor comparing dying to swimming through tangled thistles. Outstanding

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

Thanks so much, Tom. I'm really pleased that you picked up on the analogy, that was the key to understanding the entire message in this haiku.
Thank you once more for your very generous support and six star rating.
I deeply appreciate it.

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Exceptional

THIS ISD BELEIVED EVERYTHING YOU WROTE A WINNER FOR I LOVED AND ADMIRE ALL YOU HAVE TO SAY ABOUT HEAVEN SOMETIMES I THINK I LOOK FOR IT SO OFTEN THAT I BELIEVE I'M ALREADT THERE

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016

Thanks so much, Abby. I'm really pleased that you picked up on the analogy, that was the key to understanding the entire message in this haiku.
Thank you once more for your very generous support and six star rating.
I deeply appreciate it.