Some Words Are Hard To Say
Some important words that are hard to say101 total reviews
Comment from Lobber
Well,
A noble position to take - but you need to read Ayn Rand's :The Virtue of Sefishness: - all of your needless self-inflicted laments start with the word :I: and without this word :I:, the seemingly strainful statement (as Rand would point out) of :I love you: makes emotional and logistical sense only because it starts with the word :I:. The sentence does not read: :You: , because of you, my love exists. In other words without the element of :I: our love does not exist. Don't belittle yourself. Because of me/:I: our love can exist. - Lobber
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Well,
A noble position to take - but you need to read Ayn Rand's :The Virtue of Sefishness: - all of your needless self-inflicted laments start with the word :I: and without this word :I:, the seemingly strainful statement (as Rand would point out) of :I love you: makes emotional and logistical sense only because it starts with the word :I:. The sentence does not read: :You: , because of you, my love exists. In other words without the element of :I: our love does not exist. Don't belittle yourself. Because of me/:I: our love can exist. - Lobber
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from zanya
The sentiments here in these stanzas are truly so uplifting - one sentence in particular stood out 'Life's trials and tribulations/ oft time sets our heart in stone'-
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The sentiments here in these stanzas are truly so uplifting - one sentence in particular stood out 'Life's trials and tribulations/ oft time sets our heart in stone'-
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from Brian Hill
I love this.. I love the delivery.... I love the message.... I love the rhyming. I guess I think this is a winner....
And yes it moved someone! Me
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I love this.. I love the delivery.... I love the message.... I love the rhyming. I guess I think this is a winner....
And yes it moved someone! Me
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from Neonewman
Great piece you have crafted here for your reviewing audience. You hit the nail on the head, my friend. Some words are definitely hard to say, but mean so much when said.
God bless
Steve
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Great piece you have crafted here for your reviewing audience. You hit the nail on the head, my friend. Some words are definitely hard to say, but mean so much when said.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from Aussie
Man finds it hard to apologise for anything. We all make mistakes, some intentionally. I liked your true words, at one time we were taught to say, "I'm sorry," now it seems it is in the too hard box. "Forgive, so as ye may be forgiven," saith the Lord.
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Man finds it hard to apologise for anything. We all make mistakes, some intentionally. I liked your true words, at one time we were taught to say, "I'm sorry," now it seems it is in the too hard box. "Forgive, so as ye may be forgiven," saith the Lord.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from CrystieCookie999
A strong reminder in a poetic form that we all need to work on civil apologies as often as possible. It reads well with perfect rhymes. I would suggest checking more places to use punctuation; for example: on lifes rough and rocky road
would be more correct:
on life's rough and rocky road
Favorite line was close to the beginning: "with your conscience on the run." Nice read.
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A strong reminder in a poetic form that we all need to work on civil apologies as often as possible. It reads well with perfect rhymes. I would suggest checking more places to use punctuation; for example: on lifes rough and rocky road
would be more correct:
on life's rough and rocky road
Favorite line was close to the beginning: "with your conscience on the run." Nice read.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from Venessa Lee-Estevez
There is so much truth in this poem. It is so difficult to ask for forgiveness and to say I love you. For me, it is tough to say these words because I feel too exposed and vulnerable. This is a truly great poem!
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There is so much truth in this poem. It is so difficult to ask for forgiveness and to say I love you. For me, it is tough to say these words because I feel too exposed and vulnerable. This is a truly great poem!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from Mastery
There is no question as to this poetry "moving someone" Jay. It is a gem from beginning to end and could very well help us all with confronting the good and the not so good of our lives. Bless you, Jay. Youn are batting 1000, my friend. :) Bob
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There is no question as to this poetry "moving someone" Jay. It is a gem from beginning to end and could very well help us all with confronting the good and the not so good of our lives. Bless you, Jay. Youn are batting 1000, my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from Barbaraj1
You have another winning poem. It flows well and the rhyming is excellent. I like the way you wrote about life's trials and tribulations
that set our hearts in stone.
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You have another winning poem. It flows well and the rhyming is excellent. I like the way you wrote about life's trials and tribulations
that set our hearts in stone.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You are right, Jay. We all need to take time and appreciate others and show kindness and love. You words carry a great message. Good job with he rhymes and flow. Respectfully, Jan
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You are right, Jay. We all need to take time and appreciate others and show kindness and love. You words carry a great message. Good job with he rhymes and flow. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2019
