Lost At Sea and Found
Novel or Story Beginning24 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Hey, don't stop! I want to read this book. Start writing, fella, or else. Where was Sunny all this time? ANother dimension, perhaps? Or did she just leave him for her lover and change her mind, coming to beg his forgiveness? I want to KNOW, dammit! Grrr....
LOL! Great job, truly. :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Hey, don't stop! I want to read this book. Start writing, fella, or else. Where was Sunny all this time? ANother dimension, perhaps? Or did she just leave him for her lover and change her mind, coming to beg his forgiveness? I want to KNOW, dammit! Grrr....
LOL! Great job, truly. :)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from Taffspride
Mikey is this going to be the start of a new novel? I really hope so. because I want to know more.
Not only do you capture the readers attention right from your opening sentence, (great job,) but you keep it through-out.
Well written.
Looking forward to more.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Mikey is this going to be the start of a new novel? I really hope so. because I want to know more.
Not only do you capture the readers attention right from your opening sentence, (great job,) but you keep it through-out.
Well written.
Looking forward to more.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from Sasha
You did a great job with this and captured my full attention with your ending. I am not sure I am up to starting a new book, but a short story would be great. Sorry I haven't reviewed more, life has become complicated and gotten in the way of doing many of the things I enjoy.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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You did a great job with this and captured my full attention with your ending. I am not sure I am up to starting a new book, but a short story would be great. Sorry I haven't reviewed more, life has become complicated and gotten in the way of doing many of the things I enjoy.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an enticing story, Mav. A number of possibilities raise their hands in these opening paragraphs.
You've written a romantic setting, on the sea, on a ship, You've got the perfect love triangle and a man who for all intents and purposes may in fact be a bigamist. Enter in the lawyers.
Sounds like the Prose Potlatch is going to be a blast this Sunday.
A totally fun write as is your signature.
Great stuff.
Ange
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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This is an enticing story, Mav. A number of possibilities raise their hands in these opening paragraphs.
You've written a romantic setting, on the sea, on a ship, You've got the perfect love triangle and a man who for all intents and purposes may in fact be a bigamist. Enter in the lawyers.
Sounds like the Prose Potlatch is going to be a blast this Sunday.
A totally fun write as is your signature.
Great stuff.
Ange
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Hey, Angel I'm so behind. Jeesh. I like your take on this. Some good ideas. I'm still thinking about maybe following up on this one. MAYBE. Thanks for the kind words. Dig it. Mav
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Mikey,
I think this is really great. The first thing that came to mind was the Bermuda triangle. This would be a great story. I would carry on reading.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Hi Mikey,
I think this is really great. The first thing that came to mind was the Bermuda triangle. This would be a great story. I would carry on reading.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from Pantygynt
This really did whet my appetite. I would download this to my Kindle out of sheer extreme curiosity. There are so many directions in which this could go and that is surely the purpose of this exercise. I like maritime stuff and it is generally popular so that's a good start. A beautiful girl, a mystery and an awful complication if this is not some sort of hallucination.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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This really did whet my appetite. I would download this to my Kindle out of sheer extreme curiosity. There are so many directions in which this could go and that is surely the purpose of this exercise. I like maritime stuff and it is generally popular so that's a good start. A beautiful girl, a mystery and an awful complication if this is not some sort of hallucination.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from jlsavell
Mr. Cahill, well you better get this together and tell us more. Great opening. You caught me, hook, line and sinker. Ummm is it real or an illusion, wishful thinking. If it was his boat, why was he not lost too? jimi
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Mr. Cahill, well you better get this together and tell us more. Great opening. You caught me, hook, line and sinker. Ummm is it real or an illusion, wishful thinking. If it was his boat, why was he not lost too? jimi
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Mikey, this is indeed an excellent beginning and it left me wanting to read more! Great Potlatch contribution for the Challenge. Would love to see you expand much more on this! Great writing. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Mikey, this is indeed an excellent beginning and it left me wanting to read more! Great Potlatch contribution for the Challenge. Would love to see you expand much more on this! Great writing. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: you started a great story with conflict on the first page. What happened
to your wife and why did she disappear and reappear? Ok, I'm in. Gotta learn from you Masters. No one wants to be dead weight in the contest!
Do you sail on the ocean? John and I sailed with an old skipper on a lake. He liked regattas and taught many how to sail. Enjoy your day! flylikeaneagle
PS how does one pick names? Why did you pick Sunny Falcon. My husband had clients named Parrot and Eagle! They were big spenders at Neiman Marcus. Ok, I'm flying! SEE you at the prose camp fire!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Michael: you started a great story with conflict on the first page. What happened
to your wife and why did she disappear and reappear? Ok, I'm in. Gotta learn from you Masters. No one wants to be dead weight in the contest!
Do you sail on the ocean? John and I sailed with an old skipper on a lake. He liked regattas and taught many how to sail. Enjoy your day! flylikeaneagle
PS how does one pick names? Why did you pick Sunny Falcon. My husband had clients named Parrot and Eagle! They were big spenders at Neiman Marcus. Ok, I'm flying! SEE you at the prose camp fire!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
Comment from jusylee72
Wow, Michael. I loved that one. Great beginning. It may have been for practice but now you have to go on. That definitely caught my interest, The missing wife, the husband , The new wife all introduced at an exciting moment. Love it.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Wow, Michael. I loved that one. Great beginning. It may have been for practice but now you have to go on. That definitely caught my interest, The missing wife, the husband , The new wife all introduced at an exciting moment. Love it.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2016
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Thanks for the kind words. Sorry to be sooooo late. :)) mikey
