Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

You capture a vivid scene from your porch and make it seem quite real. I enjoyed your bits of alliteration and your addition of sounds too. Best wishes in the List Poem contest and keep enjoying your surroundings- Joan

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016

Thank you Joan:)

Comment from RoostyNester

Excellent

Very nice list poem. Sitting on the porch enjoying nature in all its glory! Well written and gives insight to the meaning of the message you portray to the reader. I liked it!

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016

Thank you for the great review:)

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

I enjoyed your list of scenes seen
from your porch.
Lots of detailed descriptions of the view.
I enjoyed each image and felt I was there with
you on the porch.
Nice work.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thanks Nancy:)

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very beautiful contest entry you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thank you Teri:)

Comment from Ginger Banks

Excellent

This is a very nice poem I can see the things you describe, in my mind. I like the word pictures you pain of the contrast between what your neighbors yard is like as compared to yours. I wonder what kinds of birds the bird feeders attract - this is the only addition I would say you may wish to add in future poems. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thanks Ginger:)

reply by Ginger Banks on 13-Jul-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from fimarie78

Excellent

I really enjoyed this poem. You have painted the scene perfectly, so we can really imagine the view from your porch. Nice use of alliteration.
I wasn't sure about the word bouncing in relation to the lilies, but that's just my opinion. Maybe, your lilies bounce, while mine glide/dance in the wind!

best of luck in the contest
Fiona

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thank you Fiona:)

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. To sit on your porch and enjoy your surroundings after a long tiring day, beats many other methods of relaxation.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thanks Sandra:)

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

very good, nicely done on this, Great job on the free verse of whats seen from your porch. good luck on this and have a great day

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thanks Bill:)

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Ilikethis poen because
(1) The camera work is so good. You give us a close-up of the speaker's yard and slowly pan outwards until we see. The neighbor'syard andhear those Harley's.
(2) the language appeals to a wide audience. The images are all concrete and appeal to the senses.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thanks Rod:) congrats on your second place win!

Comment from Cory G

Good

I felt like I was there on your porch with the flowers and the birds and the bees. A nice summer day...And beyond your own yard, the junky neighbors' and the motorcycle zooming past.

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 Comment Written 12-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016

Thank you Cora:)