Going Home
Just looking at the final hurrah.53 total reviews
Comment from AnnaLinda
Sir Jay,
I do believe that you have given your very best in life and although we
all have no guarantees of tomorrow, your thoughts conveyed here
in pleasant poetic form are so beautiful.
"fleeting flight" "flowers sway" "homage pay" all beautiful imagery and
alliteration, rhyme and very meaningful.
Linda
(I just visited my 84 year old mom and 91 year old dad today...although they seem
to be doing well, it almost felt like my mom was saying good-bye to me for the last time. We just don't know, do we?)
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Sir Jay,
I do believe that you have given your very best in life and although we
all have no guarantees of tomorrow, your thoughts conveyed here
in pleasant poetic form are so beautiful.
"fleeting flight" "flowers sway" "homage pay" all beautiful imagery and
alliteration, rhyme and very meaningful.
Linda
(I just visited my 84 year old mom and 91 year old dad today...although they seem
to be doing well, it almost felt like my mom was saying good-bye to me for the last time. We just don't know, do we?)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
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Thank you dear Linda for again stopping by.So sweet of you.It is not about when I go,but it is about how I go.That
is the troubler
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Jaybird1, this is a very emotive and soulful piece. I absolutely love it. I hope that as I get closer to meeting my maker, I will have so much dignity to feel this way. Perfect rhythm and rhyme and a great flow to the poem. Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
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Jaybird1, this is a very emotive and soulful piece. I absolutely love it. I hope that as I get closer to meeting my maker, I will have so much dignity to feel this way. Perfect rhythm and rhyme and a great flow to the poem. Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
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Lovely comment and I thank you.It ia all about how I go, not when I go
Comment from fionageorge
Wow, I was so happy to read your author's notes, my friend. Just for a moment there... I thought you were going. Great poem for a final hurrah... and even though sad, it was an uplifting poem, which indicates a person who has had a good life, and lived it respectfully... and is ready to leave with dignity. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Wow, I was so happy to read your author's notes, my friend. Just for a moment there... I thought you were going. Great poem for a final hurrah... and even though sad, it was an uplifting poem, which indicates a person who has had a good life, and lived it respectfully... and is ready to leave with dignity. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
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You are dear and sweet -thank you.It is all about how I go, not when I go
Comment from Domino 2
Generally excellent tetrameter written in the sonnet form (usually pentameter), Jay. However, I did stumble on 2nd line where you break the pattern and start with an emphasised syllable (WATCH-ing) - easily sorted if you wish, by, 'I watch'.
Very nice wishes for your 'final farewell', and modest too.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray.
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Generally excellent tetrameter written in the sonnet form (usually pentameter), Jay. However, I did stumble on 2nd line where you break the pattern and start with an emphasised syllable (WATCH-ing) - easily sorted if you wish, by, 'I watch'.
Very nice wishes for your 'final farewell', and modest too.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
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Many thanks for your support. It is not about when I go, but it is about how I go
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Preparing for lifes final lap. (life's)
A well written poem and I am glad your not planning to depart soon. I was worried at first. Thank you for sharing this, my friend~Debbie
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Preparing for lifes final lap. (life's)
A well written poem and I am glad your not planning to depart soon. I was worried at first. Thank you for sharing this, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you friend. It is not about whrn I go, but how I go
Comment from RoostyNester
Very nice farewell verse. Well done in verse and rhyme. I loved the bounce of the rhyme as you read the poem. The meaning you left with the reader, is direct and to the point. Leaves the reader with the message you intended to deliver. I liked it.
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Very nice farewell verse. Well done in verse and rhyme. I loved the bounce of the rhyme as you read the poem. The meaning you left with the reader, is direct and to the point. Leaves the reader with the message you intended to deliver. I liked it.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging remarks
Comment from Lisa Deverick
Your words are a beautiful way to tell others that you are at peace with the life you have lived, and the peace you have looking forward to eternity. Thank you for this reminder that we are only here for a short time. well done friend.
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Your words are a beautiful way to tell others that you are at peace with the life you have lived, and the peace you have looking forward to eternity. Thank you for this reminder that we are only here for a short time. well done friend.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
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It is all about how we go, not when.Lord,let it be easy-thank you for all
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He will be there the instant you go ( I died once and HE was there) It is not scary at all- just perfect. My Creator held me in His hand for a brief moment.
Comment from heyjude
Jay, so glad you're not leaving earth right away. Still we all must die some day. We just want to live the best life possible
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Jay, so glad you're not leaving earth right away. Still we all must die some day. We just want to live the best life possible
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
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It is not about when we go, but how we goThat final gentle tap would be so great-thank you
Comment from Ulla
What a lovely sonnet? where you bid life farewell. It has a very optimistic ring to it which is lovely in that circumstance. I liked your poem a lot. All the best. Ulla:)
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What a lovely sonnet? where you bid life farewell. It has a very optimistic ring to it which is lovely in that circumstance. I liked your poem a lot. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you friend-greatly appreciated
Comment from BeasPeas
Well--I'm glad you are not planning to go too soon, Jay! A wonderful poem of acceptance which comes to us from living life as we wanted it to be. Your first line says it all: "The very best, I gave of me,"
That's all we can strive to do. Well composed with a great message. Marilyn
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Well--I'm glad you are not planning to go too soon, Jay! A wonderful poem of acceptance which comes to us from living life as we wanted it to be. Your first line says it all: "The very best, I gave of me,"
That's all we can strive to do. Well composed with a great message. Marilyn
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you friend. It is not about when we go, but how we go. Please don't let me linger
