Going Home
Just looking at the final hurrah.53 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I think it's good to think that we'll be well thought of after we depar this mortal coil. My loved ones are really tthe premier ones I want to remember me, and hopefully I can inspire them to good things. Beautufully written in articulately cratfed and smoothly written in Tetrametric quatrains and sonnet rhyming, well done, blessjngs, Roy
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I think it's good to think that we'll be well thought of after we depar this mortal coil. My loved ones are really tthe premier ones I want to remember me, and hopefully I can inspire them to good things. Beautufully written in articulately cratfed and smoothly written in Tetrametric quatrains and sonnet rhyming, well done, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
Comment from RGstar
I wonder how many times these thoughts cross our minds. I know it has mine far too much lately. At times we have no answer, and think life unfair, and no matter how much we tell ourselves it is the same for everyone and everything, still hard to understand why, really why.
My best wishes, Bill.
RGstar
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I wonder how many times these thoughts cross our minds. I know it has mine far too much lately. At times we have no answer, and think life unfair, and no matter how much we tell ourselves it is the same for everyone and everything, still hard to understand why, really why.
My best wishes, Bill.
RGstar
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Oh Jaybird, this is an amazing poem, but I'm glad you are not planning to leave soon. It is remarkable, born in 1925 and still going strong. You have written a lovely poem. Your rhyming in abab form is very good, teeming up some good rhyming words - me/progeny, for example. Lovely end couplet and an overall lovely poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Oh Jaybird, this is an amazing poem, but I'm glad you are not planning to leave soon. It is remarkable, born in 1925 and still going strong. You have written a lovely poem. Your rhyming in abab form is very good, teeming up some good rhyming words - me/progeny, for example. Lovely end couplet and an overall lovely poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
Comment from susand3022
Glad you're not going anywhere... :-) Anyway, it's true isn't it? Though I've really never thought about it like that. You live your life the best you can, then when it's done it's up to someone else to see how it's going to be remembered, if at all. I suppose that's why a lot of people plan their own funerals these days. Nobody trusts somebody else to do right by them. Sad.
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Glad you're not going anywhere... :-) Anyway, it's true isn't it? Though I've really never thought about it like that. You live your life the best you can, then when it's done it's up to someone else to see how it's going to be remembered, if at all. I suppose that's why a lot of people plan their own funerals these days. Nobody trusts somebody else to do right by them. Sad.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Thank goodness you wrote that line in your author's notes! But, your poem says a lot, you've tried your best to live your life as good and honest as you possible could, no one could possibly ask for more. I am sure the pearly gates will be wide open when you are called. (not yet though) This was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
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Thank goodness you wrote that line in your author's notes! But, your poem says a lot, you've tried your best to live your life as good and honest as you possible could, no one could possibly ask for more. I am sure the pearly gates will be wide open when you are called. (not yet though) This was a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is an excellent written poem . Nice to see your not leaving. Loved the 2nd stanza.
We all hope to live a good respectful life before moving on to our next chapter.
Great job
Regards
Tia
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Hi
This is an excellent written poem . Nice to see your not leaving. Loved the 2nd stanza.
We all hope to live a good respectful life before moving on to our next chapter.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
Comment from l.raven
HI Jaybird, so glad to see your staying around for awhile....I think we all want to be remembered in a good way when we pass...not to be so easily forgotten...love your poem...very well written...love Linda xxoo
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HI Jaybird, so glad to see your staying around for awhile....I think we all want to be remembered in a good way when we pass...not to be so easily forgotten...love your poem...very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Going Home", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work is too close to the bone to be comfortable, but carries a very important message. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Going Home", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work is too close to the bone to be comfortable, but carries a very important message. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
Comment from LIJ Red
No rush. Stick around. The caravans are coming, the Dems are foaming at the mouth to impeach, the seas are rising, and California's burning. Let's see what happens next! Well except for the eight syllable beat and AWOL volta, it mighta been a sonnet. Excellent post.
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No rush. Stick around. The caravans are coming, the Dems are foaming at the mouth to impeach, the seas are rising, and California's burning. Let's see what happens next! Well except for the eight syllable beat and AWOL volta, it mighta been a sonnet. Excellent post.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
Comment from krys123
Bravo, Applause, Bravo!
Cheers, Jaybird;
>It has the same typical rolling rhythm and happy beat., as "Row row row your boat," or "Roses are red". I'm not saying musically on Melody I'm talking bouncing rhythm that is underlining common denominator that moves and give its poem beat, If it has any!
>I think the fact that you are satisfied with your life, mindfully, And your present attitude is patiently calming.
>Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alx
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Bravo, Applause, Bravo!
Cheers, Jaybird;
>It has the same typical rolling rhythm and happy beat., as "Row row row your boat," or "Roses are red". I'm not saying musically on Melody I'm talking bouncing rhythm that is underlining common denominator that moves and give its poem beat, If it has any!
>I think the fact that you are satisfied with your life, mindfully, And your present attitude is patiently calming.
>Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alx
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
