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Comment from enitsalemap
Your poem is filled with imagery of universal impact. So many of us have bi-polar relatives or live with these problems in our daily lives. It is a rare talent that can use words in the way you do to put heart, compassion and hope into a piece that discusses such painful issues. You have a gift, Sir.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Your poem is filled with imagery of universal impact. So many of us have bi-polar relatives or live with these problems in our daily lives. It is a rare talent that can use words in the way you do to put heart, compassion and hope into a piece that discusses such painful issues. You have a gift, Sir.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much enitsalemap. I appreciate your comments.
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you are welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
I am so sorry to hear your daughter's not well. I will keep them in my prayers, it is always hard to see your children suffer. Just keep your faith and hope strong.
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I am so sorry to hear your daughter's not well. I will keep them in my prayers, it is always hard to see your children suffer. Just keep your faith and hope strong.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you so very much Sandra. That will help a lot. Prayers are powerful.
Comment from patcelaw
Tom, I pray that your daughter will come to a point of knowing her illness is real and can be managed well with medicines. I am bi-polar and this touches me deeply.
may God touch her and help her to know that bi-polar is not a sentence for life. Patricia
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Tom, I pray that your daughter will come to a point of knowing her illness is real and can be managed well with medicines. I am bi-polar and this touches me deeply.
may God touch her and help her to know that bi-polar is not a sentence for life. Patricia
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you Pat, I really appreciate that. Yes, the key is that she can get on the right Meds. She is on Welbutrin now, and that is obviously not working.
Comment from I am Cat
This breaks my heart for many reasons, Tom.
I'm so sorry to hear it.
And HOW HOW HOW can we tell them, how can we WARN them?
How can we stop it from happening?
When I see these things happening, even to my own daughter,
I just want to take her anxiety and fling it to the furthest
corners of the globe... drown it with my own tears,
strangle out the last cries of her anguish... I get it.
But we can't.
And they wouldn't let us if we could.
I FEEL this to the depth of my soul.
Your scattered rhyme , alliteration,
and other poetic devices are perfection.
You move the reader throughout the piece,
causing them to hold their breaths, collectively,
searching for a deepening solution...
and anyone who KNOWS you and Karen,
KNOWS that's about to happen.
It breaks my heart.
This:
Life
brings along its stress,
creating such a mess,'
but nonetheless,
you carry on.
Work brings pressures of career.
Money stretches thin.
Children are added then,
to the mix,
adding to the din,
there is no fix.
Depression settles in.
OH,
but then,
there are those things within.
Genetic seeds
that sprout the doubt
and feed
some sour notes into one's Symphony of Life
for those unlucky ones
with
mental illness legacies,
that pass through chemistry,
creating parody
in mimicry
of reality.
Once released,
thoughts are scattered,
Love's fabric tattered,
dreams are splattered on the walls of reality,
and painted
with the pathos of a fool.
For them,
relationships bend,
and often end.
is pure genius.
Well written with just the right amount of this and that,
and the pure meat of the poem.
It sings.
Very well written with SUCH understanding,
and I KNOW you KNOW how hard it would be for
her husband to STAY.
and yet... you are NOW on HER side, for you are the FATHER
of the bride. :(
wow.
What a rich dichotomy... everything within you understands HIS need to run for the hills...
And everything else within you screams for him to stay, man-up, DEAL with what life brings.
*sigh*
It's going to be a hard life ahead.
:(
I don't envy them.
(((((((((( or you )))))))))))
hugs and love, my friend,
Cat
A six star poem... of course.
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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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This breaks my heart for many reasons, Tom.
I'm so sorry to hear it.
And HOW HOW HOW can we tell them, how can we WARN them?
How can we stop it from happening?
When I see these things happening, even to my own daughter,
I just want to take her anxiety and fling it to the furthest
corners of the globe... drown it with my own tears,
strangle out the last cries of her anguish... I get it.
But we can't.
And they wouldn't let us if we could.
I FEEL this to the depth of my soul.
Your scattered rhyme , alliteration,
and other poetic devices are perfection.
You move the reader throughout the piece,
causing them to hold their breaths, collectively,
searching for a deepening solution...
and anyone who KNOWS you and Karen,
KNOWS that's about to happen.
It breaks my heart.
This:
Life
brings along its stress,
creating such a mess,'
but nonetheless,
you carry on.
Work brings pressures of career.
Money stretches thin.
Children are added then,
to the mix,
adding to the din,
there is no fix.
Depression settles in.
OH,
but then,
there are those things within.
Genetic seeds
that sprout the doubt
and feed
some sour notes into one's Symphony of Life
for those unlucky ones
with
mental illness legacies,
that pass through chemistry,
creating parody
in mimicry
of reality.
Once released,
thoughts are scattered,
Love's fabric tattered,
dreams are splattered on the walls of reality,
and painted
with the pathos of a fool.
For them,
relationships bend,
and often end.
is pure genius.
Well written with just the right amount of this and that,
and the pure meat of the poem.
It sings.
Very well written with SUCH understanding,
and I KNOW you KNOW how hard it would be for
her husband to STAY.
and yet... you are NOW on HER side, for you are the FATHER
of the bride. :(
wow.
What a rich dichotomy... everything within you understands HIS need to run for the hills...
And everything else within you screams for him to stay, man-up, DEAL with what life brings.
*sigh*
It's going to be a hard life ahead.
:(
I don't envy them.
(((((((((( or you )))))))))))
hugs and love, my friend,
Cat
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Oh, Cat, I know you above anyone knows. You are right. She is trying to crucify him, blame him, vilify and destroy him, but she is my daughter, and I need to be on her side. But as you know, she doesn't see reality. She rejects help. It is so sad. It starting to get violent. Like kicking in walls and throwing/breaking things, nothing physical yet, but he's a hothead too. My wife and I have got the police and County involved. That helps, but they are so slow and stupid. I appreciate your words of concern and support.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I am sorry for the stress & your daughter's illness. You did a great job detailing it in your free style poem. Your words flow smoothly & readers can feel the emotion & concern.
I know several with bipolar disease. They are like you describe. And they really like medicating themselves which cause even more problems.
Good job. I will pray for you & your family. Jan
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I am sorry for the stress & your daughter's illness. You did a great job detailing it in your free style poem. Your words flow smoothly & readers can feel the emotion & concern.
I know several with bipolar disease. They are like you describe. And they really like medicating themselves which cause even more problems.
Good job. I will pray for you & your family. Jan
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Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you Jan. That will be a great help.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I'm sorry about your daughter. You went through and continue to go through so much with your wife and now your daughter.
This was so well written though. I could feel the emotion in it.
Teresa
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I'm sorry about your daughter. You went through and continue to go through so much with your wife and now your daughter.
This was so well written though. I could feel the emotion in it.
Teresa
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Thank you Theresa, i appreciate your comments. As well as those stars.
