Note in a Pot
We are all clay vessels.80 total reviews
Comment from zanya
A very interesting portrayal - with personal anecdote -of the 'What is a clay vessel ' here with resonance for our own mortality and the 'whys' and 'wherefores' of the aftermath -
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A very interesting portrayal - with personal anecdote -of the 'What is a clay vessel ' here with resonance for our own mortality and the 'whys' and 'wherefores' of the aftermath -
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Yes, zanya, I asked a lot of "whys" and "wherefores" in the aftermath of my father's death. the only thing I am certain of is love. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Caressa_08
Quite a beautiful story about your father and I know you will always cherish that clay pot, and his note to you... and death we all have to go through... Hopefully, it will reward those, like the soul of your father that seemed to be such a caring person and too... He was quite the gifted craftsman. with a 60yr career as a potter.
Best wishes for your entry...Caressa_08
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Quite a beautiful story about your father and I know you will always cherish that clay pot, and his note to you... and death we all have to go through... Hopefully, it will reward those, like the soul of your father that seemed to be such a caring person and too... He was quite the gifted craftsman. with a 60yr career as a potter.
Best wishes for your entry...Caressa_08
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Caressa, for your generous review. Yes, my father was quite a gifted craftsman. I will always cherish the note in the pot he sent me. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best for my entry.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a well thought out, written post with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
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This is a well thought out, written post with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Yes, c_lucas, my poem was originally thrice as long but I decided to focus on the four stanzas that meant the most to me. I made audio recordings and listened to them to ensure that my words flowed smoothly. Thank you for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from Ginger Banks
This is so awesome, thank you for sharing this poignant memory. I'm sorry for your loss, but i love the memories you've shared about the special moments.
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This is so awesome, thank you for sharing this poignant memory. I'm sorry for your loss, but i love the memories you've shared about the special moments.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Yes, GingerBanks, that note in a pot makes my loss bearable. I am glad I shared this poignant memory with you. Thank you for your review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Louise Michelle
This was certainly a challenging writing contest and you did a bang up job. Your poem is very poignant and very touching. I think our souls do rejoice at losing these cumbersome bodies.
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This was certainly a challenging writing contest and you did a bang up job. Your poem is very poignant and very touching. I think our souls do rejoice at losing these cumbersome bodies.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Yes, Louise Michelle, "I think our souls do rejoice at losing these cumbersome bodies." As the son of a potter, I could not pass up this contest. My only challenge was coming up with a poem that paid tribute to my potter father. Thank you for your review.
Comment from heyjude
Mystery author, very nice free verse for the contest. What a lovely thing to do put a note in the clay pot like your father did. We are all clay molded by the Potter. Good poem for the contest
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Mystery author, very nice free verse for the contest. What a lovely thing to do put a note in the clay pot like your father did. We are all clay molded by the Potter. Good poem for the contest
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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heyjude, yes, "We are all clay molded by the Potter." I am glad I shared my father's tradition of putting a note in a pot. Thank you for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from fimarie78
How wonderful that your father made the pot and such a lovely sentiment to leave the note.
I particularly enjoyed the 3rd stanza.
Remember to add the closed speech marks after 'clay vessel'
best of luck in the contest
Fiona
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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How wonderful that your father made the pot and such a lovely sentiment to leave the note.
I particularly enjoyed the 3rd stanza.
Remember to add the closed speech marks after 'clay vessel'
best of luck in the contest
Fiona
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Fiona, for your review and for wishing me success in the contest. I love the third stanza, too, because it painted two vivid pictures of the liberated soul.
I checked your idea about the closed speech marks after 'clay vessel.' That is part of a longer speech in which the quotation marks ends the stanza.
Once again, thanks.
Comment from Ann Dudley Duncan
A great poem and I love the way you compared a clay pot to our bodies
which hold our souls. The freedom they felt when they had escaped
from the worlds evil bonds. I prefer a steady rhythm in poetry which I couldn't find in yours but the story was excellent!
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A great poem and I love the way you compared a clay pot to our bodies
which hold our souls. The freedom they felt when they had escaped
from the worlds evil bonds. I prefer a steady rhythm in poetry which I couldn't find in yours but the story was excellent!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Ann, for your review of my story poem. Yes, our bodies are clay vessels.
Comment from Irish Rain
I really like this, and the meaning behind a note in a clay pot. This is a lovely tribute poem to your father. Best of luck in this contest, blessings....
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I really like this, and the meaning behind a note in a clay pot. This is a lovely tribute poem to your father. Best of luck in this contest, blessings....
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Irish Rain, for your review of my "lovely tribute poem" to my father. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest.
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You are so welcome
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Great story about your Father who loved you. He taught you importance
of pots and messages. When my Mom went into a nursing home, she left
all to my brother and all. I found her photos and art work. Yes, our parents
are dear to us. Treasure your memories and gifts they gave you. Great entry
and photo. Have a blessed weekend! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Great story about your Father who loved you. He taught you importance
of pots and messages. When my Mom went into a nursing home, she left
all to my brother and all. I found her photos and art work. Yes, our parents
are dear to us. Treasure your memories and gifts they gave you. Great entry
and photo. Have a blessed weekend! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 03-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
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Yes, our parents are treasures. I will always cherish the gift he gave me. When I miss him, I read his note. Thank you for your review.,
