Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Great artwork to compliment this excellent contest entry. A great thought provoking question! I wish you good luck in this contest,,,,,,Jim

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks, Jim. I am glad you found something to ponder here.

Steve

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Your notes answers the first question that popped into my head. Actually, the one question over two lines works for me. It's more substantial and opens up the narrative and the entertainment value in this tiny snippet. Your poem is relevant to all times. Recently, I read of a captain being tried for fleeing the sinking ship. Put in the context of the drmatic storm, the question is powerful and immediately stimulates the imagination of the reader. A fine idea, well rendered, Steve.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks, Mark.

I found it impossible to come up with anything meaningful when there had to be two questions, so I am following Warren Rodger's lead and sticking with one.

Was that the Italian captain of the passenger liner?

Steve

reply by mfowler on 02-Jul-2016

I think so. Memory's becoming a muddled quantity since I retired earlier this year.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Steve,

At first I thought you'd cocked up with this one but NOWHERE does it say it has to be two questions so grammatically linking the 2nd and 3rd line as one (a la haiku) should be fine. More than that it is very clever and works very well in this finely written piece.

Good luck
G

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks, G and congratulations on your reviewer win.

I found it impossible to come up with anything meaningful when there had to be two questions, so I am following Warren Rodger's lead and sticking with one.

Steve

Comment from djsaxon

Excellent

Trust your pen. The adherence to form is right on the money. Evocative and powerful.made me think of the shipwreck in the original Greystoke movie. Cheers - DJ

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks, DJ

A scary thought both literally and metaphorically.

Steve

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Aren't you clever. You think outside the box. Wish I had thought of that along with everyone else. It makes the form so more pliable. Good chance of winning.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thank you. Actually just following the example of Warren Rodgers who also wrote one like this. You are right, it opens up more possibilities.

Steve

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

You may be disqualified, but I have to say of the quinzaine poems of two questions, I have passed over a lot because they were either corny or made no sense. I like one questions applied.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks, Barb.

It is actually almost impossible to rite something sensible in the two-question format, so I am not surprised you have seen a few corny ones.

Steve

Comment from RodG

Excellent

Warning! I don't know if every Contest Evaluation Committee consists of the same people, but they can be sticklers. I like your Quinzaine as it sort. of spoofs the notion the captain should go down with the ship.

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 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks, Rod.

Actually the site contests don't go before the Compliance Committee. They do go straight to a judging committee, though, who a re possibly also sticklers - let's see!

Steve

Comment from chocoletdrop052

Exceptional

It depends on the crew and what direction the wind blows. Was the captain all by himself or did the storm take him to a place unknown? Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Perhaps the captain was never on board in the first place!

Thanks for the perceptive review and the six stars.

Steve

reply by chocoletdrop052 on 02-Jul-2016

YW Steve, LOL

reply by Anonymous Member on 06-Jul-2016

YW Steve, LOL