Comment from Sasha

Exceptional

OMG! This is brilliant. I was not anticipating the ending. Great work with this and I loved every word. Keep up the great work.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Hi Sasha, thank you so much. This is great and such praise from you. You've made my day. I'm so pleased. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Bananafish308

Excellent

Ulla, wow, that was one heck of a twist at the end. I did not expect it to be his brother. You did a a great job of building the tension as she walked through the house and up the stairs. You also very vividly described a cycle of domestic abuse that is sadly the reality for too many women. Very well done. Bill

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016

Oh, thanks so much. I'm glad you liked it. Yeah, the abuse is a terrible truth for many. I had great fun writing it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Oh man, Ulla. That is a painful twist. Whooooo.
What a drag for her. She's still got that rotten husband and NOW she's killed his brother and has no excuse or reason, totally cold blood. WOW.
I think you need to write the next chapter. LOL
Sorry to be soooo late. But I LOVED it. mikey

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2016

Hi Mikey, thanks so much. Wow I'm overjoyed that you like it. Actually, I could write a story about this. Have thought about it, but we'll see. And no worries about being late, I'm so pleased you reviewed. Ulla:))

Comment from Kooky Clown

Excellent

a great read and most enjoyable I felt for the poor wife in the end after putting up with the abuse for so long and then to find out it was not her husband great stuff and I just loved it. Very nearly a six but I kind of guessed it wasn't who it was not in the bed.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thanks a lot, I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

Oh my the twist was really a shock, the innocent brother murdered and Mary must have been scared for her murderous mistake. Anyway, crime does pay, even though she is a victim of an insensitive and controlling husband. Anyway stories don't really end the way the readers want it, like this one. An excellent write.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thanks for this great review. I'm so glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi Ulla, a classic case of abuse and a woman who was not going to take it. What a great twist you threw in at the end. I can imagine her eyes almost popped out of her head when he walked through the door and said his brother was visiting!

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thanks a lot Melissa, I had great fun writing this one. All the best Ulla:)))

Comment from Dellabananas

Excellent

Gasp! An innocent person dead! She should have grabbed that knife and stuck it right where it deserved to be. In her husband. What a twist. Dammit, she killed the wrong person though. Thank you for your story.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2016

Thanks so much. I'm so glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Margaret Ford

Exceptional

This is excellent work.

In addition to holding my attention, it gave me quite a jolt at the end. I was rooting for the woman to get away from this personality-disordered creep, but didn't expect her to make an attempt on his life. And what a tangle she's in now.

I only saw one little nit, in this line:

"She feared, he'd soon begin to limit her seeing friends, so tonight was her chance to act."

I don't think you need the first comma.

That's it. That's the whole of my take on this story. Congratulations on writing a stunner that would probably make a good short short film, if you know anyone in that line of work.

Margaret

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

Hi Margaret, thanks a lot for your great review and the wonderful stars. I don't know where that comma came from, but it's deleted. Thanks for seeing that. I'm so pleased you liked my wee story. You've really made my day. All the best Ulla:)))

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Oh no!!! What a horrorific ending! She killed a child, and her husband is alive to punish her. Wonderful take on the challenge. BRAVO! :)

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016

Thanks so much Phyllis, I'm so glad you liked it. I had good fun writing it. Thanks again. All best. Ulla:)))

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

Very nice twist to this story. Good job with build up of suspense and tension. My heart dropped for Mary at the end, even though she had committed.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Hi Russell, glad you liked it. Thanks very much. All the best. Ulla:))