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Comment from Marykelly
The humor in this story makes it fun to read and the alliteration obviously is the heart of the humor. The task of taming a tiger in itself is preposterous enough to warrant smiles, and the story line is exaggerated enough to broaden the smiles. The end is also humorous as it begins a new adventure in alliteration.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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The humor in this story makes it fun to read and the alliteration obviously is the heart of the humor. The task of taming a tiger in itself is preposterous enough to warrant smiles, and the story line is exaggerated enough to broaden the smiles. The end is also humorous as it begins a new adventure in alliteration.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thank you, MK, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Brett Matthew West
A well written story using one of the letters in the alphabet that is so frequently overlooked as it's star attraction.
Taming tigers not something that seems so popularly done.
Much too hazardous for "Tom" to undertake.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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A well written story using one of the letters in the alphabet that is so frequently overlooked as it's star attraction.
Taming tigers not something that seems so popularly done.
Much too hazardous for "Tom" to undertake.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Brett, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill, what a silly but clever little write. You play with the letter T and carry that off very nicely indeed. Loved your wee silly tale of the 'Tiger Tamer'. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Hi Bill, what a silly but clever little write. You play with the letter T and carry that off very nicely indeed. Loved your wee silly tale of the 'Tiger Tamer'. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Ulla, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fun use of alliteration in this tongue-twisting story of Ted the tiger trainer. It is exotic like Kipling's "Just So Stories." The last alliterated line with the letter J sets up a future adventure of "Thomas Tootuntittoo, formerly Tiger Tom." Thank you for sharing and entertaining. This would make a good children's story as a series.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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This is a fun use of alliteration in this tongue-twisting story of Ted the tiger trainer. It is exotic like Kipling's "Just So Stories." The last alliterated line with the letter J sets up a future adventure of "Thomas Tootuntittoo, formerly Tiger Tom." Thank you for sharing and entertaining. This would make a good children's story as a series.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thank you, SC, for the excellent review and ideas. Bill
Comment from RiseRutland
Wow! That was fun. I didn't know one could pack so many words that begin with 't' into such a short work. It seemed odd to this reader that I was enjoying this silly tale of death. Who would even think that I'd use the words silly and death in the same sentence? Well done my friend!
I'm particularly fond of these two lines.
Tsk Tsk Tuesday
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a totally teed off tiger
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Wow! That was fun. I didn't know one could pack so many words that begin with 't' into such a short work. It seemed odd to this reader that I was enjoying this silly tale of death. Who would even think that I'd use the words silly and death in the same sentence? Well done my friend!
I'm particularly fond of these two lines.
Tsk Tsk Tuesday
and
a totally teed off tiger
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Thank you, RR, for the excellent review and pointing out the best phrasing. Bill
