Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Whoa!
This REALLY hit home!
Wow!
So well done, flows lovely
In basically a wonderfully (mostly) trochaic
Rhyming free verse..
Great job and congrats on the win with this!
This sort of poem (emotionally altering) is just one reason I'm happy to be back to reviewing here at FS!

Well done! ,,,******
Cat

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016

Thanks for ther insightful review Cat, I had to look up that new word, cheers, j

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Wow! Didn't see that ending coming. Great entry into the "The Life He Almost Lived". Enjoyed the read very much. Your poem tells a great story. The rhythm, rhyme and meter are all good. Wish you best of luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016

Having a bucket list is no guarantee sadly. I enjoy the little twists, cheers, j

Comment from hager

Exceptional

Out of the box, this was different, I liked it... the guys out come was not swift, but such is the unknown bucket list of life... hager

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016

Thans for the insightful review, the bucet list is indeed not guaranteed, cheers, j

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

This is a very moving piece of writing indeed that happens all to much. We put our lives in anothers moral standards every time we leave our home. Exceptional.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016

Thanks for the review foxy, bucket lists are no way a guarantee for a long life, cheers, j

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Poet,

This is an incredibly well written poem and entry for the contest.
I did not expect that ending. Your rhythm, flow and rhymes are
great. The sad story is conveyed very well and is impacting.

Thanks for using my art. It was taken in Vegas.
Linda

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Thanks for the review and art. It was the perfect illustration I thought, Sadly, the scenerio plays out too often,. Ironically, Vegas was on his bucket list.cheers, j

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

If you drink don't drive.

No sympathy for this character.

Now he can live the life he was born to live...in prison where he belongs as this poem depicts.

Should be a good contest entry.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

I agree, for a moment of bad decision, so much heartbreak, thanks for the review Brett, cheers, j

Comment from Kooky Clown

Excellent

I think this is a well written poem with a nice rhythm to it and I enjoyed it I did not understand the last line but that did not prevent me from enjoying the whole thing.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016

The guy is sitting in the jail cell and ripping up his bucket list because he is now going nowhere. Drunk driving is on the decline but there are contless heartbreaking stories just like this, Thanks for the review Kooky, cheers, j