A Strange Dream
A plea for brotherhood for all humanity42 total reviews
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Jaybird: God is love and I'm sure you are on the top of his list
to enter heaven's gates. It's Jesus death on the cross that paid
the price for you and me. Just believe. Congrats on your awards.
Happy Easter to you. flylikeaneagle
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Jaybird: God is love and I'm sure you are on the top of his list
to enter heaven's gates. It's Jesus death on the cross that paid
the price for you and me. Just believe. Congrats on your awards.
Happy Easter to you. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I don't know. I'm prepared to sit and talk to God about things I've done when I die. The thing is though He knows what's I've done, why I've done it, etc. Maybe I don't have good excuses for some of the things I've done, maybe I wasn't justified in some of the things I've done, but I'll own it. It's crazy what dreams can lead to. What they make us think about. I think you got a lot of people thinking with this.
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I don't know. I'm prepared to sit and talk to God about things I've done when I die. The thing is though He knows what's I've done, why I've done it, etc. Maybe I don't have good excuses for some of the things I've done, maybe I wasn't justified in some of the things I've done, but I'll own it. It's crazy what dreams can lead to. What they make us think about. I think you got a lot of people thinking with this.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
Comment from kiwijenny
I do not hold much stock in dreams.
At this moment I awakened,
tearful, trembling, torn with fright;
Never knowing, only hoping
to be favoured in Gods sight.
Well penned Jaybird
God bless
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I do not hold much stock in dreams.
At this moment I awakened,
tearful, trembling, torn with fright;
Never knowing, only hoping
to be favoured in Gods sight.
Well penned Jaybird
God bless
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
Comment from Khurram1
A good question to 'self' about God. I hope you get the answers for it. The ending of dream is what everyone has to ponder on in any age. Thanks for sharing
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A good question to 'self' about God. I hope you get the answers for it. The ending of dream is what everyone has to ponder on in any age. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
Comment from Rmocruz
I find this is very well written, and solidly rhymed.
You present a wonderful spiritual message in a beautifully
strange dream.
Nothing wrong here.
An enjoyable read.
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I find this is very well written, and solidly rhymed.
You present a wonderful spiritual message in a beautifully
strange dream.
Nothing wrong here.
An enjoyable read.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I love rhymes as well, although I do dabble in free verse. I loved the flow of this poem, and appreciated it's message. Yes, we do need one God, one faith, not the many images that exist today.
Well said!
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I love rhymes as well, although I do dabble in free verse. I loved the flow of this poem, and appreciated it's message. Yes, we do need one God, one faith, not the many images that exist today.
Well said!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
Comment from LIJ Red
One does not dream about totally alien concepts, your dream was the product of your education and environment. Some would say no moslems hindus or Methodists will find the strait gate and narrow way...some swear no gate, no way, no brooding figure behind the big bang...excellent poem, making us speculate like Pilate, what is truth?
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One does not dream about totally alien concepts, your dream was the product of your education and environment. Some would say no moslems hindus or Methodists will find the strait gate and narrow way...some swear no gate, no way, no brooding figure behind the big bang...excellent poem, making us speculate like Pilate, what is truth?
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
Comment from Cedar
Hello Jaybird: What an eye-opening dream this was. It makes you stop and wonder, doesn't it? In my opinion, I think we are judged on our good deeds and did we do more for others than for ourselves?
Take care, my friend...Bill
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Hello Jaybird: What an eye-opening dream this was. It makes you stop and wonder, doesn't it? In my opinion, I think we are judged on our good deeds and did we do more for others than for ourselves?
Take care, my friend...Bill
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
Comment from Coco Jane
An interesting contemplation.
A few of the lines do not fit the meter pattern . . . or, did you not intend them to? Stanza 3, line 3 seems to have the stresses in the "wrong" places according to the pattern established in stanzas 1 and 2. Is this on purpose?
In stanza 4, line 4, "Gods" needs an apostrophe-- "God's."
The thoughts of all humanity are summed up well in this poem.
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An interesting contemplation.
A few of the lines do not fit the meter pattern . . . or, did you not intend them to? Stanza 3, line 3 seems to have the stresses in the "wrong" places according to the pattern established in stanzas 1 and 2. Is this on purpose?
In stanza 4, line 4, "Gods" needs an apostrophe-- "God's."
The thoughts of all humanity are summed up well in this poem.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, Jaybird1. I think we can all identify with your poem. It had a good flow to it and the imagery was good. I can see why it did so well. Good job.
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This was a good read, Jaybird1. I think we can all identify with your poem. It had a good flow to it and the imagery was good. I can see why it did so well. Good job.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019