The Ring
a narrative poem about a ring lost & found24 total reviews
Comment from WalkerMan
Here is a story in rhyming poem form to fit the "Found It" prompt about an object that affects the finder's life -- in this case, most profoundly. It is a plausible account that flows well through the phases of the finder's life -- each influenced in its own way by the ring he found and kept. Excellently done.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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Here is a story in rhyming poem form to fit the "Found It" prompt about an object that affects the finder's life -- in this case, most profoundly. It is a plausible account that flows well through the phases of the finder's life -- each influenced in its own way by the ring he found and kept. Excellently done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016
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I am delighted you enjoyed my "epic." Thanks so much for sharing.
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You're welcome. I did like it. -- Mike
Comment from tfawcus
A splendid story in three parts - almost a fairy tale in its development. I liked the way the found ring not only brought luck to Jack, but that he used it to bring good fortune to others.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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A splendid story in three parts - almost a fairy tale in its development. I liked the way the found ring not only brought luck to Jack, but that he used it to bring good fortune to others.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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I'm delighted you enjoyed the story. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from dragonpoet
I guess the myth was true for Jack. Finding the ring was lucky for him and he helped other as the ring helped him. I hope throwing away the ring allowed a better life for the woman.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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I guess the myth was true for Jack. Finding the ring was lucky for him and he helped other as the ring helped him. I hope throwing away the ring allowed a better life for the woman.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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I truly appreciate your empathy for both Jack and Sally. Thanks for reviewing.
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You're welcome. It's always good to look for the best in all situations.
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Comment from foxangie123
Wow what a most brilliant and touching poem. I thought if the ring of life and how during war one needs that circle to find their way home. A spectacular entry and write. Bravo and kudos to you on this.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Wow what a most brilliant and touching poem. I thought if the ring of life and how during war one needs that circle to find their way home. A spectacular entry and write. Bravo and kudos to you on this.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Wow! All those kudos are most welcome. I also like your "ring of life" interpretation. Thank you!
Comment from frogbook
I wish I could just say...I loved it...and nothing more, because that is the huge thought I have about it. I suppose the writing was good and all but I didn't need to look at any of it, because I loved the story. It was a very emotional piece and to me that is what makes for great writing-the story and the emotion produced. The rest is just icing on the cake. Well done mystery writer.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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I wish I could just say...I loved it...and nothing more, because that is the huge thought I have about it. I suppose the writing was good and all but I didn't need to look at any of it, because I loved the story. It was a very emotional piece and to me that is what makes for great writing-the story and the emotion produced. The rest is just icing on the cake. Well done mystery writer.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, frogbook, for your fabulous praise. I could not be more thrilled, knowing the poem had emotional power and the story was enjoyable. The six stars are a bonus I truly appreciate.
Comment from Bill Schott
This was quite a tale, told in verse, that relates the FOUND item to happenings occurring afterwards. One can draw on life experience to wrap, like a ring, a quality tale around a prompt. Nice read.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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This was quite a tale, told in verse, that relates the FOUND item to happenings occurring afterwards. One can draw on life experience to wrap, like a ring, a quality tale around a prompt. Nice read.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Delighted you enjoyed this tale, Bill, and appreciate your comments.
Comment from Galactia
Hi
WoW, this is an excellent well written folklore story. I am so sorry, that i don't have a 6 left, I wwould love to be able to write like you and punctuate my own poems properly. This is a wonderful entry into the contest and i wish you the best of luck.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Hi
WoW, this is an excellent well written folklore story. I am so sorry, that i don't have a 6 left, I wwould love to be able to write like you and punctuate my own poems properly. This is a wonderful entry into the contest and i wish you the best of luck.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, Tia, for the high praise and the virtual 6-star rating.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
An interesting story. I didn't know there was a divorce capital. Personally, I'd pawn the ring and keep the cash. Well written. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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An interesting story. I didn't know there was a divorce capital. Personally, I'd pawn the ring and keep the cash. Well written. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Thank you for sharing my poem. Up until the 60s Nevada was one of the few states that would grant a divorce to outsiders, hence the title. Gold then sold for only $35 an ounce; today it's $1100 and you would be foolish not to take the cash.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great story and well-written as well. The one man's trash is another man's treasure. This is what i get from this story. The woman throw it away because she did not find any luck or happiness. Jack picks it up and survive a terrible war wearing the same ring.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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A great story and well-written as well. The one man's trash is another man's treasure. This is what i get from this story. The woman throw it away because she did not find any luck or happiness. Jack picks it up and survive a terrible war wearing the same ring.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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I agree with your interpretation. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, I liked your poem a lot with a very good story within. Yeah the ring was indeed lost and then found. It brought Jack luck up to a point and then he died in so sad circumstances. Very well written.
I am only confused about one thing. I thought the contest was for prose, and this is poetry. All the best. Ulla:)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Hi there, I liked your poem a lot with a very good story within. Yeah the ring was indeed lost and then found. It brought Jack luck up to a point and then he died in so sad circumstances. Very well written.
I am only confused about one thing. I thought the contest was for prose, and this is poetry. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2016
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Hi Ulla. I read and retread the directions which only said "fiction," not prose only. The story I told is fiction. I am glad you enjoyed the poem and appreciate your kind praise.
