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Diary Fiction-6-19 Potlatch Challenge27 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, sad thing is...so many don't care...our veteran's that fought and died for us...we were happy when they for fighting for our lives...but no one cares about theirs...and in our country Michael...doesn't matter who you are...if you don't have the money...insurance...they don't care...very very well expressed my friend...and the picture says it all...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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HI Michael, sad thing is...so many don't care...our veteran's that fought and died for us...we were happy when they for fighting for our lives...but no one cares about theirs...and in our country Michael...doesn't matter who you are...if you don't have the money...insurance...they don't care...very very well expressed my friend...and the picture says it all...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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It's a shameful thing we have veterans living on the streets. This story is so true to life. Thanks so much, mikey
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it truly is Michael...any one who fights for our country...puts themselves out there to doe for us...should be honored until they die...so sad...you are so welcome...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment from Bananafish308
Mikey, this was a fascinating and poignant perspective - that of an indigent Nam vet. Very pertinent, also. Not only did you do a great job of depicting the suffering of those in the late stages of cancer, especially when one doesn't have access to pain meds, but you remind us of the grievous mistreatment of so many of our Vets. Great job. Bill
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Mikey, this was a fascinating and poignant perspective - that of an indigent Nam vet. Very pertinent, also. Not only did you do a great job of depicting the suffering of those in the late stages of cancer, especially when one doesn't have access to pain meds, but you remind us of the grievous mistreatment of so many of our Vets. Great job. Bill
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Thanks, Bill
I wish it wasn't all so true. I can walk out my front door and go chat with vets anytime. It's a crime. mikey
Comment from frogbook
Excellent work. This was extremely powerful and emotional and sadly true. Compelling reading that deserves the highest rating and should be published.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Excellent work. This was extremely powerful and emotional and sadly true. Compelling reading that deserves the highest rating and should be published.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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Wow. What a great and encouraging review. It's a shame that it's all too true though. I see it on the streets of my own town here. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Bill Schott
These diary entries seem to be leading to the death of this embattled cancer patient. Private Jones' slips into a dream state and will likely die. All of this visceral dialog within the diary screams of the disenfranchised from society. It's a powerful statement of how we soon forget and never forgive.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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These diary entries seem to be leading to the death of this embattled cancer patient. Private Jones' slips into a dream state and will likely die. All of this visceral dialog within the diary screams of the disenfranchised from society. It's a powerful statement of how we soon forget and never forgive.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2016
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It's unfortunately all too real. Thanks for the thoughtful words. mikey
Comment from robyn corum
Mikey,
Unusual side to this thing. I am truly amazed at all the pieces and how each has taken a different slant. I've been busy with my grandbaby (thank you, Lord!) *smile* and hate I missed this one -- but on the other hand, maybe I'm not sorry -- this was a tough one.
I 'liked' the angle you've taken - totally different than the others I've read -- where their 'patient' was loved and cared for, yours is dying in anonymity and unkindness, making a whole new underlying statement for the readers. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Mikey,
Unusual side to this thing. I am truly amazed at all the pieces and how each has taken a different slant. I've been busy with my grandbaby (thank you, Lord!) *smile* and hate I missed this one -- but on the other hand, maybe I'm not sorry -- this was a tough one.
I 'liked' the angle you've taken - totally different than the others I've read -- where their 'patient' was loved and cared for, yours is dying in anonymity and unkindness, making a whole new underlying statement for the readers. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Yep, really not the most fun kind of topic. But I guess a good exercise for us all. Some great pieces came out, a couple simple awesome works. Glad you liked this, I wish it weren't so darn true. mikey
Comment from Spitfire
Yeah, don't give me a donut, buddy. I just gave my FUCKIN' LEG for you in Nam.-- This says a whole lot. Our country did treat these vets miserably.
I can smell the shit that used to be my insides. --yuch. Talk about appeal to the senses.
Last post that mentions cold implies he'll be dead in maybe the next two minutes.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Yeah, don't give me a donut, buddy. I just gave my FUCKIN' LEG for you in Nam.-- This says a whole lot. Our country did treat these vets miserably.
I can smell the shit that used to be my insides. --yuch. Talk about appeal to the senses.
Last post that mentions cold implies he'll be dead in maybe the next two minutes.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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THANK YOU!!! I thought that was too subtle. That's exactly what I meant by the last point. I'm so pleased now. YAY! I've been looking at it for the last few days thinking maybe I should make it colder to make it more obvious, but I'll stick to my guns now. I just have to hope for a smarter readership!!! Thanks a bunch, mikey
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You're welcome. :-)
Comment from LIJ Red
I was in a Lancaster, once, going to a seminar at Armstrong World on PLCs.
That was the last time I left these hills,1980 something. This is an excellent diary-style entry for the potlatch prose.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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I was in a Lancaster, once, going to a seminar at Armstrong World on PLCs.
That was the last time I left these hills,1980 something. This is an excellent diary-style entry for the potlatch prose.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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If there was a lot of sand and some lousy cactus, it was my Lancaster in the Mojave Desert. If it was green with nice hills etc, it was Pennsylvania. LOL
Thanks for the encouragement. mikey
Comment from Ric Myworld
Out of the four-hundred and ten million ways to go, cancer might very well be the worst. Just sorta eats a person from the inside out. Of course, if we drink enough, we just might drowned the damn stuff. Thanks for another fine read. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Out of the four-hundred and ten million ways to go, cancer might very well be the worst. Just sorta eats a person from the inside out. Of course, if we drink enough, we just might drowned the damn stuff. Thanks for another fine read. :-)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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Yep, thank God for alcohol. LOL That's a great treatment program for damn near anything!!! mikey
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It would be funny, if it wasn't so sad. You have hit on a very sore subject. What is the matter with the governments? Ours is the same. They send them out to save out butts, but when they come back broken, they don't want to know. Excellent bit of writing my friend, and so realistic, because it really does happen! Well done! :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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It would be funny, if it wasn't so sad. You have hit on a very sore subject. What is the matter with the governments? Ours is the same. They send them out to save out butts, but when they come back broken, they don't want to know. Excellent bit of writing my friend, and so realistic, because it really does happen! Well done! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2016
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I can walk out the front door and go hang out with homeless vets. It's a damn crime. There's so many that the little help we offer is a drop in the bucket. The red tape just to get what benefits and care IS available is absurd. Reams of forms to fill out to get eyeglasses etc. Well, however bad it is there, we're the worst. A tough topic, but some great pieces, yes? mikey
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Don't know about you mikey but I found this topic a bit confronting to write about, but I do like the way you have handled it with anger and humour from the homeless vet. Good job,
cheers.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Don't know about you mikey but I found this topic a bit confronting to write about, but I do like the way you have handled it with anger and humour from the homeless vet. Good job,
cheers.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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YES! For goodness sake, there sure isn't a chance to write anything very happy is there? Jeesh. Well, some good pieces were written though. I'm pleased with this though it really wasn't any great fun to write. It was a good learning experience.
Thank you kindly, mikey
