The Mighty Have Fallen
Haiku -- Loss after a hurricane5 total reviews
Comment from Judy Couch
The picture you chose is beautiful and reminds me of the way things often look near my house although the fallen trees here are ash. You followed the prompt well and told a story with your poem.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
The picture you chose is beautiful and reminds me of the way things often look near my house although the fallen trees here are ash. You followed the prompt well and told a story with your poem.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for the generous rating and encouraging comments; both are very much appreciated!
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, The Mighty Have Fallen, uses its sixteen syllables to grieve the destruction of ancient timber that have fought their last battle with nature.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
This haiku, The Mighty Have Fallen, uses its sixteen syllables to grieve the destruction of ancient timber that have fought their last battle with nature.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016
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Thank you, Bill, for the excellent rating and your insightful recap. When I first saw the fallen trees, the loss struck me deeply.
Comment from frogbook
This is an impactful three lines especially with the picture to accompany. Seems there are more and more weather issues lately. Sometimes I wonder if we might need the ARC soon!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
This is an impactful three lines especially with the picture to accompany. Seems there are more and more weather issues lately. Sometimes I wonder if we might need the ARC soon!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much, Froggie, for your generous rating and encouraging comments--they feed the soul!!
Comment from cumulus365
Your poetic format effectively meets the style in the syllables count. The wordings used to express the aspens felled by weather condition is exemplary. I just want to make sure line 3 is that a metaphor? or the "sentinels" associate with "road" from line 1? I like the illustration you picked to go with the wordings in your poem. Nicely done for this compact style. I love your application of figurative language of alliteration of the "f" sound. I have written a piece for my children using all hard "c" sound. It is fun with alliteration/assonance. Thank you for your letting me comment your nice concise poem. Best.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
Your poetic format effectively meets the style in the syllables count. The wordings used to express the aspens felled by weather condition is exemplary. I just want to make sure line 3 is that a metaphor? or the "sentinels" associate with "road" from line 1? I like the illustration you picked to go with the wordings in your poem. Nicely done for this compact style. I love your application of figurative language of alliteration of the "f" sound. I have written a piece for my children using all hard "c" sound. It is fun with alliteration/assonance. Thank you for your letting me comment your nice concise poem. Best.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for your generous rating and encouraging comments.
Sentinels refer to the trees that were standing guard, per se. I will take another look and see if is unclear.
Thanks to the excellent definition given in the prompt, this may be the first authentic haiku I have written :( !!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good haiku you have penned. you used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words and the picture. good luck in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
This is a very good haiku you have penned. you used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words and the picture. good luck in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 14-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much for your generous rating and encouraging comments. Thanks to the excellent definition given in the prompt, this may be the first authentic haiku I have written :( !!