Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haiku. The petals entwined in the fentke breeze it spreads the aromas to attract an abundance of insects for a real feast.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016

Hi Sandra, thank you so very much. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

This paints quite the picture of beauty and reality for me anyway. I love the first two lines that connect, and your wonderful last line that makes us pause. I have one suggestion - do not capitalize haiku in the title it should all be in lower case letters.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016

Thank you so much and glad you liked it. I have made the change. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice image.
-Good format.
-Connection is good between lines one and two.
-Effective imagery in both lines.
-The first one is good visual imagery and the second has effective sound imagery with "rustle gently."
-Interesting satori.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016

Thanks a lot, respa, for this great review. All the best. Ulla:)))_

reply by Pam (respa) on 18-Jun-2016

You are very welcome.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is an excellent haiku
written to the form very nicely
with 4-7-4 syllables
it depicts a moment in time observed
Excellent imagery in petals/breeze
with solid grammatical connection
and a very good satori line of the insects
Excellent art work to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016

Thanks so very much. I'm so glad that you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from GoodHearted Woman

Excellent

Very nice picture you were able to find because of the delicateness of the petals almost copies the sheerness of an insect wing. So we have a "nature together" picture emerging from this equally delicate little haiku. Picture and poem seem to have been made for each other, tho we don't believe that's true.
GoodHearted Woman

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016

Thank you so much for this geat review. Yeah, I thought the picture just fitte my haiku. All the best. Ulla:I

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

Hi there this is a 5-7-5 haiku based on the perimeter of insects and flowers and on a scale of five syllables seven syllables and five symbols which was correct demon imagery protective contact would be a five-star subject to constant also five stars completely correct so Grammar with also be five stars pronunciation and pronunciation of both the five stars also complete synopsis thoroughly enjoyed thank you for this Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016

Hi Ricky,Thank you so much and for the stars. I'm glad that you liked it. All the best, Ulla:)

Comment from JP49

Excellent

Yet another really good, descriptive Haiku. Wonderful artwork. Really compliments the poem but the poem also can stand alone. Well done once again.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016

Thanks ever so much. So very pleased that you liked it.All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Ulla, I really like your haiku contest entry. Tells a wonder little story about these petals coming together to be able to sway in a gentle breeze giving home to many different insects. I wish you good luck in the contest my friend,,,,,,Jim

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 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016

Hi Jim, thank you so much for the great review. I'm so pleased that you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Ulla

= Love the artwork with your haiku.
= Most complementary to your well worded poem.
= Super imagery with this--distinctive.
= Good luck with your great entry.

(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ~ Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax


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 Comment Written 14-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016

Hi Jax, I'm so glad that you liked it. Thanks for the super review. I so want to learn. I'm fascinated with haiku and Japanese culture, having been there so much. It's a whole new world opening up for me. Ulla:)))