Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

Nice little..simple poem. The part about insects reminds me of sea kelp and the bugs that abound after it washes to shore.
Have a nice day.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Thanks so very much, and sorry for the late review. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Gone but not forgotten

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem and amazing imagery, both via the words and the picture. I can feel the summer wind blowing through the boughs, gently. Very nice. Thanks.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2016

Thank so very much and sorry about the late answer. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Two Haiku for the price of one, not a bad deal. And a well-done third line Aha about the bugs. I'm no master of Haiku but both seem fine to me.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016

Thanks a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed both. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your wonderfully written contest entry. I used so few words but made them say so much. Excellent job and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2016

Hi Barbara, thanks a lot for this great review. Glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is a good one that seems to be obeying all the rules and ha a good satori line from a completely unexpected point of view. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016

Thanks so much, and so sorry about the late reply. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

"This is an excellent haiku, Ulla, and well composed.
You've definitely introduced concrete imagery with the petals gently moving with the soft breezes and insects.
Your 5-7-4 syllabic count is well within the limitations imposed by the haiku form of 17 syllables, or less.
Your haiku is depicted in present tense as a moment in time is observed.
Some vivid, easily imagined imagery used here with "petals/breeze.
Your first two lines feature a grammatical connection.
Your satori provides the tell-tale, "Ah-ha!" moment featured in all haiku as the movements of the insects are given as a partial reason for the entwined petals being rustled gently, not just by the breeze.
Your presentation is stunning to look at.

Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016

Hi Dean, what a wonderful review to receive. I am so fascinated with the haiku form and keen to learn and be better at composing them. I have been to Japan a lot and always been intrigued with their culture. Thanks a lot for this review and praise. And of course the good luck wishes. All the best. Ulla:))

reply by Dean Kuch on 16-Jun-2016

My pleasure as always, Ulla.
~Dean

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Insects have their own place in the food chain. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016

Thanks very much for this review. All the best. Ulla:)

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi Ulla, lovely artwork! Spot on syllable count. Great descriptive words and imagery. Those insects have a way of ruining everything.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016

Hi Melissa, Thanks a lot for the great review. I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from brownies

Excellent

Loved the choice of your artwork to illustrate your work. I enjoy the petals entwined and the breeze moving them yet the insects continue to keep their place. They seem hidden from the photo. It reminds me of how often we are surprised that what seemed to be perfect on the outside had a whole different story going on underneath. Great job!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016

Thanks very much for another lovely review and that you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Too bad you couldn't take a photo of this literally. It is creepy when you disturb something of beauty to find that it's crawling with bugs underneath the cover. This could be interpreted literally or figuratively. Alliteration with breeze and (a)bound. Assonance with petals and gently.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016

Thanks very much for this great review. All the best. Ulla:))