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A collection of anazing short stories

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Comment from dragonpoet
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In these three lines you get the best and worst of winter. The cold and snow and the romance inside by a warm fire. I like the alliteration in the first line and the consonance with the m sound in the last.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2016


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
    Thanks dragonpost. I've been discouraged not sold any my books in 6 mos. So sad.
reply by dragonpoet on 14-Dec-2016
    You're welcome. You have published unlike many on this site. Sales will dip, but they can rise again.

    Joan
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2016
    thanks
reply by dragonpoet on 14-Dec-2016
    No problem.

    dp
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Lovely image.
-Good poem with good format.
-Effective imagery and use of alliteration.
-I like line two with the addition of personification of winter.
-Good ending line.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
    Thank you dear poet friend. Good bye! Remember me!
reply by Pam (respa) on 25-Jun-2016
    You are welcome. Are you leaving FS?
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
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Hi there,
Good job on this one. And you hit it right on....
Icy winter promotes cuddly nights...
a good fire in the fireplace and the love
of your life by your side...
Nothing beats it..
Best wishes, (did you write to the picture this challenge girl with doll?, I couldn't find it)
:-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
    Thanks great comments. Not yet my friend.
Comment from RiseRutland
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This is a wonderful Haiku! It truly paints the picture of the cold winter. I personally moved to a sub-tropical area a year ago, partly to escape the winter. Snow is truly a beautiful and magical thing though. Love this line; Icy fingers kiss my cheeks. Thanks for sharing my friend!

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
    Thanks great stars. Contest ended yesterday. liberty justice
Comment from Douglas Paul
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This looks like a good entry into the Ode for Winter contest, Liberty. The soft winter breezes are like icy fingers kissing your cheeks - good analogy

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
    Thanks for stars. Yes contest ended. Thanks goes to f ans wh I supported me. liberty justice
Comment from Val Crisson
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Very pretty, but if this was my "ode" I would drop all the "stars" and just center the ode. I find the lay out very distracting, and think simplicity would work better. None the less, it's your work.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Thanks Val. That's something to consider. Good luck in the contest today. Thank-you!
Comment from frogbook
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Ah this is a good one with the contrasting temperatures. The icy kiss to the cheek contrasting with the better steaming kiss at the end. A good feeling poor.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Thanks! Nice review, and good luck in contest today.
Comment from BeasPeas
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I like this. Nicely done. Last line has the punch that pulls it all together.
"Hot romance warms nights"
Image to accompany is beautiful.
Marilyn

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Thanks BeasPeas for nice review. View more of mine and Good luck contest today.
Comment from Selina Stambi
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The last line made me smile. Sometimes it just feels too cold for anything!

Icy fingers kiss my cheeks - great line.

Best wishes for the contest.

Sonali


 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Thanks Selina. NIce review. View more of mine, and good luck contest today!
Comment from Ginger Banks
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Excellent, This is a really good poem, I like the way you described the "kiss" upon your cheeks, it's unique. Winter is a favorite time of year for me, and so is Christmas. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2016
    Thank you for your sharing. Review more of mine and good luck contest today, Ginger. I love
    your name. Reminds me of gingerbread.
reply by Ginger Banks on 17-Jun-2016
    Thank you. I've been struggling with health issues, so I've not been as faithful with reviewing lately, I'm sorry for that. I shall try to be better about reviewing more. I also have several novels, short stories and poems I'm working on, Lol, on this sight and off.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
    Pray tell, what publishers
    do you use? liberty justice
reply by Ginger Banks on 18-Jun-2016
    Hello, Liberty Justice, I was honored to read your work. I don't use any publishers, I've had several want me to "Self-Publish first, it's not my idea of being a success for the simple reason I feel I would be saying I'm a great writer worth having my stuff read by the masses. This isn't honest for me, I could be the worst writer in the world; my writing may not even be marketable reading; and lastly, I know I have a terrible time with deadlines (I'm over critical of my own work) because I have problems with SPaGs in a huge way. Results, I know I need a proper editor, maybe if ever "discovered" a reputible publishing house willing to pay me for my work, rather than the other way around. So I have turned each "Sales Person", for these Self-Publishing houses, down. Again, just not my idea of a success. :)