Dandelions
I love the way dandelions dot the grass.18 total reviews
Comment from foxangie123
A great five seven five. It gives lovely imagery as it should and it is formatted perfectly. I love how you used the weed as a golden mane was well because all of God's creations have purpose although some don't use it. Great work.
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A great five seven five. It gives lovely imagery as it should and it is formatted perfectly. I love how you used the weed as a golden mane was well because all of God's creations have purpose although some don't use it. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Thank you my friend for the good words.
Comment from royowen
A lovely entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, I love the imagery of what you've created in this fine post, the dandelions have an almost mystical aura to them, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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A lovely entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, I love the imagery of what you've created in this fine post, the dandelions have an almost mystical aura to them, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Thank you for such a complimentary review.
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Most welcome
Comment from RosieCus
Wonderfully descriptive. I like the phrase "golden manes" for the petals. It conjures up an image of a breeze flowing through them. A excellent short poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Wonderfully descriptive. I like the phrase "golden manes" for the petals. It conjures up an image of a breeze flowing through them. A excellent short poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your positive comments.
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You're very welcome
Comment from nanwilliamson
I like this poem You have good concrete images and also created a metaphor! I quibble about your use of the word "hunkered": it sounds a bit "clunky". Can you think of a better word?
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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I like this poem You have good concrete images and also created a metaphor! I quibble about your use of the word "hunkered": it sounds a bit "clunky". Can you think of a better word?
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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I meant for the word hunkered to imitate the way cats in general posture themselves.
Comment from Wabigoon
Excellent, from one who knows nothing about haikus and doesn't write them. But I like the golden manes which can't be hidden image -- so true. I wish that I could write a review as short as a haiku.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Excellent, from one who knows nothing about haikus and doesn't write them. But I like the golden manes which can't be hidden image -- so true. I wish that I could write a review as short as a haiku.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your wonderful review and extra star. It's much appreciated.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. I think dandelions are beautiful too. We have thousands of them in our lawn every spring. I have never tried to get rid of them because they are so pretty. Good work and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Excellent. I think dandelions are beautiful too. We have thousands of them in our lawn every spring. I have never tried to get rid of them because they are so pretty. Good work and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Thank you, not too many people appreciate dandelions.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A well-written 5-7-5 poem. The dandelions are mostly seen as a weed, but their bright yellow make a pretty sight against the green grass
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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A well-written 5-7-5 poem. The dandelions are mostly seen as a weed, but their bright yellow make a pretty sight against the green grass
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Thank you for your observations and nice review.
Comment from RodG
I can almost visualize these dandelions "hunkered down" in my grass.
Good personification which evokes sympathy for them as they seem to e hiding from the lawn mower.
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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I can almost visualize these dandelions "hunkered down" in my grass.
Good personification which evokes sympathy for them as they seem to e hiding from the lawn mower.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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I like your interpretation and thank you for the positive comments.
