To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Eye Piece"Poems by Michael
23 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can see why this poem is in the poem-of-the-month contest. It flows smoothly and is a very good read. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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I can see why this poem is in the poem-of-the-month contest. It flows smoothly and is a very good read. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Hi Barb...-smile-
yea...its a good one. glad you enjoyed it. love michael
Comment from royowen
There's been so many songs that have sung of blue skies turning to grey, and the raining in one's heart being a counter to the fine weather. But a sunny sky does have a positive "feel" to it, but nothing seems to work when depression sets in! Writing is a marvellous foil to that.
Either your writing's become clear, or God's opened the eyes of my understanding, l'm inclined to believe the latter, well done, dear bro, another fine poem, delivered succinctly well, good one, YBIC, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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There's been so many songs that have sung of blue skies turning to grey, and the raining in one's heart being a counter to the fine weather. But a sunny sky does have a positive "feel" to it, but nothing seems to work when depression sets in! Writing is a marvellous foil to that.
Either your writing's become clear, or God's opened the eyes of my understanding, l'm inclined to believe the latter, well done, dear bro, another fine poem, delivered succinctly well, good one, YBIC, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016
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Hey Roy...-smile-
hm...funny how "good" that is to hear...YBIC....been a while since I have. thank you. love Michael
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I think the scales are falling from my eyes, (I think, Michael,
Comment from TPAC
Writer has a unique presentation in their presented writes, mind considering conveyance captivating and compelling in interests.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Writer has a unique presentation in their presented writes, mind considering conveyance captivating and compelling in interests.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2016
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Hi...-smile-
I thank you kindly...appreciate the stop by. love Michael
Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes a good life is blocked by incidences beyond our control. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a good read.
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Sometimes a good life is blocked by incidences beyond our control. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a good read.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
Comment from Lisa Deverick
You have penned a very cool poem here...I like the lines: frost bitten twice shy castaway, and this time dances on waves. Well done!
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You have penned a very cool poem here...I like the lines: frost bitten twice shy castaway, and this time dances on waves. Well done!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2016
Comment from Dean Kuch
Michael,
first of all, congratulations on your Poem of the Month nomination.
You're such a master manipulator of the English language and written word, Michael, and I mean that as the most sincerest of compliments.
Some would use the term "Wordsmith", which is fitting, I think. Like a master musician tunes a cheap guitar to create something soothingly beautiful and lyrical, you never fail to do the same with the simple placement of words in key places through your emotive and expressive free verse poetry.
This lovely piece is certainly no exception.
Simply stunning...
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Michael,
first of all, congratulations on your Poem of the Month nomination.
You're such a master manipulator of the English language and written word, Michael, and I mean that as the most sincerest of compliments.
Some would use the term "Wordsmith", which is fitting, I think. Like a master musician tunes a cheap guitar to create something soothingly beautiful and lyrical, you never fail to do the same with the simple placement of words in key places through your emotive and expressive free verse poetry.
This lovely piece is certainly no exception.
Simply stunning...
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Hey thanks Dean...-smile-
ah well i've been called worse...haha....
thanks...coming from the "Sage" of the darker side of life, it is compliment for sure. Appreciate you Sir. love to you...Michael
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My pleasure, Micheal, anytime.
~Dean
Comment from RoostyNester
Nice poem on the eye and what beholds. Nice picture to give base to your poem.
The eye is the window to the soul. It stores all things in memory to be kept forever.
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Nice poem on the eye and what beholds. Nice picture to give base to your poem.
The eye is the window to the soul. It stores all things in memory to be kept forever.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
Comment from Janet Foor
So much imagery in the free verse poem. I don't claim to understand most free verse poetry but this one has so much feeling. Sad and somber and yet beautiful thought provoking.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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So much imagery in the free verse poem. I don't claim to understand most free verse poetry but this one has so much feeling. Sad and somber and yet beautiful thought provoking.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Janet
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Hi...smile......well thank you. Happy you enjoyed. Have a great day. Love to you
Comment from Challah1202
Some arresting mental images here. The first line grabbed me.
Repeated references to undefinable realities--windows of soul, drowning self sacrifice, familiar friends of failure, effort unbearable, frost bitten twice shy castaway, time dances on waves. I was moved and mystified. Some of the references seem obscure. I didn't understand all of it. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Some arresting mental images here. The first line grabbed me.
Repeated references to undefinable realities--windows of soul, drowning self sacrifice, familiar friends of failure, effort unbearable, frost bitten twice shy castaway, time dances on waves. I was moved and mystified. Some of the references seem obscure. I didn't understand all of it. Good job.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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-headshake-...K....smile
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
deep reflection sinks ocean
swimming windows of soul
something sad draws shade from sunshine
This is a great poem with so much depth. I especially love the lines above. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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deep reflection sinks ocean
swimming windows of soul
something sad draws shade from sunshine
This is a great poem with so much depth. I especially love the lines above. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
