Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Burglar"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
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Comment from mfowler
Cody was right. He did not know what he was right about. But he knew he was right. He could smell the aroma....I thought this was a brilliant start to the chapter. It's the kind of hook that makes you want to read on. This kid is a determined little fella. Against the odds, writing a piece with more words than he had in his vocab (very good), and then on to having a lookie-look in Fred Taylor's house. A good action chapter where we see Cody's personality really take shape. Loved:
Now to get inside the darkened house. Like the little monkey he was, Cody shimmied up the rock wall
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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Cody was right. He did not know what he was right about. But he knew he was right. He could smell the aroma....I thought this was a brilliant start to the chapter. It's the kind of hook that makes you want to read on. This kid is a determined little fella. Against the odds, writing a piece with more words than he had in his vocab (very good), and then on to having a lookie-look in Fred Taylor's house. A good action chapter where we see Cody's personality really take shape. Loved:
Now to get inside the darkened house. Like the little monkey he was, Cody shimmied up the rock wall
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Kooky Clown
I am not quite sure where I am with this story but wherever I am I am still enjoying reading it just to see how Cody is getting on there are so many different stories I am trying to review and follow it does get difficult but yours is one I look forward to.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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I am not quite sure where I am with this story but wherever I am I am still enjoying reading it just to see how Cody is getting on there are so many different stories I am trying to review and follow it does get difficult but yours is one I look forward to.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Much more to come in the second Cody Schroder book known as Missing. Come along for the ride.
Comment from judiverse
Even after he's been grounded and made to write a 10,000 word essay on why sneaking out of the house was wrong, Cody is still determined to find out what Taylor has been up to, and why he tried to run him over. He won't be deterred from his mission, even though he has already been in so much trouble. At least he didn't break a window to get into Taylor's house. He isn't sure what he's looking for, but there is bound to be evidence against Taylor, and he's determined to find it. He has courage, but it's best to leave such things to the adults. judi
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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Even after he's been grounded and made to write a 10,000 word essay on why sneaking out of the house was wrong, Cody is still determined to find out what Taylor has been up to, and why he tried to run him over. He won't be deterred from his mission, even though he has already been in so much trouble. At least he didn't break a window to get into Taylor's house. He isn't sure what he's looking for, but there is bound to be evidence against Taylor, and he's determined to find it. He has courage, but it's best to leave such things to the adults. judi
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my story. Your comments and support appreciated.
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You're very welcome. Happy trails. judi
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You're very welcome. Happy trails. judi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, I have come back to the story. Too busy with cherry picking, but now the season is over. This is a good chapter which I enjoyed to read.
To find what he hunted = to find what he hunted for.
so he took a couple deep breaths = a couple of deep breaths
To settle himself down = to settle down. Himself is not needed.
Looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla:)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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Hi Brett, I have come back to the story. Too busy with cherry picking, but now the season is over. This is a good chapter which I enjoyed to read.
To find what he hunted = to find what he hunted for.
so he took a couple deep breaths = a couple of deep breaths
To settle himself down = to settle down. Himself is not needed.
Looking forward to what's next. All the best. Ulla:)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from misscookie
You captured my attention again my friend.
With that boy there is never a dull moment.
When he an adult he should become a officer he truly has the gift f
for it..Lol.
That Cody reminds me of my sister she was for ever getting into some thing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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You captured my attention again my friend.
With that boy there is never a dull moment.
When he an adult he should become a officer he truly has the gift f
for it..Lol.
That Cody reminds me of my sister she was for ever getting into some thing.
Cookie
Comment Written 08-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this misscookie. Your comments and support always welcome.
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Thank you very much for those kind words, take care.
Cookie
Comment from MTF1955
I just love Cody. Damn gutsy kid. Your story moves along smoothly and keeps the reader interested. Look forward to the next part. Great job. Mary
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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I just love Cody. Damn gutsy kid. Your story moves along smoothly and keeps the reader interested. Look forward to the next part. Great job. Mary
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from foxangie123
At the beginning the word right is used so frequently together it became a tongue twister:). I wanna know what happens. I'm on edge. Great and most entertaining.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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At the beginning the word right is used so frequently together it became a tongue twister:). I wanna know what happens. I'm on edge. Great and most entertaining.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
Oh, He is really getting into trouble now. I have a feeling the Deputy is going to catch him and that could be fatal.
He should have known that he is breaking rules again just as much as leaving the house for the party. He is certainly a hand full. Nancy
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Oh, He is really getting into trouble now. I have a feeling the Deputy is going to catch him and that could be fatal.
He should have known that he is breaking rules again just as much as leaving the house for the party. He is certainly a hand full. Nancy
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
You used suspense masterfully in this post. Short sentences, to the point, all build up the suspense well. The story is moving well, and it is short enough to get multiple readers.
I like the way Cody knows he's doing the right thing because it smells right.
Nicely done,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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You used suspense masterfully in this post. Short sentences, to the point, all build up the suspense well. The story is moving well, and it is short enough to get multiple readers.
I like the way Cody knows he's doing the right thing because it smells right.
Nicely done,
Rhonda
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This is another writing that has kept me satisfied, but stopped just when I thought I'd know if the first drawer would have what he was looking for. Of course it ended so I would stay in suspense. You're really great at doing that to the reader. LOL
Kat
Kat
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Hi Brett,
This is another writing that has kept me satisfied, but stopped just when I thought I'd know if the first drawer would have what he was looking for. Of course it ended so I would stay in suspense. You're really great at doing that to the reader. LOL
Kat
Kat
Comment Written 07-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
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Thanks for your appreciation. Kat
