Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Mom should listen more to her daughter instead of going ahead trying to make her own dreams come true by planning an exquisite reception to learn she gained another daughter and not a son. Lol.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016

Thank you for your kind review and comments for my story, Sandra. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

OMG, Karyn, why don't they just hand you the trophy now? That is one great yarn!

Please understand, but ..." [Just a suggestion here. The ellipsis is more for a dropping off of speech, a long pause. I wonder if an em dash (--) might be better, as an interruption.]

I'm so happy I haven't given away my last six yet!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2016

Oh gosh, Jay! I'm so honored by your wonderful review, kind comments, and generous rating for my story. I'm truly thrilled you enjoyed it, and I really appreciate your lesson about ellipsis. I always use them for interrupted speech or dialogue and had no idea I've been wrong for a bazillion years. Thank you so much!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from C.J. 16

Exceptional

Excellent work on this phone confession. The dialogue is gripping, and tells a story that is interesting, entertaining, and has a surprise ending. Very well done. All the best.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

Thank you so much, C. J., for your great review, kind comments, and generous rating. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your kind words. I'm delighted you enjoyed the dialogue.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by C.J. 16 on 07-Jun-2016

You're very welcome Karyn.

reply by Anonymous Member on 09-Jun-2016

You're very welcome Karyn.

Comment from JBCaine

Exceptional

Indy!-
I know it's just the mean in me oozing out, but how much more fun would it have been to go through with the big weddin' as a coming out party? (I know, it's just mean, plus wouldn't have worked in this story, but... thinking about it made me laugh.)
Well done, with a decidedly shocking double-whammy at the end.
JBCaine-

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

Oh, JB! Thank you so much for this wonderful review, your devious comments, and for the sixth star. I think your wedding coming out celebration would make a great story...you have my permission to give it a rip. I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for your oozing meanness.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Winslow

Exceptional

Dear Irish,

I was going to give you a five and then I read the ending. Great story and it is the inverse of what usually happens. The parents of the bride usually end up spending mucho bucks.

Warm regards,

Winslow

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

Well thanks for reading to the end, Winslow! I truly appreciate your kind review and that generous extra sixth star that's shining so bright. Thanks for taking the time to read my story and for sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Irish :-)

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Oh Karyn what a wonderfully told dialogue only story. We would have no clue until the very last line this is a gay marriage. So that is a wonderful bit misleading that works into a fine conclusion.

Love it, and welcome to the Prose Potlatch. Your dish is most appreciated. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

Thanks, Gloria! I always appreciate your feedback, and your kind review and comments are always inspiring and encouraging. I hope I can join in more of the potlatches.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by Gloria .... on 06-Jun-2016

Good because you write 'em up real fine. :))

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very good short story you have penned for the contest. you used very good descriptive wording, great dialog and great imagery. Good luck in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

Thank you for your review and taking the time to read and share your thoughts for my story, Teri7. I'm delighted you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Word Junkie

Excellent

Hello I.I.,

Don't have a heart attack, eh? This story is perfect for the contest. Two confessions for the price of one. That poor mom--laying dead on the floor in her Florida home.

Lol. I noted no SPAG. Great job of telling a story with a minimum of words.

Good luck in the contest,
Lana

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

Thank you, Lana, for your great review and kind words for my story. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts.LOL at mom laying dead on the floor in Florida. Thanks so much!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi IDIANIRISH,
So sorry I am late with my review, This is wonderful. OMG what a great confession. I love this.
How many of us wish we could have done this. That was real gutsy and the end line was just priceless
Fantastic read.
Brenda:))x

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

A review like this is never late, Brenda! I haven't started reviewing the potlatch prose yet. Thank you for your great review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I Appreciate your kind comments.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

KARYN!

Okay, you managed the over 200 words (I feel certain) and a shocking confession - and then, a SOCKING CONFESSION. OMS, girl, what are you trying to DO to that poor mother?

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHA

GREAT JOB!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016

Thanks so much for your great review and comments for my story, Robyn. I'm pleased you enjoyed the ending, and I loved all your hahahaha. Thanks for giving it a read and sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)