Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

LOL... how did I see this coming? I love it! I fully expected one of my kids to do that. ;) It still wouldn't surprise me if my son did, lol isn't that funny? And he and his girlfriend have been living together for more than four years. lol
I don't know what makes me say that. ;)
A VERY well written piece of prose... This might be the first potlatch piece to make it to the Story of the Month, eh?
Great job! I'm so glad this was nominated! Well done!
I loved it
Cat

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2016

Thanks so much, Cat, for this great review for my story. I'm not sure if this is the first prose potlatch to make the list of 'story of the month', but if it is, I'm sure thrilled about it. I'm pleased you enjoyed the story, and thanks for your kind words.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

LOL! I love this. The whole conversation is entertaining, and then that shocker at the end is the PERFECT touch. Good luck in the contest. :)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2016

Thank you, Phyllis, for your great review and kind comments for my story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and thanks for mentioning the ending twist.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

IndianIrish...a great story with flawless and believable dialogue throughout. Wasn't expecting that twist at the end. Now what will mom do and say to her friends? I can understand her over-bearing mom's desire to create the perfect wedding for her daughter, but that's a bit over the hill in taking control. Great job! Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016

Thank you very much, Susanne, for this very kind review for my story. I truly appreciate your encouraging response and thank you so much for your best wishes in the story of the month contest. I'm so thrilled it was selected!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Kelly Allen

Excellent

Wow Indiana... Your story was great. The end was quite shocking. My mom planned our wedding just like you explained. My husband and I celebrate 37years next week and I still remember that day. Enjoyable, Kelly

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016

Thank you very much, Kelly, for your kind review and comments for my dialogue story. I appreciate your response, and I'm delighted you found it enjoyable.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

reply by Kelly Allen on 20-Jun-2016

:)

Comment from Zaymacc

Exceptional

I really have liked this post. You are right in this story though, LOL. Your grammar is on point and your punctuations are in the right places.. I give this a rate 6

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016

Thanks so much, Z, for this awesome review, kind comments, and generous rating for my story. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from spellbound

Exceptional

This is outstanding. Love the twist.

I love this line:

"My intentions have always been to give you the most outstanding social event Ft. Lauderdale has ever seen."

This definitely meets the above-mentioned requirements. If this is for a contest, I hope this does well.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016

Spellbound, I'm so honored by your wonderful review, kind comments, and very generous rating for my story. Thank you for taking the time to read nd share your thoughts. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the story and thanks for mentioning you liked the twist.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

reply by spellbound on 11-Jun-2016

What are your goals for writing on FanStory? If it's just to give us a good read, why don't you let us know your difficulties and allow us to read what you've written. If it's for publishing, enlist some help from a close friend or relation.
I love this story. I'd hate to see you leave if you enjoy what you're doing.

reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016

Excuse me, spellbound, but I'm not understanding your reply to my reply to your wonderful review. I'm not going anywhere!

reply by spellbound on 14-Jun-2016

oops, sorry. Must have gone up instead of down causing me to leave a reply to the wrong author. (And, glad to hear you're not going anywhere.)

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, how on earth could I miss this. It is outstanding. I am still laughing. Love it. You already came up with one surprise and then you ended it with a another even greater one.. Never saw it coming. Wonderful! Please do forgive me for seeing this so late. These challenges are really funny. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016

Thank you so much, Ulla, for this great review and for taking the time to share your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and it's never too late to get such a lovely response. Thank you.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from Lynn27

Exceptional

This is outstanding piece! I wasn't confused who was talking and understand the story problem. I was yanked into this story and I desired to know what would happened next. I loved the twisted at the end!

Outstanding work!

Happy birthday,

Lynn

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016

Lynn, I'm so honored to receive such a wonderful review, kind comments, and your generous rating for my story. Thank you for taking the time to read and share your houghts. I'm delighted you enjoyed the story. Thanks!
Smiles,
Indy :-)

reply by Lynn27 on 09-Jun-2016

You're welcome. I enjoyed reading it. Sorry about auto correct.

Happy Writing not Happy Birthday. Lol

Lynn

reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016

LOL it's almost my 1/2 birthday, so I took it as a birthday congratulations!

Comment from enitsalemap

Excellent

I love the twist at the end. What is it about mother's who are so controlling? My mom was so sweet but many of my friends had mother's just like the one in your story. Job well done.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016

Thank you for your great review and comments for my story, enitsalemap. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm delighted you enjoyed the story, and thank you for mentioning you liked the twist.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

reply by enitsalemap on 09-Jun-2016

you are welcome

Comment from Mabaker

Exceptional

Oh my oh my! I'd loved to have seen the old girl's face! It would have been the best Christmas present of them all! Alexandria! Wow that was terrific. I hope you win the contest you deserve to. Very well put together. Regards Mabaker

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016

MaBaker, I'm so honored to receive such a wonderful review, kind comments, and your generous rating for my story. Thank you for taking the time to read and share your houghts. I'm delighted you enjoyed the story. Thank you so much!
Smiles,
Indy :-)