Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Slumber Party "A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
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Comment from judiverse
I think you might use extra spacing or some other means of showing a break between Taylor eyeing the cocktail waitress and Sheriff Daniels telling Cody he doesn't want him to go to Matt's because a storm is coming. He resists the offer of ice cream and plans to skip out and go to Matt's anyway. Which fits in precisely with Taylor's scheme. You really show the mean streak in Taylor and how revenge for losing his job is Number 1 on his mind. His evil streak cannot be denied. Wonder how he got to be deputy in the first place. judi
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
I think you might use extra spacing or some other means of showing a break between Taylor eyeing the cocktail waitress and Sheriff Daniels telling Cody he doesn't want him to go to Matt's because a storm is coming. He resists the offer of ice cream and plans to skip out and go to Matt's anyway. Which fits in precisely with Taylor's scheme. You really show the mean streak in Taylor and how revenge for losing his job is Number 1 on his mind. His evil streak cannot be denied. Wonder how he got to be deputy in the first place. judi
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Your comments and support appreciated.
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Great work! judi
Comment from Sankey
Hmmm I was right about the former deputy huh! What a rat. Good story. Can't figure out what age this is aimed for? Some of it would go well for Youth but then some??
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
Hmmm I was right about the former deputy huh! What a rat. Good story. Can't figure out what age this is aimed for? Some of it would go well for Youth but then some??
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH no.
Soon to be in the hands of the enemy and no one to miss him for awhile.
But I think Cody is a bright young man and can hold off evil till help comes.
Great read
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
OH no.
Soon to be in the hands of the enemy and no one to miss him for awhile.
But I think Cody is a bright young man and can hold off evil till help comes.
Great read
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from misscookie
Oh boy
Here we go again
I away told my children you have only two people to fear in your life and they both know when your doing something wrong.... Can you guess who I'm talking about?..... I have me on my toes I thought you should be on yours also.... LOL
Cookie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
Oh boy
Here we go again
I away told my children you have only two people to fear in your life and they both know when your doing something wrong.... Can you guess who I'm talking about?..... I have me on my toes I thought you should be on yours also.... LOL
Cookie
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this misscookie.
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take care, until next time.
Cookie
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This is another nice chapter. Being old and forgetful there were a few lines I didn't understand until I read them over and over again. Your not at fault so don't take what I said the wrong way. LOL My brain's not working like it should.
Kat
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
Hi Brett,
This is another nice chapter. Being old and forgetful there were a few lines I didn't understand until I read them over and over again. Your not at fault so don't take what I said the wrong way. LOL My brain's not working like it should.
Kat
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.