On Reaching The Top
When you reach the top there is nowhere to go but down56 total reviews
Comment from create4christ
That is not a good route to take. ð??? This is a beautiful poem, though. Your rhymes and rhythm flow nicely. Though this is sad...Never good to step on people...it happens all too often.
Well done. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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That is not a good route to take. ð??? This is a beautiful poem, though. Your rhymes and rhythm flow nicely. Though this is sad...Never good to step on people...it happens all too often.
Well done. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Your comment and rating was enjoyed and appreciated
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent poem in the form of a sonnet
with very good ABAB rhymes
and solid meter that reads quite well
Very good turn in stanza three and reflective couplet
Excellent message, as well
Some might suggest it was all an illusion
the further he rose, the further down he went
Till in the end, he hit rock bottom, no soul, no grace
Very nicely done
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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This is an excellent poem in the form of a sonnet
with very good ABAB rhymes
and solid meter that reads quite well
Very good turn in stanza three and reflective couplet
Excellent message, as well
Some might suggest it was all an illusion
the further he rose, the further down he went
Till in the end, he hit rock bottom, no soul, no grace
Very nicely done
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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A very pleasing comment that was greatly appreciated
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
I know when I see your name on it, I'm going to love it! And you know I'm going to 'study' it. Every line but one is the perfect iambic. I'll explain: we want "da-DA"
"to reach...So step...now near...and saw...He wor-" "thinking doesn't go. But "in thinking or and thinking fortune made his day carries out your meter pattern to a
T. Lots of people try that route--it never works--makes for good movies and stories though. GoodHearted Woman Marcia
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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I know when I see your name on it, I'm going to love it! And you know I'm going to 'study' it. Every line but one is the perfect iambic. I'll explain: we want "da-DA"
"to reach...So step...now near...and saw...He wor-" "thinking doesn't go. But "in thinking or and thinking fortune made his day carries out your meter pattern to a
T. Lots of people try that route--it never works--makes for good movies and stories though. GoodHearted Woman Marcia
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Many thanks my Good friend.I appreciate your comment and advice.I need much help
Comment from RodG
I like this short narrative poem that describes an ambitious man who obviously feels the end justifies the means. in your closing couplet It's not clear if HE regrets the route he took, or if the observer (speaker in the poem) is simply moralizing.
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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I like this short narrative poem that describes an ambitious man who obviously feels the end justifies the means. in your closing couplet It's not clear if HE regrets the route he took, or if the observer (speaker in the poem) is simply moralizing.
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Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thank you my friend-greatly appreciated. I believe many of these climbers wind up with deep regrets
Comment from P1
a lot of people are living by this
rule these days and it makes me mad
pushing friends and loved ones away just
to claim success and fortune... at the end of
the day what does it matter. pleasure to read
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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a lot of people are living by this
rule these days and it makes me mad
pushing friends and loved ones away just
to claim success and fortune... at the end of
the day what does it matter. pleasure to read
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thank yo u my friend.Sadly, that the way it is much to often, but we can't all be as Trump
Comment from AnnaLinda
Jay,
You have a very strong message in your well composed poem.
It's like a poetic parable. Your rhymes were enjoyable and the
message appreciated.
The following lines stood out to me as being very
special:
"With loss of heart and stubborn pride,
'twas there he lost what can't be bought.
Also, your ending couplet is impacting and
well formed...Sad.
Linda
(you need one extra space after *(last)
in the 2nd to last line:)
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Jay,
You have a very strong message in your well composed poem.
It's like a poetic parable. Your rhymes were enjoyable and the
message appreciated.
The following lines stood out to me as being very
special:
"With loss of heart and stubborn pride,
'twas there he lost what can't be bought.
Also, your ending couplet is impacting and
well formed...Sad.
Linda
(you need one extra space after *(last)
in the 2nd to last line:)
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Linda-thank you for comment, rating and corrections needed..I have gotten the font size and color figured out.
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Oh, it looks great!
