On Reaching The Top
When you reach the top there is nowhere to go but down56 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, yes all those they step on and the right from wrong they just push aside so they may reach the top, unknowing they will pass us on their way down, an excellent read with a very good message****kahpot
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Excellent, yes all those they step on and the right from wrong they just push aside so they may reach the top, unknowing they will pass us on their way down, an excellent read with a very good message****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
Comment from lyenochka
That is so sad when people are so obssessed with worldly goals and when late in life, they realize that the really most important things were to love God and others and nurture friendships that last.
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That is so sad when people are so obssessed with worldly goals and when late in life, they realize that the really most important things were to love God and others and nurture friendships that last.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
Comment from Insider98
Food for thought...We usually think that success is always good, but we forget about how some people go about it. If someone brings down others in order to succeed, then I don't think he/she has really "won" anything. Great job!
Insider98
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Food for thought...We usually think that success is always good, but we forget about how some people go about it. If someone brings down others in order to succeed, then I don't think he/she has really "won" anything. Great job!
Insider98
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hi Jaybird1, you seem to be counterintuitive in this work, we usually asscociate reaching the summit as success, but in the poem you use it as a warning that you can lose your soul along the way if you're too tunnel vision, goal driven to the extent of everything else can be blinding. I guess the word, 'balance' springs to mind.
Good poem that was nicely paced to reach an original ending. Thanks for sharing your poetry with me today, cheers, Anastasia.
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Hi Jaybird1, you seem to be counterintuitive in this work, we usually asscociate reaching the summit as success, but in the poem you use it as a warning that you can lose your soul along the way if you're too tunnel vision, goal driven to the extent of everything else can be blinding. I guess the word, 'balance' springs to mind.
Good poem that was nicely paced to reach an original ending. Thanks for sharing your poetry with me today, cheers, Anastasia.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
Comment from Earl Corp
I guess climbing the mountains of life can be costly in the afterlife. I like the line " he lost what can't be bought. " You did a very nice job..
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I guess climbing the mountains of life can be costly in the afterlife. I like the line " he lost what can't be bought. " You did a very nice job..
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is an excellent written poem. It sad to see this happen. It's sonething you can't buy. When the world falls down around them, it's a different story.
This is a great poem.
Great job
Regards
Tia
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Hi
This is an excellent written poem. It sad to see this happen. It's sonething you can't buy. When the world falls down around them, it's a different story.
This is a great poem.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
Comment from phil nelson
once again I am fascinated by your ability to create a simple poem that has such complexity of thought--you capture the reader and create a desire for more of the story--most enjoyable!
All the Best!
phil
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once again I am fascinated by your ability to create a simple poem that has such complexity of thought--you capture the reader and create a desire for more of the story--most enjoyable!
All the Best!
phil
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
Comment from victor 66
If you strive for more than you need, how do you ever find out what you really need? I have enough to eat and pay the bills, but there's not a lot left after that. I consider myself not rich, but well off in that respect. "A wise man needs little." No, I don't consider myself wise, but I am pretty damn happy. Best wishes.
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If you strive for more than you need, how do you ever find out what you really need? I have enough to eat and pay the bills, but there's not a lot left after that. I consider myself not rich, but well off in that respect. "A wise man needs little." No, I don't consider myself wise, but I am pretty damn happy. Best wishes.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
Comment from LynSys
There's truth in the old saying "It's lonely at the top"...your poem gives the reason why for so many.
Nice flow~~to your writing, Jaybird1.
Lynda (LynSys)
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There's truth in the old saying "It's lonely at the top"...your poem gives the reason why for so many.
Nice flow~~to your writing, Jaybird1.
Lynda (LynSys)
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved this poem and its sentiments, I have a suggestion for the third stanza just to improve the meter for you, last line would be much better "and thinking fortune made his day" This is just a suggestion, your poem is much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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I loved this poem and its sentiments, I have a suggestion for the third stanza just to improve the meter for you, last line would be much better "and thinking fortune made his day" This is just a suggestion, your poem is much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
