Minnesota Poems
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Comment from rod007
It is indeed a great rule like "Do not do unto others what you would not want them to do to you." The rhyming was wonderful, Tom. Keep up the great poetic musings. Of all the books in the world, the bible holds a lot of jewels.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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It is indeed a great rule like "Do not do unto others what you would not want them to do to you." The rhyming was wonderful, Tom. Keep up the great poetic musings. Of all the books in the world, the bible holds a lot of jewels.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Thank you Rod. Yes, indeed.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your picture is very good. It is so clear. It looks like an antique which I like, too.
Your words flow smoothly with a super message. So many everywhere need to practice it.
You did an awesome job with the rhyme. I love 'moral jewel', too.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Your picture is very good. It is so clear. It looks like an antique which I like, too.
Your words flow smoothly with a super message. So many everywhere need to practice it.
You did an awesome job with the rhyme. I love 'moral jewel', too.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thank you Jan. It is an antique. In the 50's. It belonged to a store named The Golden Rule. The store is gone, but the clock is still there.
Comment from amada
Wonderful lines in this beautiful work. It's simple and lovely, sometimes we deal with every day. I love the little lady residing at my right side, the old man at my left side, mowing his huge lawn at dinner time. Trying to love him too.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Wonderful lines in this beautiful work. It's simple and lovely, sometimes we deal with every day. I love the little lady residing at my right side, the old man at my left side, mowing his huge lawn at dinner time. Trying to love him too.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thank you Amada. See, it's working already.
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you were inspired by the clock to take its picture and create this Minute Poem. I enjoyed your rhymes and "treasure" metaphor along with the play on "timeless". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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I am glad you were inspired by the clock to take its picture and create this Minute Poem. I enjoyed your rhymes and "treasure" metaphor along with the play on "timeless". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thank you Joan. Nobody else caught that timeless aspect.
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I am pleased to have been on the same wavelength. Smiles- Joan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the golden rule. i like the clock and glad you took a picture of it. it should strike a chord with all that see it. i enjoyed reading your minute poem
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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this is an excellent write, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the golden rule. i like the clock and glad you took a picture of it. it should strike a chord with all that see it. i enjoyed reading your minute poem
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2016
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Thank you Sweetwoodjax.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"The Golden Rule" is an excellent minute poem following requirements of that form with excellent rhyme and meter. The figurative language is first rate with
"moral jewel" a fresh metaphor. The rhyme is simple and apt. "treasure beyond measure" also a fresh and picturesque metaphor. Your muse did not lead you astray. This poem is an eternal truth.
Your friend and colleague.
Preston
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Hi, Treischel,
"The Golden Rule" is an excellent minute poem following requirements of that form with excellent rhyme and meter. The figurative language is first rate with
"moral jewel" a fresh metaphor. The rhyme is simple and apt. "treasure beyond measure" also a fresh and picturesque metaphor. Your muse did not lead you astray. This poem is an eternal truth.
Your friend and colleague.
Preston
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thank you Preston, for your support and excellent review.
Comment from Pantygynt
Your minute poem explains the Golden Rule perfectly al thou I am not 100% convinced on the iambiv meter. The first stanza in its entirety and all the 4 syllable lines are definitely iambic but the first line of the second and third stanza saeem to me to have strong dactylic sympathies. The natural scansion would seem to be
trochee - dactyl - spondee - catelctic trochee
/ ^ ¦ / ^ ^¦ / / ¦ /
Guiding principle that's timeless,
-dactyl-spondee-iamb
^¦ / ^ ^ ¦ / / ¦ ^ /
A visible curbside treasure,
These seem to fit happily into the poem does a minute poem have to be iambic?
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Your minute poem explains the Golden Rule perfectly al thou I am not 100% convinced on the iambiv meter. The first stanza in its entirety and all the 4 syllable lines are definitely iambic but the first line of the second and third stanza saeem to me to have strong dactylic sympathies. The natural scansion would seem to be
trochee - dactyl - spondee - catelctic trochee
/ ^ ¦ / ^ ^¦ / / ¦ /
Guiding principle that's timeless,
-dactyl-spondee-iamb
^¦ / ^ ^ ¦ / / ¦ ^ /
A visible curbside treasure,
These seem to fit happily into the poem does a minute poem have to be iambic?
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. I cut and pasted the poem format info and didn't realize it was supposed to be iambic.
Comment from enitsalemap
I am learning many new forms at your expert hand, I think. This is fine work, the rhymes, the meter, the coherent and interesting lesson taught. Once again, Good stuff. Loved the photo, too.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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I am learning many new forms at your expert hand, I think. This is fine work, the rhymes, the meter, the coherent and interesting lesson taught. Once again, Good stuff. Loved the photo, too.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thank you so much enitsalemap.
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you are welcome
Comment from judyd1
The Golden Rule is indeed a timeless principle, and worthy of a poet's best efforts. This poet followed the minute poem rules very nicely, while waxing about the value of the Golden Rule in our modern day lives. I happen to believe the Golden Rule is very practical for today, thus, it's timeless quality. The only thing that confused me slightly, and a point that I mused over at length, is how it's a "curbside" treasure? I didn't understand the reference, if any. One other word in the last stanza that I had to think about for a bit, was the use of the word 'jewel' to rhyme with 'rule'. Since 'jewel' has two syllables, I wanted to pronounce 'rule' with two syllables. But I think that's just a southern accent thing. You chose a great subject, and used a good choice of imagery.
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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The Golden Rule is indeed a timeless principle, and worthy of a poet's best efforts. This poet followed the minute poem rules very nicely, while waxing about the value of the Golden Rule in our modern day lives. I happen to believe the Golden Rule is very practical for today, thus, it's timeless quality. The only thing that confused me slightly, and a point that I mused over at length, is how it's a "curbside" treasure? I didn't understand the reference, if any. One other word in the last stanza that I had to think about for a bit, was the use of the word 'jewel' to rhyme with 'rule'. Since 'jewel' has two syllables, I wanted to pronounce 'rule' with two syllables. But I think that's just a southern accent thing. You chose a great subject, and used a good choice of imagery.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thank you Judy. If you look at the photo more closely you will see it is in a fixed location, along a street's curb, thus the curbside reference. Rule is only 1 syllable. I used the word jewel, as a metaphor for something that is precious,nas these words should be considered precious.
Comment from P1
a very fine minute poem well written
and a lovely picture to accompany it
there is a strong message within these
words and a rule to live by my pleasure
to read and review
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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a very fine minute poem well written
and a lovely picture to accompany it
there is a strong message within these
words and a rule to live by my pleasure
to read and review
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2016
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Thank you very much Paige.
