The Vanished Dream
I took the wrong road through life.41 total reviews
Comment from NadineM
I am so sorry for all your losses. How awful, and forever painful. I also celebrate with you, the time you had with both your children. They truly were your joys in life.
I enjoyed your writing. Only suggestion I might make is to remove the words: "So, In conclusion," as they are unnecessary. It's obvious that your last few lines ARE your conclusion.
We all live with regrets. We all have memories we cherish as well. Hold onto the blessings. You had dreams, but having them wasn't wrong. The dreams didn't hurt you. Your "prince" and his life choices did. Don't blame yourself then for the hurt and pain he caused you. Give yourself credit for moving on when you did. You made a better life for yourself! For that, you should be proud!!
Best wishes in the contest. Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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I am so sorry for all your losses. How awful, and forever painful. I also celebrate with you, the time you had with both your children. They truly were your joys in life.
I enjoyed your writing. Only suggestion I might make is to remove the words: "So, In conclusion," as they are unnecessary. It's obvious that your last few lines ARE your conclusion.
We all live with regrets. We all have memories we cherish as well. Hold onto the blessings. You had dreams, but having them wasn't wrong. The dreams didn't hurt you. Your "prince" and his life choices did. Don't blame yourself then for the hurt and pain he caused you. Give yourself credit for moving on when you did. You made a better life for yourself! For that, you should be proud!!
Best wishes in the contest. Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you, Nadine. I will edit and take your suggestion. My choice of a 'prince' didn't do me a whole heck of a lot of good either. My dad did his best to change my mind but I was young and foolish. Inside my mind, I knew dad was right.
Comment from GeraldS
Your "Vanished Dream" story was nicely crafted and well written. The narrative was a short autobiography that provided an interesting insight into your life. It was, of course, a bit depressing to read, but at least you included some of your happier memories too... your childhood while growing up and the years you enjoyed with your son. Life, unfortunately, is not all sugar and spice, so we all have some less than stellar memories and perhaps even some outright regrets. Still, we go on hoping for the best for the remaining years of our lives.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Your "Vanished Dream" story was nicely crafted and well written. The narrative was a short autobiography that provided an interesting insight into your life. It was, of course, a bit depressing to read, but at least you included some of your happier memories too... your childhood while growing up and the years you enjoyed with your son. Life, unfortunately, is not all sugar and spice, so we all have some less than stellar memories and perhaps even some outright regrets. Still, we go on hoping for the best for the remaining years of our lives.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you. Yes, I have learned to cope with these misfortunes. I decided to remember the good times and let the bad go.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Taking the wrong road through life is a tough situation to be in as this well written story depicts.
However, it is never too late to turn around and go down the right road.
Just because a wish one may have when they are young does not mean the end result is not better than the dream world.
Should be a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Taking the wrong road through life is a tough situation to be in as this well written story depicts.
However, it is never too late to turn around and go down the right road.
Just because a wish one may have when they are young does not mean the end result is not better than the dream world.
Should be a good contest entry.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you. Yes, I was very depressed and ready to leave this planet for quite a while. I finally decided to remember the happy times and let the bad times go. I'm so grateful for the 16 years I had my son. He taught me a lot about love.
Comment from sage17611
Your story is very heartfelt and sad, the loss of two children is devastating. You life was not your dream life but at least at times you were happy and had the support of your mother. When we are young we more or less learn as we live, everyone has made bad choices. I really enjoyed reading your story which is very well written, heartfelt and emotive. Thanks for sharing, good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Your story is very heartfelt and sad, the loss of two children is devastating. You life was not your dream life but at least at times you were happy and had the support of your mother. When we are young we more or less learn as we live, everyone has made bad choices. I really enjoyed reading your story which is very well written, heartfelt and emotive. Thanks for sharing, good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you. I made up my mind to remember the good times and let the bad go. It is called survival and, it was either let it go, or perish. I'm doing okay now.
Comment from jusylee72
Your story was told with such maturity, love and understanding. Buying into that dream was a part of our generation and it wasn't a mistake. I wish you well even though your dream never came true. I am so happy your son had you for those sixteen years. He really needed you.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Your story was told with such maturity, love and understanding. Buying into that dream was a part of our generation and it wasn't a mistake. I wish you well even though your dream never came true. I am so happy your son had you for those sixteen years. He really needed you.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you. I needed my son too. We were very close, more like best friends than mother and son. I do not regret the 16 years we spent together.
Comment from Gone but not forgotten
Thank you for sharing your often painful story. It's awful to have regrets when looking back at our lives. My prince was a dud, too, but I walked away and found another life, gratefully. One with love and fun. But none of us can ever feel what you've lived through: the loss of two children. I wish you well.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you for sharing your often painful story. It's awful to have regrets when looking back at our lives. My prince was a dud, too, but I walked away and found another life, gratefully. One with love and fun. But none of us can ever feel what you've lived through: the loss of two children. I wish you well.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you. actually, my son and I were very happy after I divorced my 'prince'. My son was a good person and did not like the way his father lived. I will never regret the 16 years I spent with my son. I am doing okay now. I remember the good times and have let the bad go.
Comment from create4christ
Aww. My tears are flowing for your two lost sons. I was so hoping as I read that you would find a new prince and your dream would come g
through. Your husband was a jerk. You sound like a princess. I'm sorry life dealt you such a hard blow. This is a beautiful story, though...though tragic and sad. Good luck with your BIGGEST DREAM contest.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Aww. My tears are flowing for your two lost sons. I was so hoping as I read that you would find a new prince and your dream would come g
through. Your husband was a jerk. You sound like a princess. I'm sorry life dealt you such a hard blow. This is a beautiful story, though...though tragic and sad. Good luck with your BIGGEST DREAM contest.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you for caring. I'm doing fine now. I remember the good times and have let the bad go.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
This was a tough story to read. I asked myself how and why that you had too suffer so much tragedy. You are amazing to have survived a ruined marriage and the death's of two sons.
When we are young, we never see past the blinders we have on. I made three mistakes in my life. The only good outcomes are my children, three daughters and a son. I have been in love only once in my life at age 21. We were the same age and were not supposed to fall in love. We did and 7 months later she passed away from complications of ovarian cancer. Never loved again and never will at my age.
I am not sure what else to say about your story. I am just sorry that things have turned out for because you sound like a woman that a truly good man should have found.
Take care and you will be in my prayers each day.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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This was a tough story to read. I asked myself how and why that you had too suffer so much tragedy. You are amazing to have survived a ruined marriage and the death's of two sons.
When we are young, we never see past the blinders we have on. I made three mistakes in my life. The only good outcomes are my children, three daughters and a son. I have been in love only once in my life at age 21. We were the same age and were not supposed to fall in love. We did and 7 months later she passed away from complications of ovarian cancer. Never loved again and never will at my age.
I am not sure what else to say about your story. I am just sorry that things have turned out for because you sound like a woman that a truly good man should have found.
Take care and you will be in my prayers each day.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you for the six stars. I'm okay now. I decided to remember the good times and let the bad go. Most of this was caused by my young and foolish mind. I'm so sorry to hear about your long ago loss. It is so sad that you never found another to love.
Comment from Serendipity!
, I had a dream. It was a lovely dream and quite a common one for girls (Could you use the word 'fantasy' to avoid repeating the word dream?
tiny, cherubic face. (I just eliminated a 'little' :)
All I can say is "I'm sorry" although I wish I could say more. I hope you can find Jesus to be your Comforter.
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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, I had a dream. It was a lovely dream and quite a common one for girls (Could you use the word 'fantasy' to avoid repeating the word dream?
tiny, cherubic face. (I just eliminated a 'little' :)
All I can say is "I'm sorry" although I wish I could say more. I hope you can find Jesus to be your Comforter.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you. I will edit and consider your suggestions. I'm not sorry for having known my son. Those 16 years were the best of my life. Thank you for caring.
Comment from c_lucas
Dreams are to set one's goals. Unfortunately, reality has a bad habit of stepping in. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Dreams are to set one's goals. Unfortunately, reality has a bad habit of stepping in. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 31-May-2016
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Thank you. Things are what they are. We can't change the past no matter how much we would like to. I try to remember the good times and let the bad go.
