Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Verdict"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
9 total reviews
Comment from An Awakened Heart
Wow!
The character's are very deep and have distinct personalities that are very believable. I love your writing style, especially when you describe what your characters are thinking, and the way each speaks to each other. Good interplay and flow.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
  |
Wow!
The character's are very deep and have distinct personalities that are very believable. I love your writing style, especially when you describe what your characters are thinking, and the way each speaks to each other. Good interplay and flow.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
-
Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Sankey
Do I gather this is the end? What a great read and glad I got in on it. I love all the emotion and glee from the young boy. I don't care if there is more. Happy to read any further you have on this. NO SPAGS!
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
 |
Do I gather this is the end? What a great read and glad I got in on it. I love all the emotion and glee from the young boy. I don't care if there is more. Happy to read any further you have on this. NO SPAGS!
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
No this is not the end. There is much more to come. Thanks for asking. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I read the previous chapter and am commenting on both. I am so far behind in reviews, I hope you don't mind.
This story is very compelling in it's value as far as human interest goes.
I feel that the characters are real. You tell the story as if it is about folks you know. The Sherriff and his love for Cody shines through. And he will be adopting Cody, what a great plot... The Judge was a fantastic person.
Nicely done,
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
I read the previous chapter and am commenting on both. I am so far behind in reviews, I hope you don't mind.
This story is very compelling in it's value as far as human interest goes.
I feel that the characters are real. You tell the story as if it is about folks you know. The Sherriff and his love for Cody shines through. And he will be adopting Cody, what a great plot... The Judge was a fantastic person.
Nicely done,
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 30-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from misscookie
I was over joy to heard the wonderful news from the judge.
If I was there I would have hugged him myself.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a blessed day.
Cookie
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
|
I was over joy to heard the wonderful news from the judge.
If I was there I would have hugged him myself.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a blessed day.
Cookie
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 30-May-2016
-
Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story misscookie. Do stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from JanPerry
I appreciate your knowledge of legal jargon and your story has progressed without me reading it ever before.
I prefer to see the cast characters first so I can know the people who are speaking.
Line nine: their diamond blueness was dim? The boy in the picture has brown eyes, and dim blueness sounds a bit off. Ahem.
You have many details in the Cast of Characters and I wonder if it's too much? It is overloaded with explanations of them when the Story should be telling us about the characters not the Cast dialogue. Thanks.
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
|
I appreciate your knowledge of legal jargon and your story has progressed without me reading it ever before.
I prefer to see the cast characters first so I can know the people who are speaking.
Line nine: their diamond blueness was dim? The boy in the picture has brown eyes, and dim blueness sounds a bit off. Ahem.
You have many details in the Cast of Characters and I wonder if it's too much? It is overloaded with explanations of them when the Story should be telling us about the characters not the Cast dialogue. Thanks.
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
-
Whatever floats your boat kiddo.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This was interesting to read too. I'm glad that Cody is going to be adopted by the Sheriff. They both seem to care a lot for each other. I will be looking forward to what will happen next.
Kat
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
|
Hi Brett,
This was interesting to read too. I'm glad that Cody is going to be adopted by the Sheriff. They both seem to care a lot for each other. I will be looking forward to what will happen next.
Kat
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
-
Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from foxangie123
Great additional chaptering. This so reminds me of a judge I am friends with that has brought great things to the community. He is fair, just, and offers answers to ways of correcting ones behaviors except it is adult court. A most great and outstanding individual. Great Writing. It needs to be a movie.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
|
Great additional chaptering. This so reminds me of a judge I am friends with that has brought great things to the community. He is fair, just, and offers answers to ways of correcting ones behaviors except it is adult court. A most great and outstanding individual. Great Writing. It needs to be a movie.
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
-
Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from create4christ
This little Evan makes me think of your Cody...He looks shy and courteous. I don't usually read the chapters that are later in the book for this reason...I long to read the beginning. I really want to read this WHOLE book. This chapter is well done and I am drawn in. I want to know more! How do I become a fan on here?
Well done. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
|
This little Evan makes me think of your Cody...He looks shy and courteous. I don't usually read the chapters that are later in the book for this reason...I long to read the beginning. I really want to read this WHOLE book. This chapter is well done and I am drawn in. I want to know more! How do I become a fan on here?
Well done. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
-
To become a fan click on my portfolio. On the left side there is a "Become a Fan". Click on that. Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come. Your comments, support, and the six stars are appreciated.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
It is your book but I think you can add more with third person and take it farther using a story form than first person. First person is limited...just an opinion. You Went from first person Cody to him leaving the room, then the rest talking. You cant do that if you are using Cody first person. See what I mean?
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
|
It is your book but I think you can add more with third person and take it farther using a story form than first person. First person is limited...just an opinion. You Went from first person Cody to him leaving the room, then the rest talking. You cant do that if you are using Cody first person. See what I mean?
Comment Written 29-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
-
Appreciate the insight. As always your comments and support appreciated.
