Act of Endurance
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Comment from Marjorie Burghdoff-Banks
"tormented cries out flare felt not by law." things that happen in the world, that are felt and experienced by some can be heartbreaking. This is a lovely, thoughtful, deep thinker poem and I really enjoyed reading it. I think of society, screwed up, abusive, scary as hell when reading this. The visuals and deep thought it provoked is wonderful. Thank you for sharing this verse, I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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"tormented cries out flare felt not by law." things that happen in the world, that are felt and experienced by some can be heartbreaking. This is a lovely, thoughtful, deep thinker poem and I really enjoyed reading it. I think of society, screwed up, abusive, scary as hell when reading this. The visuals and deep thought it provoked is wonderful. Thank you for sharing this verse, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Hell is hell, given deceptions its reign, making others believe anything other than the truth about themselves. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Brian Taylor1
Good write, Great brain teezer and stimulator for ideas of not only what it's about but also as a formation for my minds much needed exercise. It seemed like you were communicating with someone underwater. It flows freely but has it's own gravitational push and pull that forces the reader to do a double and triple take which is a different level unique. It also gave off a vibe of dementia as if portraying an elderly writer or even deeper someone forseeing the future and they jump back and fourth. Either way its a very original writing style, very nice job.
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Good write, Great brain teezer and stimulator for ideas of not only what it's about but also as a formation for my minds much needed exercise. It seemed like you were communicating with someone underwater. It flows freely but has it's own gravitational push and pull that forces the reader to do a double and triple take which is a different level unique. It also gave off a vibe of dementia as if portraying an elderly writer or even deeper someone forseeing the future and they jump back and fourth. Either way its a very original writing style, very nice job.
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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I do like your break down of this particular write, capturing tiny aspects of its realities by your presented statements, loving the dementia and elderly viewpoints disclosed, thanking you dispute given flaws for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from juliaSjames
I found your work intriguing as a stream of consciousness write, words strung together in defiance of syntax. More like abstract art than poetry.
The reader is challenged to feel emotions while trying to decipher meaning.
Personally I think you need to work on your communication skills. Discipline is at the core of all creative work.
Good luck with your writing. Continue to experiment.
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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I found your work intriguing as a stream of consciousness write, words strung together in defiance of syntax. More like abstract art than poetry.
The reader is challenged to feel emotions while trying to decipher meaning.
Personally I think you need to work on your communication skills. Discipline is at the core of all creative work.
Good luck with your writing. Continue to experiment.
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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I agree with all your statements, hearing similar comments, applying revision upon learning proper presentation. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from estory
I thought the use of the convoluted images and garbled language interesting. it really created an abstract expressionist impression of experience, in flashes of images, all thrown together in a laundry machine. Life is a lot like that. We have to make sense of things here, as senseless as it seems. Not easy to do. I think the poem speaks of the frustrations of living, of trying to escape the pitfalls of failings, reach for the light of hope. estory
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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I thought the use of the convoluted images and garbled language interesting. it really created an abstract expressionist impression of experience, in flashes of images, all thrown together in a laundry machine. Life is a lot like that. We have to make sense of things here, as senseless as it seems. Not easy to do. I think the poem speaks of the frustrations of living, of trying to escape the pitfalls of failings, reach for the light of hope. estory
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 20-May-2019
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Boy if I had your brain, appreciating your insightful version of this particular write, blundering my way through pit falls. Thanking you for your patience during revisions.
Comment from Patty Palmer
That was a lot of words! Written very masterfully! However, for my mind . I found it difficult to understand. But there are different folks with different ideas. That's what makes the world go round! I am looking forward to reading more of your posts and broadening my poetic horizons. I just recently started with this site. I'm learning a lot from all of you. Keep writing and I'll keep reading!
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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That was a lot of words! Written very masterfully! However, for my mind . I found it difficult to understand. But there are different folks with different ideas. That's what makes the world go round! I am looking forward to reading more of your posts and broadening my poetic horizons. I just recently started with this site. I'm learning a lot from all of you. Keep writing and I'll keep reading!
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Well to be honest, I'm fighting with my presented writes, comprehension and improper grammar major fails in these statements. Can't say any of my others might clear those faults. Then, who knows. Thanking you for your generous rate dispute those pits and welcomed comments.
Comment from Earl Corp
My takeaway is you want abuse of our most susceptible population, the young and the old to end. Your notes didn't help me get the message. Your poem rhymed.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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My takeaway is you want abuse of our most susceptible population, the young and the old to end. Your notes didn't help me get the message. Your poem rhymed.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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One out of three, I'm improving correcting viewpoint of abuse, government has filled that spot, we pay for it waiting our turn for these services. I regulated rights for the elderly in nursing and senior citizens homes. I personally couldn't protect or keep quiet about occurrences. Thanking you for your generous rate, failing to completely convey my points accurately, and your generous rate dispute flaws.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
This is an emotional appeal for the care of the elderly...so sad some of the instances you describe. ;( :( Be sure to pop back in there and fix your first stanza as you missed a return... :) ;) thanx for sharing! ;)
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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This is an emotional appeal for the care of the elderly...so sad some of the instances you describe. ;( :( Be sure to pop back in there and fix your first stanza as you missed a return... :) ;) thanx for sharing! ;)
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanks for the heads up, glad aspects in this particular read were captivating to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a good poem about practice of endurance in family members in keeping relations;, per need and aspirations; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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This is a good poem about practice of endurance in family members in keeping relations;, per need and aspirations; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Confessing this journey not intended by me, after kicks and blows, finding delights in these tib bits myself as I learn to enhance writes. Thanking you again for your patience during these attempted endeavors, and generous rate.
Comment from William Ross
very nice, it is the elders that don't get what they need and deserve and makes them easy targets, we chew and spit them out so uncaring at times. Nice write, thanks for the share, have a good day
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016
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very nice, it is the elders that don't get what they need and deserve and makes them easy targets, we chew and spit them out so uncaring at times. Nice write, thanks for the share, have a good day
Comment Written 04-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016
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More like the children targeted victims od hell, an impure reality that's unfortunate: human cruelties. Glad this write found interests. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from sage17611
Yes, the roles often become reversed when our parents get old. It is the children's responsibility to care for their aging parents, or oversee their care if in the hands of others. This is a nice theme for this chapter, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016
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Yes, the roles often become reversed when our parents get old. It is the children's responsibility to care for their aging parents, or oversee their care if in the hands of others. This is a nice theme for this chapter, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2016
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The nightmares I witnessed are the shame we define about ourselves: hell assured punishments. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
