This Old House
Old, old house out in the country67 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
You bring well the power an ancestral nest holds over us. And yes, we wouldn't sell for a million all the memories it holds. I remembered my house in the country.
It's a place where we grew up, fell in love, rode bicycles, climbed trees and so much more.
This was powerful:
Now, it sits on its foundation,
sinking slowly in the sand,
tired from all its years of serving.
How it needs a helping hand.
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You bring well the power an ancestral nest holds over us. And yes, we wouldn't sell for a million all the memories it holds. I remembered my house in the country.
It's a place where we grew up, fell in love, rode bicycles, climbed trees and so much more.
This was powerful:
Now, it sits on its foundation,
sinking slowly in the sand,
tired from all its years of serving.
How it needs a helping hand.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
Comment from Karyn2
I love your heart here! Our homes become a part of us. We start to forgive the imperfections and see only the comfort and safety and warmth it provides. Like a friend. They become a part of us. I liked the way your poem really made me feel attached to this house you described. I felt an empathy toward it for its years of generosity and provision. I can tell you loved it. I'm sorry to here you had to leave the country house for the city. The memories go with you that is clear!
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I love your heart here! Our homes become a part of us. We start to forgive the imperfections and see only the comfort and safety and warmth it provides. Like a friend. They become a part of us. I liked the way your poem really made me feel attached to this house you described. I felt an empathy toward it for its years of generosity and provision. I can tell you loved it. I'm sorry to here you had to leave the country house for the city. The memories go with you that is clear!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
Comment from rjuselius
Aaawwweee, such a sweetheart of a piece of poetry dear jaybird! I love the sentiment you have skilfully written about your home.
Thank you for sharing my friend!
Blessings with hugs,
Rebekka
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Aaawwweee, such a sweetheart of a piece of poetry dear jaybird! I love the sentiment you have skilfully written about your home.
Thank you for sharing my friend!
Blessings with hugs,
Rebekka
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Wow. It's nice that you are posting poems from back 2016. I haven't read them for sure because I only joined Fanstory in 2020. Yes. House needs a lot of renovation, repair and updating. Hope you sold it for a good price.
Well done.
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Wow. It's nice that you are posting poems from back 2016. I haven't read them for sure because I only joined Fanstory in 2020. Yes. House needs a lot of renovation, repair and updating. Hope you sold it for a good price.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
Comment from Brandon Clark
Too true. Sorry to hear that you had to leave it. As always, you've chosen the best tone and wording for this sentimental piece. As long as you remember it, just like writing a poem about it for example, than home is where the heart is...or some Hallmark shit like that...lol Hope you're well my friend and thanks for posting.
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Too true. Sorry to hear that you had to leave it. As always, you've chosen the best tone and wording for this sentimental piece. As long as you remember it, just like writing a poem about it for example, than home is where the heart is...or some Hallmark shit like that...lol Hope you're well my friend and thanks for posting.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful poem. Good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck with your writing.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Wonderful poem. Good rhyme and meter that doesn't sound forced. Nice presentation and imagery. Good luck with your writing.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
It's hard to leave our home regardless of that fact that it's old and may need so tending to. I enjoyed reading your poem and hope you adjust to your new home in the city.
Well done Jay
Blessings
Janet
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It's hard to leave our home regardless of that fact that it's old and may need so tending to. I enjoyed reading your poem and hope you adjust to your new home in the city.
Well done Jay
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Hope you are adjusting to the move. This poem reminds the reader that there is more to a house than just the structure and condition. A house can also be a source to help people feel welcome as well as to serve its inhabitants.
I saw a little fix: yet its still a home for me
I think you meant to put an apostrophe, so: it's still a home for me
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Hope you are adjusting to the move. This poem reminds the reader that there is more to a house than just the structure and condition. A house can also be a source to help people feel welcome as well as to serve its inhabitants.
I saw a little fix: yet its still a home for me
I think you meant to put an apostrophe, so: it's still a home for me
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice tribute to your old mountain home. like these stanzas the best
No, I would not take a million
for this tired old place of mine;
Because a house is really home
when it has weathered with the time.
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nice tribute to your old mountain home. like these stanzas the best
No, I would not take a million
for this tired old place of mine;
Because a house is really home
when it has weathered with the time.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
Comment from June Sargent
Yes, a house is not just a house when it has been a home filled with life, laughter and love. Yours sounds like it was a happy home for you and your family. Cherish your memories created in that home.
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Yes, a house is not just a house when it has been a home filled with life, laughter and love. Yours sounds like it was a happy home for you and your family. Cherish your memories created in that home.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
