Comment from sunnilicious

Exceptional

I believe you saw a bear up there. Convincing story in a poem. Well thought out and nicely written. Good flow of rhythm and subtle rhymes. Cute poem.

God bless you always. Peace :)

 Comment Written 14-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thank you Alicia, for the encouragement, and the stars.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

I thought this was an entry for the competition. It will be a difficult one to judge.

Good repeating line, and as usual, you use your surroundings well.
Have a great day, my friend.
RG

 Comment Written 14-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thank you RG.

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

By joves you are right it does look like a bear up the tree. Great image and as great your triolet really complimented your image. I enjoyed reading this and then had to go back and have another look at the image. well done very clever triolet and image. Cheers Christine

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Christine.

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Nice job! I saw the photo and thought, that looks like a bear! And you thought the same thing, apparently. Funny thing, in Goleta CA, yesterday someone looked out her window and thought, "is that a stump?" But no, it was a bear - lol. Safely relocated to the backcountry :)

I love your photos and poems - you are a keen and empathetic observer of the natural world!
Carol

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Carol. That is high praise bleed.

reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Thank you Carol. That is high praise bleed.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
"Up a Tree" is a nice rhythmic colorful little ditty. Triolets are a joy to read and you follow the form perfectly.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Preston.

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Hello Tom,
While I admit that the poems make me smile, and you always do a great job, I must admit that many of the stills are difficult to 'see', for me, at least.
I don't see the bear... I'm sure it's the way that FS recreates the still... and it's easier to see the real thing...

that being said, one doesn't need the still to 'see' the bear in the triolet.
And the triolet is written very well. and meets the requirements of the form.
good luck in the contest!
Cat

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Cat.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I thought it was too until I looked closer, it really does look like a bear, and you have really done it proud with this triolet, Tom, it's excellent, and it brought a smile to my face. You really take some lovely unique photos, my friend. All together a lovely piece of work. :) Sandra

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Sandra. I am pleased you like my poem and photo too.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This is another piece of animal fun in the vegetation. It works well in the triole form I think until the final two lines which I am convinced would sound bettere revered as in Ray's (Mountain Writer) highly modified triolet posted the other day. I don't find them easy at all.

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Pantygynt. Hmm, that would throw off the rhyme scheme, but I see your point. Reversed would flow better.

reply by Pantygynt on 12-May-2016

Oh yes it breaks the rules but it would be reaslly effective, as it was with Ray's.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Hi Tom. Your sixth line has 10 syllables,
You could say, But no it's just a burl I see.
Otherwise it is a fine triolet and picture.
I should rate it four, but I know you will fix it.
You do find subjects for some interesting
pictures my friend. xx Nancy

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Nancy. I appreciate you pointing that out, and I like your suggestion. I will use it.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Your photo does look like a bear is in the tree. Your triolet is well written. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. May your day be blessed. Patricia

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 12-May-2016

Thank you Patricia.