Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Steve,

I really liked this piece. I am not familiar with the format for this one but you seem to have met all of the criteria and met it well. Very good use of the repeating lines to give a different sense of the words on each occasion.

Best of luck
GMG

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Great work on the triolet, word weaving, a poet or a writers words. can change a person or the world. Nice write and thought. Good luck and enjoy your day

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, William.

Steve

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Triolet you are quite right the strength of the poem lies in the repeating lines whether the poet change it or not. If the starting line is good, the rest of the poem pratically writes itself.

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, Sandra.

Steve

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

It's a tricky form, but handled well those repeating lines can be brought back under control as you have done here! Skilful use of punctuation and enjambment to keep a continuous flow throughout. No easy feat. A strong contender for the jackpot.

 Comment Written 12-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, Tony. O could do with a jackpot right about now - well, any time really!

Steve

Comment from jonathan1

Excellent

This is an interesting piece. Its clever and well thought out. Entertaining and easy to read. I think the author has done a great job here of weaving words

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks for your kind words.

Steve

Comment from MacMhuirich

Excellent

Love the title Word-Weaving, nicely written with a good repeating line. The writer can unlock the mysteries with words but can also create them. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, John. Several readers have commented on the aptness of the weaving metaphor.

Steve

Comment from brenda bickers

Excellent

Hi Steve,
this is a pretty good poem. I have never thought of the triolet poem in that way before, but you have demonstrated in this one exactly what you describe.
Thank you for sharing that and I shall give this format a try.
Love the art work, I even spent time trying to read the words that spell the 'WORD' but that was a lot harder. lol
Brenda:))x


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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Ha! Now you made me go and examine the picture. Guess what I found - it's the lyrics to the 1980s hit song ' Words' by F. R. David
Words, don't come easy to me / How can I find a way to make you see I Love You / Words don't come easy...

Not really a good motto for any aspiring poet!

Thanks for the kind review.

Steve