Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good image and poem.
-I think you have accomplished your goal well.
-I like the repeating lines and the use of enjambment.
-Good description of the poet's art.
-The last lines work really well:
"The poet's art, it seems to me,
is weaving words to change the world."

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks for the very kind words.

Steve

reply by Pam (respa) on 14-May-2016

You are welcome.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a fine entry for the Triolet contest
An excellent poem to the form with strong
repeat lines and solid rhymes
Excellent use of enjambment
not usually see in these short forms
as well as the alliteration
You described the poet's art very well
Excellent write
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, rs.

I appreciate your thoughtful review.

Steve

Comment from sage17611

Excellent

Your poem is very well written with a nice message, the poet writings can influence people who reads it. The words flow nicely, the rhyme is good. This looks like a good Triolet poem to me. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Yes, changing the meaning of the repeating line, as you did here, is a great way to construct this type of poem. I noticed that Gynt did the same in his, if you haven't seen it. Oh, I'm a big fan of the word "furled" too - nice job! Excellent job on this; although I've seen quite a few entries for this contest - quite the competition!
Carol

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, Caril. Yes, I have read and reviewed Gynt's piece, and given it six stars for that very reason.

Steve

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Lovely, Steve. For sure, the pen is mightier than those other sharp pointy things. I like this format. I especially like how you split the sentence in the second line, but made it all one in the final line. Very clever.

No doubt a strong contender for the contest.

Hope you kick poetic butt!

Av

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, Av. Any research I have done on this form points to that being a key to the thing. let's hope the committee appreciates it.

Steve

Comment from Ann Dudley Duncan

Excellent

In this poem you were able to say a lot in just a few words. Now that is art to me!
Triolet poetry is not an easy write but you did a very good job! Congratulations!
Blessings, Ann Dudley Duncan

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Ann, thank you very much for the kind words.

Steve

reply by Ann Dudley Duncan on 13-May-2016

You are more than welcome!
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Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Words do more than any other single thing in this world, from good to bad and all points in between. They do unlock many mysteries, and sometimes share more than should ever be known. Great job, and good luck in the contest. :-)

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Thanks, Ric.

You are right. The greatest pleasure I get from my writing is when a reader tells me it has really affected them, changed their life in some small way.

Steve

Comment from Eternal Muse

Exceptional

Steve,

I love it!! That's exactly how I feel about poetry, and my poetry. Word weaving... Well said. Good poetry can really affect people.

Your poetry is brilliant. You are my favorite poet on the site. I will never forget "Come, Woodsman" - the affect it had on me was astounding.

You rock, Steve!

Why don't you put in for a Seal of Quality? No one is more deserving of one.

Thank God for poets like you on FS. You make me believe is total perfection.

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Ooh, I feel a big head coming on!

Yelena, thanks so much for the six stars and the words of praise. Seal of Quality? I'd have to do work, selecting suitable pieces putting together a 'book.' Maybe I'll get to it some time this year. I even have a title in mind, 'Life, Love, and Other Disasters.'

Steve

reply by Eternal Muse on 13-May-2016

They don't need a large collection for poetry Seal. I submitted 11 sonnets (16 on the first try - the Seal committed got back to me very soon with many suggestions including weeding out some sonnets - my final count was 11 - and got the seal!

You have to have such a large selection in your portfolio ready for the Seal - no one is more deserving.

reply by the author on 14-May-2016

Thanks, Yelena. Yes, I know all about the Seal, and may well get around to collating something for submission this year - if I ever find the time.

Steve

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

At last! Someone else who has changed the meaning of that first line, not once but twice with enjambment and punctuation change. What an excellent adversary you make in this contest, Steve. This is very good indeed.

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Thanks, Gynt. Returning all the kudos your way for your equally excellent piece.

Steve

Comment from rbutner

Excellent

I like this very much. You are right, your use of punctuation did alter the meaning, and I enjoyed reading it through several times. Of course I love what it says about a poet as well. Your art work is very interesting and perfect for the work.

 Comment Written 13-May-2016

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reply by the author on 13-May-2016

Thank you very much for the kind words.

Steve