Tales Of The Wind
Tale of our wind18 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine piece of free verse writing
and what could be freer than the wind
with power to change some things
through storm and bringing rain
but sadly, just an observer in the other ways
A couple of suggestions:
You use "also" multiple times to start lines
some variation to chance tempo might be better
And both reigns and falls (lines 10, 11) should be singular, in my opinion
Overall, well done
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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This is a fine piece of free verse writing
and what could be freer than the wind
with power to change some things
through storm and bringing rain
but sadly, just an observer in the other ways
A couple of suggestions:
You use "also" multiple times to start lines
some variation to chance tempo might be better
And both reigns and falls (lines 10, 11) should be singular, in my opinion
Overall, well done
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your review
Comment from jane.fallon
Excellent.
I just have one point for your attention:
"Only difference holds me awe" - should this be "in awe"?
A highlight for me is "Some bad made better, some better made worse
And some bad made worse".
Well done. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Excellent.
I just have one point for your attention:
"Only difference holds me awe" - should this be "in awe"?
A highlight for me is "Some bad made better, some better made worse
And some bad made worse".
Well done. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your review
Comment from Sis Cat
Well, you've earned my first six star review of the week. As a storyteller, I was entranced by your tale told by the Wind who is at once powerful and helpless to prevent the things man commits. Wind has an old, wise voice out of time and place. I read this poem thrice and it would make a great picture children's book or a storytelling performance. You are most gifted. Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Well, you've earned my first six star review of the week. As a storyteller, I was entranced by your tale told by the Wind who is at once powerful and helpless to prevent the things man commits. Wind has an old, wise voice out of time and place. I read this poem thrice and it would make a great picture children's book or a storytelling performance. You are most gifted. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your review
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem takes us over the vast diversity and stark realities of a beautiful and cruel world. It can all be touched by the same wind, yet unchanged by what can turn a book page or level a town. This poem has an all-seeing, yet helpless feeling to it.
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This poem takes us over the vast diversity and stark realities of a beautiful and cruel world. It can all be touched by the same wind, yet unchanged by what can turn a book page or level a town. This poem has an all-seeing, yet helpless feeling to it.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your review
Comment from Dean Kuch
Over lands where equity and justice reigns ............Since you've used the plural of land with "lands" here, Sealord Hunter, in conjunction with two separate nouns, "equity" and "justice", then I believe the correct word to use is "reign" in this instance.
"Over lands where equity and justice reign."
Other that tiny, minor nit, this was a very expressive free form styled poem.
Nice work.
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Over lands where equity and justice reigns ............Since you've used the plural of land with "lands" here, Sealord Hunter, in conjunction with two separate nouns, "equity" and "justice", then I believe the correct word to use is "reign" in this instance.
"Over lands where equity and justice reign."
Other that tiny, minor nit, this was a very expressive free form styled poem.
Nice work.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Thank you I really appreciate your review
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You are more than welcome.
~Dean :}
Comment from tony bronk
What a beautiful and wonderful way to use a metaphor such as the wind to point out both the good and the bad of this world and life all around the earth. It is very creative of you to do so. You should be proud. Please take my six. Tony Bronk
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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What a beautiful and wonderful way to use a metaphor such as the wind to point out both the good and the bad of this world and life all around the earth. It is very creative of you to do so. You should be proud. Please take my six. Tony Bronk
Comment Written 08-May-2016
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Thank you sooooooooooo much Tony for the six stars
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You earned them, Sir! Tony
Comment from chcbeck
If only the wind could talk. You take your reader on a journey through your words. You use extreme detail, from corpses to butterflies. A great piece thanks for sharing.
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If only the wind could talk. You take your reader on a journey through your words. You use extreme detail, from corpses to butterflies. A great piece thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 08-May-2016
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Thank you , i appreciate
Comment from foxangie123
A very good piece of writing with a great title that drew me in as it will other readers. You did an amazing job here with this. Clever.
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A very good piece of writing with a great title that drew me in as it will other readers. You did an amazing job here with this. Clever.
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Comment Written 08-May-2016
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Thank you for your review
