Losing It
How my good friend found himself losing it29 total reviews
Comment from JDRBAR
Sad humor indeed, LOL. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Can't imagine why this poor fellow is so down on his luck. Never mind awakening, just bury him. LOL
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Sad humor indeed, LOL. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Can't imagine why this poor fellow is so down on his luck. Never mind awakening, just bury him. LOL
Comment Written 06-May-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Poor guy! He really messed up this time - didn't he? He really has no one to blame himself, but like many, he will just sit there and feel sorry for himself.
Your poem flows well with a nice rhythm and tells a story within the lines,
~patty~
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Poor guy! He really messed up this time - didn't he? He really has no one to blame himself, but like many, he will just sit there and feel sorry for himself.
Your poem flows well with a nice rhythm and tells a story within the lines,
~patty~
Comment Written 06-May-2017
Comment from MaggieF
This poem flows well with good rthyming scheme and rhythm. Oh dear not much else can go wrong although he did seem, by his own admission, to have brought a lot of of on himself, still everyone deserves a chance if they try to change.Seems he does 'help me awaken I will try' MaggieF
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This poem flows well with good rthyming scheme and rhythm. Oh dear not much else can go wrong although he did seem, by his own admission, to have brought a lot of of on himself, still everyone deserves a chance if they try to change.Seems he does 'help me awaken I will try' MaggieF
Comment Written 06-May-2017
Comment from P1
they say bad luck comes in threes
you have cerainaintly had your three
plus the rest. well written nice rhyme
and enjoyable to read. thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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they say bad luck comes in threes
you have cerainaintly had your three
plus the rest. well written nice rhyme
and enjoyable to read. thanks for sharing
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Greatly appreciated
Comment from Rookette
I love the way you presented this poem. It is a serious topic yet holds tidbits of humor throughout (not so overpowering as to make light of the situation). Often times it's "living in the moment" that can cause us to lose track of what's important. The grass isn't always greener on the other side...in fact it rarely is. The few times it is...it's because it had been so well kempt. Amazing job on this, I truly enjoyed it! xoLeslie
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I love the way you presented this poem. It is a serious topic yet holds tidbits of humor throughout (not so overpowering as to make light of the situation). Often times it's "living in the moment" that can cause us to lose track of what's important. The grass isn't always greener on the other side...in fact it rarely is. The few times it is...it's because it had been so well kempt. Amazing job on this, I truly enjoyed it! xoLeslie
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I want to thank you
Comment from RosieCus
Well written sad poem, with some humour, "my wife, the kids and the dog have fled"
The rhyming and the flow of the poem is very good.
I pray that your friends circumstances will improve.
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Well written sad poem, with some humour, "my wife, the kids and the dog have fled"
The rhyming and the flow of the poem is very good.
I pray that your friends circumstances will improve.
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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You cheered my spirits-thank you
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You're welcome
Comment from A.A.A.EXHILARATING RIDE
Try, try, try again! Gift our world with your learning and efforts. Sadly, it takes many of us so long, and there is no turning back. But then, such wisdom of experience was rarely shared when we learned to play. Boys, especially were encouraged to get their fingers burnt, and girls nurse them!
Great to hit rock bottom, if not the so great of Mother Earth, and laugh at our lonely predicament! Hope like that ol' dung beetle your valiantly climbing up again!
Well done! Catchy song, Jaybird! Enjoy this week, Maureen*&*
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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Try, try, try again! Gift our world with your learning and efforts. Sadly, it takes many of us so long, and there is no turning back. But then, such wisdom of experience was rarely shared when we learned to play. Boys, especially were encouraged to get their fingers burnt, and girls nurse them!
Great to hit rock bottom, if not the so great of Mother Earth, and laugh at our lonely predicament! Hope like that ol' dung beetle your valiantly climbing up again!
Well done! Catchy song, Jaybird! Enjoy this week, Maureen*&*
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I enjoyed your comment-thank you
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Happy writing, Maureen*&*
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem although it is very sad. All those things that were lost are hard to imagine at the time. I don't know if this is bio, but you expressed yourself well. I like the rhyme and there is a smooth flow.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
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reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I enjoyed your poem although it is very sad. All those things that were lost are hard to imagine at the time. I don't know if this is bio, but you expressed yourself well. I like the rhyme and there is a smooth flow.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
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Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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I appreciated your comment
Comment from foxangie123
This is a most powerful and great piece of writing you have here. The flow is down right perfect. I'm sad if it is the truth you speak in your lines. Either way stunning and exceptional poetry.
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reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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This is a most powerful and great piece of writing you have here. The flow is down right perfect. I'm sad if it is the truth you speak in your lines. Either way stunning and exceptional poetry.
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Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
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You cheer me greatly with your
comment and for becoming my
fan. Thank you dear friend
