Memories of Daddy
Daddy wouldn't tell us16 total reviews
Comment from Berta Dickerson
Judy,
This is a very touching story that reminded me of my own father, a Korean war veteran.
Your letter reads as a rough draft with thoughts out of place. You might consider opening with the golf course then your birthday conversation.
Also, check your facts. Did your dad fight in WW2, Korea and Vietnam? The Cuban Crisis?
Berta
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reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Judy,
This is a very touching story that reminded me of my own father, a Korean war veteran.
Your letter reads as a rough draft with thoughts out of place. You might consider opening with the golf course then your birthday conversation.
Also, check your facts. Did your dad fight in WW2, Korea and Vietnam? The Cuban Crisis?
Berta
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Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Yes, Dad was born in 1922 Which makes him 21 or 22 during world war two. 24 in the Korean Conflict , 1945 or 46. Cuban Crisis 1962 Vietnam 1959-75 . that means he was in his late 40's when he was in Vietnam. Yes, he was in everyone of those. My facts are right. He didn't retire until he was in his late fifties, which would have been in the Eighties. He was in every one of these. I am sorry you didn't believe me. This is a true story. I do appreciate your questions. i think if someone said the same thing to me I would have questioned it. but it is true.
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Judy,
I did believe your writing to be true. I meant only to point out some weak points. You skipped over Korea and went to Vietnam. The Cuban Crisis is more commonly referred to as the Cuban Missile Crisis.
I meant no insult.
Berta
Comment from robyn corum
This is a letter I would be honored to have representing us (the citizens) as part of a war memorial. This is precious and so tragically true. How the men were just men, until the war changed them. Made them...something else. Not BAD, but different. And something they were almost afraid to share with the rest of us. Great writing. Bless your soul.
I STRONGLY recommend you submit this somewhere for the fourth of July celebrations. Even if it's to your local paper. Submit it. Now!
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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This is a letter I would be honored to have representing us (the citizens) as part of a war memorial. This is precious and so tragically true. How the men were just men, until the war changed them. Made them...something else. Not BAD, but different. And something they were almost afraid to share with the rest of us. Great writing. Bless your soul.
I STRONGLY recommend you submit this somewhere for the fourth of July celebrations. Even if it's to your local paper. Submit it. Now!
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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what a wonderful thing to tell me. I will try. I just don't know how. But you are right. I will try.
Comment from konni
A well-written story, clear and logical, well-organized. The stage is well-set and feelings come across loud and clear.
Some details need attending to:
"Twenty First Birthday" twenty-first birthday?
"B Fifty Two" (B-52)?
not-so-nice grandmother? (hyphens)?
"divorced man"? (no caps)?
"or should I say, wars." (comma before wars)
"not approachable" unapproachable?
Interesting story. All in all, a very good job.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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A well-written story, clear and logical, well-organized. The stage is well-set and feelings come across loud and clear.
Some details need attending to:
"Twenty First Birthday" twenty-first birthday?
"B Fifty Two" (B-52)?
not-so-nice grandmother? (hyphens)?
"divorced man"? (no caps)?
"or should I say, wars." (comma before wars)
"not approachable" unapproachable?
Interesting story. All in all, a very good job.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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this is why I am on Fan STory. For people like you who willingly edit The thoughts that pour out of my head. I just copied this to a word document so that I can make the corrections. Thank you.
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You're welcome.
Comment from c_lucas
War has changed many a veteran. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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War has changed many a veteran. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you so much. I wanted to know more about him. I can still find out.
Comment from tfawcus
How little we appreciate of our parents' lives when we are small, especially when they have been to war. Few speak openly of their trauma to their family and it can take quite a while to piece together the story. This is a wonderful tribute, Judy.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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How little we appreciate of our parents' lives when we are small, especially when they have been to war. Few speak openly of their trauma to their family and it can take quite a while to piece together the story. This is a wonderful tribute, Judy.
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you, I just wrote it and right now I reread it and I am crying.
Comment from foxangie123
This is so very stunningly amazing. Wow he is smiling on you as is the Lord and me. This is so very touching and thank you. What a blessing you are sweety.
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This is so very stunningly amazing. Wow he is smiling on you as is the Lord and me. This is so very touching and thank you. What a blessing you are sweety.
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Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thank you so much. I am trying to add a picture of him, but it says it is in the wrong format. Am I doing something wrong?
