Seasons - Spring, Summer, Fall
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Springtime Rain"A Poetic Celebration of the seasons.
17 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Spring...it changes everything.
I enjoyed the well written Triolet and the subject choice.
I am currently embraced by late autumn with cold south westerlies beginning to blow and the air growing colder. Brrr!
So it was lovely to be reminded so eloquently of the bountiful gifts of spring.
Written true to style and great choice of repeating lines.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 11-May-2016
  |
Spring...it changes everything.
I enjoyed the well written Triolet and the subject choice.
I am currently embraced by late autumn with cold south westerlies beginning to blow and the air growing colder. Brrr!
So it was lovely to be reminded so eloquently of the bountiful gifts of spring.
Written true to style and great choice of repeating lines.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 11-May-2016
reply by the author on 11-May-2016
-
Thank you Shirley. Yes, you folks down under, are in the opposite of our season. It is strange in a way, how that works. But it's a big world out there. Lol.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I am still trying to catch up, Tom! This is a very well written Triolet, my friend, the spring is here, the plants and bulbs are shooting, it's all lovely in the garden now that the drab of winter has gone and the spring rains are here. Well done, my friend, and a lovely photo as well. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
|
I am still trying to catch up, Tom! This is a very well written Triolet, my friend, the spring is here, the plants and bulbs are shooting, it's all lovely in the garden now that the drab of winter has gone and the spring rains are here. Well done, my friend, and a lovely photo as well. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 08-May-2016
-
Thank you Sandra, now we can get out more and enjoy the days.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I like triolets, and your did not disappoint. Your repeating lines fit in nicely. The picture is awesome and so perfect for your words. Good job with the overall presentation.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 05-May-2016
|
I like triolets, and your did not disappoint. Your repeating lines fit in nicely. The picture is awesome and so perfect for your words. Good job with the overall presentation.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 05-May-2016
-
Stank you jannypan
-
Stank you jannypan
-
Stank you jannypan
Comment from l.raven
HI Tom, as much as I love Winter...and we didn't have much of one...I am looking forward to a beautiful Spring...I love your poem...and the picture...lovely...very nicely written...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
|
HI Tom, as much as I love Winter...and we didn't have much of one...I am looking forward to a beautiful Spring...I love your poem...and the picture...lovely...very nicely written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
-
Thank you very much luff Linda. A totally agree.
-
you are so very welcome...go to see you...Linda xxoo
Comment from foxangie123
A great poem indeed. Did you enter it in the contest my friend? From top to bottom it is excellent and n perfect shape like always. Please keep em coming..
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
|
A great poem indeed. Did you enter it in the contest my friend? From top to bottom it is excellent and n perfect shape like always. Please keep em coming..
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
-
Thank you foxangie. No I didn't enter the contest. I never do well in them.
-
This was great indeed. No would of voted Er in. Hugs.
Comment from Joan E.
It's good to see a triolet--not too many are posted on FanStory since peter@poole left the site. Your photograph and background color selection reinforce your point well. I very much liked the repeat of the "drab of winter" and your rhymes. Enjoy the greening! -Joan
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
|
It's good to see a triolet--not too many are posted on FanStory since peter@poole left the site. Your photograph and background color selection reinforce your point well. I very much liked the repeat of the "drab of winter" and your rhymes. Enjoy the greening! -Joan
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
-
Thank you Joan. Will do.
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
I admire your work a great deal. I say it frequently, but it DESERVES to be said (she said!) *smile* These poems with the repeating refrains are AWFULLY hard to do without making those lines sound like the bleating of a billy goat. Most of the time they sound awkward and out of place. But not in your poems. Most of the time, they float right along, graceful and at ease. So nice! Thanks! Lovely pic, too!
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
|
Tom,
I admire your work a great deal. I say it frequently, but it DESERVES to be said (she said!) *smile* These poems with the repeating refrains are AWFULLY hard to do without making those lines sound like the bleating of a billy goat. Most of the time they sound awkward and out of place. But not in your poems. Most of the time, they float right along, graceful and at ease. So nice! Thanks! Lovely pic, too!
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
-
Thank you Robyn. I appreciate you comments, as I try hard to make that happen.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Spring Time Rain" captures the essence of the change from winter to spring, from drab browns and grays to verdant grass and colorful buds when they arrive. The triolet whose form you followed is perfectly attuned to the theme of this poem. The iambic meter rolls off the tongue and the figurative language is very descriptive. The rhyme and rhyme scheme are excellent.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
|
Hi, Treischel,
"Spring Time Rain" captures the essence of the change from winter to spring, from drab browns and grays to verdant grass and colorful buds when they arrive. The triolet whose form you followed is perfectly attuned to the theme of this poem. The iambic meter rolls off the tongue and the figurative language is very descriptive. The rhyme and rhyme scheme are excellent.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
-
Thank you very much Preston mas I know that you're not a big fan of repeating poems.
Comment from LIJ Red
The triolet is a good form. Short and with repetitive emphasis. You have created an excellent one, I think. It rained here yesterday and the grass grew a foot during the night...
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
|
The triolet is a good form. Short and with repetitive emphasis. You have created an excellent one, I think. It rained here yesterday and the grass grew a foot during the night...
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
-
Thank you Lij Red. Isn't it amazing?
Comment from joycetreasures
Treischel - I like your poem. I have never done a Triolet poem. Yes, I will try it. The message is clear regarding the changes in the foliage over the different seasons. I love that it's French, like the Haiku is Japaneses. I'm feeling bilingual in my writings of poems already. I checked your algorithm and you are precise. Very nice message and flow. Thanks
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
 |
Treischel - I like your poem. I have never done a Triolet poem. Yes, I will try it. The message is clear regarding the changes in the foliage over the different seasons. I love that it's French, like the Haiku is Japaneses. I'm feeling bilingual in my writings of poems already. I checked your algorithm and you are precise. Very nice message and flow. Thanks
Comment Written 04-May-2016
reply by the author on 04-May-2016
-
Thank you footprint that glowing review, Joyce, and also for those stars to make it shine.
