Comment from Helen Bach

Excellent

A lovely poem Ulla, and the use of the word 'arrogance' to provide a warning is excellent. The picture suggests a calmness but this can change so quickly. I once nearly came a cropper when I watched a storm brew from a cliff top and got splattered by an angry wave.
I see you got reviewed by our Newby 2* hit and run. I can forgive anyone for being new but not rudeness. He better keep running he he. Other words come to mind!!#*! now I just need a 1* and i'll have the set.
Your poem is never ever a two, so don't stew, tis he who looks bad and not you xxx

 Comment Written 07-May-2016

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reply by the author on 07-May-2016

Ah, Helen, thanks a lot for this and how sweet you are. I know you got a two as well from him. I sent him the reviewing rules and of course never heard anything. It was my first 2 ever and I have received one 3 while I've been here so like you a 1 would complete the set. hehe Your 'kisses' is such a lovely poem and could never deserve less than a 5 in a millon years. Thanks so much for your support. I agree, he better keep running. Ulla xxx

reply by Helen Bach on 07-May-2016

Ha ha, thank you xx

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

A unique and interesting take on not so much the components
of arrogance, but the consequences risked by falling to it :-)

Nicely done :-)

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks a lot. Much appreciated. All the best.

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

We should all have a fear of nature, especially the sea. Your poem brings out that point, very well. This is so well written and I love the picture. Good luck in the contest. I wish I had a six for you. Have a great day and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks ever so much for this great review and the virtual six. You are one of the few who have understood that we should never be arrogant towards the sea. It will forever win if it so chose. All the best. Ulla:)

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Too right. Neptune has a habit of biting back. Remember there are old skippers and bold skippers but there are no old, bold skippers.

It was a pity you could not coax a bit more rhyme and rhythm out of your acrostic. I appreciate that you have got some, probably enough to avoid this being placed in the shopping list category.

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks a lot Pantygynt. I appreciate that you like it, but I am so new to poetry ( Am a prose writer) and I am grateful for all the help I can get. So you would have liked it to rhyme all way through. I'll have a look. All the best.

Comment from playinaround

Excellent

This is a very well written poem and I am impressed by the writing. Could not, however connect it to the word arrogance. Maybe this is meant for arrogant people, telling them how to be and all the possibilities. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks a lot for a great review. No what it meant is what it says. Have respect for the Sea. Don't be arrogant towards it, it will always win.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

It doesn't matter if you are at odds with your self. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks a lot.

Comment from Madefromdragonfire

Needs Improvement

I like the concept you have given and the warning of how arrogance can bring you to demise. Imagery is used well, but I feel like the end was a little rushed or maybe you could have spent a little more time to get it to flow better.. I don't know just my amateur opinion. Also, is 'rearly' (second line) supposed to read as 'rarely'?

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 Comment Written 05-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

I think, as you are new to this site you need to know how the rating of the writing works. Please read it and if you care, also read a few postings that have been written on the site to guide and help new comers as yourself.

Well to my poem. Yes, I had one spelling mistake ( I have corrected)

You liked it and it had good imagery. The ending a little rushed in the end( your prerogative to think so)

The ratings:

Six stars: Exceptional, simply outstanding.

Five stars: Excellent, enjoyable and no revision needed

Four stars: Good, adjustments needed

Three stars: Below average

Two stars: Below average needs lot of work

One star: Poor. Major revision needed.

So coming back to my writing. With what you are saying it should be a four star. And you would need to justify that which you have only partly done.
Now, you give me a two which is not short of saying it's ready for the bin or trash can. If that is what you mean give some constructive suggestions on how I can rewrite it/ where I went wrong and what do you suggest and why you think it is so badly written. We writers here on Fanstory take our writing seriously and we are here to help each other and to learn in order to improve. If you think I took offence of your rating , then the answer is yes I did, and it did hurt.

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

This is very clever of you to come with the word arrogance and use it toward not being that way to the sea, and also letting us know in your author notes...quite a concept after probably everyone else might of been taking what a person exhibits to another person or a group of people. Also giving some good advice in your poem of preparation before one sets sail on to the sea.

Caressa_08

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thank you so much. You are one of the few, who understood this poem.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Very nice work with the Arrogance acrostic. Some excellent advice throughout your poem. I'm a land-lover with a healthy respect for the sea so I appreciate you message.

Well done.
Janet

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks a lot Janet. Much appreciated.

Comment from Amy Greta

Excellent

I get it now, after reading your note at the end about never being arrogant against the sea...so true! Arrogance at sea is a recipe for trouble. Beautiful picture to embellish your important message.
Excellent!
Amy

 Comment Written 04-May-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thank you so much and for understanding my message I wanted to convey.