Geoff's Book Of Poultry
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Chooks, and Rain and Hail"My Book Of Funny Poems and Stories.
27 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
What is stupid about playing around with words and concentrating on their sound more than their meaning. I liked the feel of this and it is certainly no more stupid than all those stupid limericks. Poetry should be read aloud and when this one is it works with all the bustle of a farmyard.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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What is stupid about playing around with words and concentrating on their sound more than their meaning. I liked the feel of this and it is certainly no more stupid than all those stupid limericks. Poetry should be read aloud and when this one is it works with all the bustle of a farmyard.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks very much. Much appreciate your lovely review. The lady whose chooks I am writing about has been a long time friend. She used to be the editor of our local Newspaper, or more like a small News mag.Sadly that is not around anymore but we are still friends.
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Hi faithful friends. Had to do a re-write slightly as the owner of the other picture got annoyed at me for using it. Never mind getting paranoid at the use of the first names of the family and the dog. Hope she doesn't get upset I kept some of the chook's names.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
that was quite a piece of writing that we can all relate to.
no one knows what we will get even though it is forcast.
what will come will come, I guess.
excellent flow and rhyme made this a fun easy piece
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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that was quite a piece of writing that we can all relate to.
no one knows what we will get even though it is forcast.
what will come will come, I guess.
excellent flow and rhyme made this a fun easy piece
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks barb have to get to your stuff again real soon.
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Hi faithful friends. Had to do a re-write slightly as the owner of the other picture got annoyed at me for using it. Never mind getting paranoid at the use of the first names of the family and the dog. Hope she doesn't get upset I kept some of the chook's names.
Comment from sage17611
This is a cute poem, I like how you describe the rain storms and being stuck indoors. The poem had a nice flow up to the last verse, where the rhyming was a little off. I guess the picture of the chickens in the coop depicts them indoors...LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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This is a cute poem, I like how you describe the rain storms and being stuck indoors. The poem had a nice flow up to the last verse, where the rhyming was a little off. I guess the picture of the chickens in the coop depicts them indoors...LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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have we met before. I did plan on maybe adding another verse or two as I get time. The chooks were at the lady's back door of the house wanting in out of the rain. Not sure if you understand points for reviews it is no bother as I have quite a bunch of reviews already but I thought you would mark down for spelling errors or something? I never mark folks down for that. No worries not offended whatever you think I need to do I will look into it some more.
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I just read your reply, I thought I gave you a five star on this, I will try to change my rating, I liked your poem...sorry for the misunderstanding:)
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Thanks for coming back hang on a bit I might add a verse or two then you can up the rating if you like. I know the last line is a bit off but that is a kind of "signature" of mine if you like, hehe. Appreciate you coming b ack I was not angry. I have a great swag of lovely supporters in here so ratings don't get affected. Not sure if we have met will look for your stuff as I get time.
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Ok, I really appreciate your support.
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Your name looks familiar I think I might have seen you around before. SO many folks out there see if I can get time to read your stuff.
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I have messed up on a rating at times once I get a reply and realize my mistake I go back and fix. Thanks for the clarification Just read your note again hehe.
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Ok, at your leisure.
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Hi faithful friends. Had to do a re-write slightly as the owner of the other picture got annoyed at me for using it. Never mind getting paranoid at the use of the first names of the family and the dog. Hope she doesn't get upset I kept some of the chook's names.
Comment from L.lora
I don't think this is a
stupid poem, I'd say that
it is a most fun read. I
enjoyed this well flowing
colorfully worded writing.
You put a smile on an old
woman's face, sort of reminded
me of all the Dr.Suess books
I've had to read. Well presented,
so pleased that you shared this
with us, thank you. Lora
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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I don't think this is a
stupid poem, I'd say that
it is a most fun read. I
enjoyed this well flowing
colorfully worded writing.
You put a smile on an old
woman's face, sort of reminded
me of all the Dr.Suess books
I've had to read. Well presented,
so pleased that you shared this
with us, thank you. Lora
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks Lora. What a lovely review. Much appreciated. I got a four today not sure why but maybe I will have to work on it some more for the "fourer' Lots of rhyme in there too hehe. Thanks
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Sorry to hear about the 4, especially with no explanation...you are most welcome for the review. Lora
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All ok now the person did not understand the rating system and they did like my poem so all well.
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Did they revise their rating and review, I sure hope so. Glad it is straightened out, that can be so disheartening...
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I will check thanks for the reminder. It does not matter all that much as I have a terrific swag of very good support which kinda wipes any downers.
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No problem, have a great day. Lora
Comment from c_lucas
The weatherman has the perfect job. He can be wrong and still get paid. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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The weatherman has the perfect job. He can be wrong and still get paid. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks Charlie you are always a blessing dear bro. Might try and add some more to it later. I got a four today, good ness knows why! Hehe!!
Comment from tony bronk
I don't think this is a dumb poem at all. I really rather enjoyed the warm wit inside of the verse. It is a very charming poem. Tony
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I don't think this is a dumb poem at all. I really rather enjoyed the warm wit inside of the verse. It is a very charming poem. Tony
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks Tony. Appreciate your encouragement. I might add some more verses to it later.
Comment from royowen
A very bright, breezy poem, Geoff, nicely rhymed in abcb rhyme, it is as well done as any poem online my friend and certainly beautifully written and filled with good humour, well done. my friend. Blessings. Roy
Typo (Hales) hails?
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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A very bright, breezy poem, Geoff, nicely rhymed in abcb rhyme, it is as well done as any poem online my friend and certainly beautifully written and filled with good humour, well done. my friend. Blessings. Roy
Typo (Hales) hails?
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Yeah thanks for coming along, bro. I had a couple of correctors on the hail/s hale etc. I looked it up in my Oxford dictionary I got when Graduating from Sixth grade and hail goes for both the frozen balls of ice on the lawn and for calling down a cab or bus so there. All fixed thanks.
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Most welcome dear bro,
Comment from patcelaw
This was a fun read. I see from your story that the weather reports there are sometimes no more reliable there than here. Blessings for a good weekend. Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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This was a fun read. I see from your story that the weather reports there are sometimes no more reliable there than here. Blessings for a good weekend. Patricia
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks Sis lovely of you to come by again. I just made some adjustments but there might be more to do yet.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm on my phone and don't know how to copy and paste. Question when you wrote "hale" did you mean "hail"? Other than that I thought your poem was fun. Keep writing
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I'm on my phone and don't know how to copy and paste. Question when you wrote "hale" did you mean "hail"? Other than that I thought your poem was fun. Keep writing
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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You are probably right I have been given a few corrections. I still get mixed up on a few spellings. There is a joke "What is worse than raining cats and dogs?.....answer Haling buses. The noun is "hale" but it is a play on words meaning hail as in blobs of ice on the grass hehe. It could be a difference in our countries again but I promise I will check it and I appreciate you coming by.
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Fixed the error actually my Oxford Dictionary I was given when Graduating from 6th Grade says "hail" for both calling down a bus or the frozen balls of ice on the lawn so there. Thanks.
Comment from William Ross
a nice write fun and witty about the weather and sometimes how the weathermen are wrong with their predictions of weather. god humorous poem have a great day
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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a nice write fun and witty about the weather and sometimes how the weathermen are wrong with their predictions of weather. god humorous poem have a great day
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2016
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Thanks Bill if I may? Appreciate you coming by. Have had some suggestions for changes. Let you know when they are done.
